Throne of Blood (Dai's aftermath chapter is up!) [250k+ words]

This is something is happening only if i choose the dragon path at the end and then I try to go check of Zero:

chp4 line 2185: It is illegal to fall in to an *else statement; you must *goto or *finish before the end of the indented block.

But I can choose Zero option if I choose another path (advisor or merc) and then I check on Zero :smiley:

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Forgot to say it yesterday, but I can talk to Cyan about her not feeling pain or pleasure due to botched ritual… and afterwards there’s an option to have sex with her. Which she cannot even feel. BRUH

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Yup, indeed there is :wink: and Cy might or might not be a service top/bottom… anything to make their partner happy, hey?

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lol in which part does it happen? I didnt see it i think

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Oooh, more content, excellent! This one has really caught my eye. I admit, simply because of the early scene with Dai.
Also that Dai is basically the kind of character I enjoy as well. She has made me wonder what a female Zero could look like… but that’s just a whimsical thought! I imagine there are reasons for the fact at least Zero will always be male.

It was nice to be able to read into chapter 3 and 4… last I played it was still only up to 2. Getting a glimpse at the things our protagonist can do was quite interesting… curious to see what sort of things this could lead to.

Speaking of, do you have an idea of how many chapters you intend this story to be? No need to answer if you’re unsure, of course!

In terms of issues, I’d say nothing major. There’s the occasional messed up gender flag for the knights, but unless I end up in a scene where like, sudden Dai or Cyan have a dick in a tender moment unknowingly…

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Hahahha don’t worry, the last part won’t happen, I promise! This error mostly happens because when I write, I forgo the variables and just use ā€œheā€ because it’s way easier. I edit it later on, and I tend to miss so many of them.

As for chapters, it’s SUPER loose at the moment but there are at least 10 more. I’m hoping to hit at least 400k.

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Aaah, that’s fair! I sort of wondered on that, but I suppose trying to write in the variable is less instinctive then he or she.
Sounds like a nice amount though! Will be interesting to see what kind of things we can do in our reign and such.

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Lastly, here’s Cy for the Cy enjoyers!


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I just tried out most of the demo, accidentally reloaded the save and lost my playthrough in chapter 4 though, will have to replay it some time, but I actually am excited to, wanting to see how a few decisions might change things even if slightly

I liked it a lot, stories involving demons are always interesting and I love the characters of each of the guards, Dai is the best, but all of three of them are great

Honestly, I was expecting a scene where I could interact with the emperor before he died, I thought there would be one when the game asked how I felt about him, but was surprised to find there wasn’t one that I saw
It’s not something I hold against the game, but

The entire story is seemingly happening because of this character and you’re asked how you feel about him, but you never meet him or interact with him, it felt like a bit of missed potential, though I do also understand if it comes later through a memory or never comes up as it’s not important or isn’t something you want to touch on.
Just thought I’d share my thoughts, regardless, I’m excited to see this get updated and will definitely get it whenever it’s finished, it’s well done!

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This choice is broken.

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Hello, loving the wip! I don’t know if anyone’s pointed it out before, but the they/them pronouns need fixing. It has They, Them, Their, Theirs. But you seem to have fitted it to only They, Them, Theirs, making scenes like this look like this;

ā€œDon’t let theirs appearance deceive you,ā€ Dai mutters in response. ā€œI have full faith in them to take the crown. Cyan, if we don’t believe them then who will? It’s our duty to support them.ā€

The brunette’s crossed arms soon loosen and she shakes her head with a fond smile. Dai is a fool, but he isn’t beyond hopeless. The warrior has a keen sense for latent strength, and for him to say that with absolute confidence means that it’s not just his heart speaking. Cyan herself knows that there is more to the princex than meets the eye. So does Zero. Why else would he be here, otherwise?

ā€œZero sees something we don’t,ā€ Cyan says, hunching her back once again so she can focus on the princex and theirs movements.

Oh, and ofcourse the plural grammar issues. They have being written as They has etc.

Also, I can’t believe I set such a fitting name for mc lol

ā€œOh, don’t look so worried,ā€ it approaches you. ā€œI’m Ire,ā€ it points at you with its humanlike fingers. ā€œRage, hatred, anguish. I’m the you that you have cast away. You’ve bottled up all your emotions all this time, hiding them away even from your precious knights, but you’ve never truly removed me.ā€

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I really like it so far! The characters are interesting and I love how we slowly get to see more and more of their backgrounds.

I did notice a issue with the grammar right after selecting the hair color. It says:
whose eyes glow blue, and your have short brown hair.

You’re missing a quotation mark in the dialogue after you meet Cyrus. I chose the you can be honest with me option and this is where it’s missing:
"Your concern is flattering all the same.

When the MC gets cornered with Cyrus while looking for the other two, you’re missing a period:
You close in one of them

After the next *page_break (I chose to kill the imps) there’s inconsistency with the gender of the knights. I chose all dudes, but it says (about Cyrus):
overtaken by her usual indifference as she turns to face you.

When Zero is flying the MC away from a fight, leaving Dai behind, (I chose the option of like hell I’ll leave him to fight alone, and we can’t run forever) It says this:
If you continue surrounding yourself in false pretended that it’s all going to be okay

In the flashback with Dai (they’re in the field and you realize you’re not from the same world) you have this (missing the s on problems):
Did the mortals have problem with discrimination too?

In the next scene, where Dai is fighting, ā€œeyecontactā€ should be two words.

Then, when Zero and Cyrus are sealing the door with scrolls, it says this:
The circular magic circle - (I think all circles are probably circular xD)

Chapter 3 –

I’m playing as a chick, but in the fight where MC freezes time with Rygel in her spare room, it says (after choosing to finish him off instead of force the knights to do it):
you decide that this is your job as a prince.

Chapter 4 –

After Cyrus opens up more about what the ritual took from him (I chose to hug him) it says:
You throw the bedsheet off your body and lunges at him. (you lunges should be you lunge or lunged)

Same paragraph says:
The arms wrapping around his shoulders certainly isn’t something he expected (arms isn’t should be arms aren’t – arms is plural so verb needs to be too).

a few paragraphs down it says:
the realisation of what awaits you loom heavy. (realization loom should be realization looms).

it says:
Those cubi hefought (missing a space)

another spot with gender inconsistencies (chose being a chick and it says):
More so than the other princes,

after talking about hiring people (for restructuring the castle) it says:
those who answers to no one (those is plural answers is singular)

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Thanks for your feedback guys! I’ll go through them and fix accordingly :heart:

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This one exactly my type of game wanted to play as a demon royalty for a long time now and cyan definitely got the charm :two_hearts:

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Chapter 4 on dd doesn’t seem to load

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Really like so far

Hell everyone ^^ Chapter 5: Zero has been added. I will start working on Dai’s chapter after this. As usual, please yeet me your feedback and bug reports. Much appreciated!

Word count: 46k+

  • Go on an adventure with Zero!
  • Visit the snowy island south of the continent, Haerus
  • Learn more about the plights of the dragons
  • Meet an unexpected ally that will aid you throughout your journey
  • Blossom your romance with Zero, if you so wish, and potentially get down and dirty with him
  • Discover what the mortals are hiding. They’re crafty and certainly can’t be underestimated!
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Hmmm yes demons, killing, sounds good…

…RABBIT GIRL?!

You had my curiosity, but now you have my interest!

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Heyo on Line 1185-1188 of the chapter 4 doc you have the flavor text for cy_forgiven swapped. So if you forgive them the game treats it as if you didn’t and vice versa.

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It won’t let me pass the point of asking questions about the dragons and it gives me an error.