The day everything changed began with a simple decision: to save a stranger. But what you didn’t expect was the offer that followed: an impossible exchange of bodies, a chance to step into their life.
But what awaited you on the other side wasn’t just strange, it was bizarre in ways you never could have imagined.
What dark truths lie ahead? will you ever be able to return to the life you once knew, or will you embrace your new identity?
Note: You get to choose the gender of the main character ( the gender of the person you are going to replace on the other world )
Genres: Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Dark Romance, Mystery.
ROs: I am planning to have 5 ROs, but they are still in the process of being written.
Update Log
I’ve fixed many grammatical issues, thanks to everyone who helped identify them. However, I will still go through another round of examination to make it even better. ( 20/06/2022)
thank you for your feedback , i found out i forgot to mention ’ text name ’ on the choicescript-stat , i changed it for now .
i am going to wait for more feedbacks and post the update , thank you again
Some small errors I noticed: some sentences start with lower case; many times the I pronoun is in lower case; there is a small typo on the word sarcastic (it is written sacrastic on one of the choices).
Thank you, i appreciate it .
I will make sure to correct what you have noticed , and also sometimes i just type so fast on the keyboard that i switch some letters so i hope you’ll understand, anyway i am really glad you liked the story.
It’s tough but it’s worth repeating. The grammar and spelling of this game needs so much work that it eclipses everything else about it. Every single line has at minimum two massive glaring grammatical or spelling issues. These issues seem to be consistent throughout: lack of capitalisation of the first words of sentences, punctuation in the wrong place and with extra spaces added in, words run through a spell checker once but not checked individually resulting in errors like “petty” instead of “pretty”, and common mixups like its/it’s and so on.
My suggestion is:
Ask for extra help from your English teacher.
Start from ground zero on English grammar. Go back to basics. Subject, predicate, capitalisation, punctuation, everything.
Look at how it’s normally done in professionally-published English work and try to emulate that style as closely as you can.
If you’re still struggling after all of that, try The Elements of Style by Strunk & White as a last resort. It won’t be much use unless you’ve already spent a long time trying all the other steps.
Thank you for sparing some of your time to stop by, I appreciate your comment and all those who helped indicate the problem, honestly English is my third language but I love it and I didn’t guess it might be lacking this much in grammar
But I am working hard these days on your advice and I hope my hard work would pay off .
Thank you all.
You have an intriguing premise. Your writing style isn’t what I usually see here and it’s a nice change of pace IMO.
I suggest using Grammarly to help with editing Honestly, knowing that English is your third language makes your writing all the more impressive. Good luck with the story!
so i hope you’ll understand, anyway i am really glad you liked the story.
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Honestly, knowing that English is your third language makes your writing all the more impressive. Good luck with the story!