The Wayhaven Chronicles: Book One (WIP)

@squarelyblue

I haven’t gotten it up at all; I was surprised to see Manson so interested in taking his original action a step further because of it. :sweat_smile:.

And after replaying the scene with the others, I can safely say that Felix/Farah is the best bro ever. Especially when Ava was done and the gun was brought up once more :laughing: (thank you for that @Seraphinite; it made my day.)

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Sounds cool! I normally don’t look for face claims, but when I get really invested and have a clear idea of the MC in my head, I try to look for something :smiley:

A question can we romance Tina Poname your fellow police officer?

Just finished the playthrough and gotta commend you on a job well done! I literally got to the end, where MC shakes hands with Murphy, when I realized it was done, I groaned “AW, C’MON!” aloud. I’m so excited to get to the next part :slight_smile:

The love options had me torn, too, so kudos to that. So far, I’ve been going for Adam (something about that tough guy business always gets me lol I wanna make 'em crack), though I definitely know this game will have multiple playthroughs for me due to all the possibilities, and not just for the love interests. I was very much tempted by Farrah (she was always making me laugh) and Nate (trying to be the voice of reason and tell MC about who they really were…swoon!), and I’m intrigued by Morgan.

I’m also very worried about Tina. She’s lovely, and I thought she was an option, too, at first, though I’m happy she just seems to be a close friend. Gotta say that I liked Verda, too, for some reason. I’m looking forward to interactions later with Bobby, since I made him my ex! The relationship between MC and her mum was also interesting, now that we know her connection to the team, and I wonder where that’ll go.

Your writing has a way of making me feel invested in the characters. I really look forward to the next installation!

@MasterChief117John - I’m not 100% sure how long Book One is going to be yet :smiley: The plan I have has differed quite a bit when it comes to actually writing it. The whole series I have planned out for seven books.
Tina Poname is just your old partner and close friend- the only romance options are the four vampires :slight_smile:

@Kimberlee_DaRosa - I like to put the important choices in there :wink: One of my testers had the most trouble choosing their outfit over anything else!

@Samthane - The coat scene with Adam leads into the romance bit- it’s only a little scene, as I want to build the romances up slowly, I also don’t want people to feel their committed to the RO at that point. Just a chance to explore the romances, and see what they might be like before actually choosing who you want to pursue. (Very pretty lady, btw!)

@Okami-Nora - Writing the Mason/Morgan scenes was great fun, but the hardest to do out of all of them! :smiley: I’m so glad you enjoyed it! (M’s approval is the hardest- they have less points to score than the others, but I wouldn’t worry too much for this book, you guys have plenty of time to build up friendships :slight_smile: ).

@maysilee - Aah, thank you so much! I’m so glad you liked it, and that it’s something you want to play through for the different variations :slight_smile: It’s so nice to know that the other characters also drew you in!

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Also forgot to say this main thought as well after the other Bobby scene:

I’ll give credit for Bobby not directly approaching Lupin after he had tricked Doug into spilling some information about. As a reader, I can at least admit that the little cowardly Chihuahua was smart enough to not be anywhere close to Lupin when he was gloating about the information he managed to get from one of his own people.

But it does not spot Lupin from hating his guts for causing more potential panic among the people that Lupin is doing his best to protect (and I actually felt pissed off and riled up for my Detective when Bobby was making references about their past relationship and using petnames. I was like 'Boy, you have no right to be acting all familiar with Lupin after the stunt you pulled in the past AND what you did in the present, when he’s actually doing SOMETHING to help the town, rather than just spreading rumors cause a ruckus).I want karma to bite him. HARD AND SOON. :rage: Kinda curious about how the group will react when they may encounter Bobby as well (feel like he’d be most scared of Manson for some reason).

And I’m a little surprised that we don’t have a chance of confronting Douglas to give him a little lecture about how careful he needs to be with his words, ESPECIALLY when they involve reporters that may seem like they are fishing for information for unknown reasons and a delicate case like the one we are currently handling.

@Seraphinite

Also, I enjoy the range in which the interest can be expressed, like whether the detective is the bold/confident type to make the first move, or is more subtle/careful (even shy) when expressing interest unknowingly. When i played the scene with Lupin and Manson the first time through and Lupin reacted with shyness to the close contact which peaked Manson’s interest to pursue the action further, my exact thought was 'I feel like Lupin just caught a hunting wild animal’s interest. And I’m not sure how much of a good thing that is :sweat_smile:".

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What dose that mean full demo released

@Harley_Robin_Evans

That we get a bigger peek at the story than we had before (at least, that’s how I see the updated demo as).

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squeals in delight Ava you beautiful creature you! I ended up romancing ava more then Nat in this play through. Omg so tense :joy:. And now I kinda hate you for that cliffhanger! Nuhhhhhhh! Ava rescue me!!!

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Okay so now that I’ve played through the demo way too many times to admit and attempted to take a nap only to think about it too much, I have returned with actual opinions.

Is gud.

Was a little disappointed I couldn’t wear a hoodie or have a lovely gamer set up but those are such small things. It’s like how I feel kinda disappointed over how almost none of the stories on here let me wear glasses. Wish I had perfect eyesight like all my characters! D: But like I said, small things.

I can definately feel the build for each relationship. Left me wishing I could read the entire thing. I mean the whole entire thing. All of the books! So thats obviously a good thing. I enjoy the wide variety of reactions to a given situation, I usually go with the awkward blushing sort of thing, true to life you know? lol.

Something I did wonder though was in the scene where Farah uses her pheromones to cover up the MC’s scent, wouldn’t the MC have more of a reaction? Since Morgan basically did the same thing and it had a pretty drastic effect. Even if the pheromones weren’t being used directly on her, other scenes suggest the MC would still be aware…

Um… I had more to say but I’ve totally forgotten all of it now… Stupid brain.

Also still haven’t figured out my hair colour… which shade of brown?! This is going to haunt me for the rest of my life I think.

Needs more Canadians though lol :stuck_out_tongue:

100/10 - Would become obsessed with own hair colour again.

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Ava is bae
Morgan is bae 2

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Farah for my lifelong love. Irl

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@Okami-Nora - Yeah, Bobby is not a nice character :smiley: Always a bit uncomfortable when I write them! As for Douglas, I imagined the Police Captain would probably deal with him- delicately, of course :wink:
I’m really glad you liked the options for the flirting. I did wonder if it was going to be worth the effort to put in the different ones, but I’m enjoying writing out how the romances will play out with the different ways of going about them!

@Harley_Robin_Evans - Yeah, it just means the complete demo of seven chapters. There was only three chapters before :slight_smile:

@Vanessa_Pang - Yeah, that cliffhanger… but, then, that’s what demo’s are all about, right? :wink:

@Kimberlee_DaRosa - I’m really glad you liked it, even with the niggles. As for your question - Mason/Morgan is a… special case. The MC also only reacts to M’s pheromone usage during the scene with Kate (grieving mother), too. Dundundun… :smiley: Mousey brown, that’s always my go-to!

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Thanks for the full demo!! I’ve been a fan of your work since “Diving in Deep,” so I’m genuinely happy to see a longer demo on this project :smiley: So far everything looks good to me. I like how depending on who you flirt with, the dialogue changes pretty well :slight_smile: Gotta quick question though, will you be keeping the “show/hide” relationships stats button? Personally I like having it, since its pretty helpful :grin:

Regardless congrats on all the work! :relaxed:

I keep on falling for Nat more and more :heart:. That was such a good spot to put the cliff hanger. Especially if the MC didn’t call to leave a message. I love the tension!
I had to keep on loading my saves to try out all the interactions. I’m so excited for more! :ok_hand:

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That cliffhanger tho. :smirk: Nice. Very nice.

Jeez, this game is good! I really cannot wait for the rest~ I noticed the bars for the stats and it made me very happy. Then I saw the flirt/friendly points…
my MC is totally not making any friends anytime soon :sweat_smile: Zero for both stats and for all people. I am kind of proud for some strange reason, though. XD

But will that be something that can hold you back further into the game? Not getting points for them?

I just finished my first playthrough of the update and can I just say how excited I was when I got the notification! Like, it was 2am and now, here I am at 4am, still excited and reeling from the cliffhanger! :smile:

I was hooked the entire time! The story is really engaging, I especially loved keeping the boys on edge because of Ripley’s (my OC) reluctance to let any of her suspicions go :joy: The choices you gave were also diversified and it definitely let me create the character I had in mind, so it was an immersive experience as well! I really appreciate the fact that every choice actually went into shaping our characters and their stats. None of them felt like fillers to me, which is :revolving_hearts::dizzy::fireworks:

I loved the characters as well! They felt real and that just made it easier for me to be invested in them and make up stories with my OC! Verda? 100% banter central with a dash of “I’m gonna steal your coffee whenever I’m at your desk” because that’s their thing. Tina? Love her. Survived a lot of drunken Ladies’ Nights together. I had such a hard time choosing a romance too, I love Adam and Nate, and I can’t wait for the love triangle to happen :wink:

Gosh, I can already imagine my Ripley all glam-ed up on a cold day, lounging on her thrifted Eames sofa as she downs some hot green tea and flips through her latest issue of Vogue, trying to keep her mind off a certain agent (or should I say, agents :kissing_heart:) while waiting on Tina to text her the details of another soon-to-be wild night.

Okay, I’m getting sidetracked! But as you can see, I clearly have no trouble getting immersed in your story :grin:

I guess the only thing I would ask is, will there be more chances to build our relationship with the team? I spent too much time romancing Adam and Nate that I ended up with a +1 flirt with Mason and 0 for Felix lmao :joy: (but that doesn’t mean I don’t love Mason and Felix because trust me, I do!)

Honestly, it’s not much of a surprise how much fun I had because I’ve played The Lady’s Choice (one too many times) so I knew I would be in for a great time! It’s clear how much thought, love and time you put into the games you develop :heart: (I’m still not over Guy’s route tbh)

But yeah, I can’t wait for what comes next! You did an amazing job as always!!! :champagne:

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I love this book so much. I noticed a few grammar mistakes though. I am sorry I can’t point it out to you I was so enchanted by your story that I didn’t really care about one or two mistakes.
I wonder when will the full game be posted on hosted games I suppose?
I am so excited and to think that there is probably more books to come judjing by the title of it.
As for the love triangle idea I adore a good love triangle unfortunately I was too focused on getting Adam to like me and solving the case.
I guess I just adore characters like him, I kinda imagined him to look like Steve Rogers (Captain America) lol.
Your writing style is fantastic, I aspire to write like you do some day.

The only thing I’m not feeling is the romance

Tbf full blown noticeable romance just cant be a thing at this moment. We’re just testing the waters now for each RO after all !

Im wondering when and how that love triangle is/will go. Would you need equal flirt points with each or?