Yup, this is very important
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Obrigada! I spreak English and Portugese brasileiro but I am a German and it’s been some time since I enjoyed a reading in portugese. I am not able to give you help with that because I am not versed enough but I will enjoy reading both versions.
For the English one.
I didn’t read everything already posted but you have a lot of text there. The pacing seems a little odd.
I know you try to introduce the new world and anime but the time skip fells strange.
I feel like you throw us into a new situation and and then before we can get acclimated you throw two flashbacks in there.
Maybe think about letting the player play out one of the flashbacks in more detail. It could help establish a better immersion in the story and help to get to know/set the mc.
I love you premise and hope you have fun writing it 
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Oooh, interesting! I like that you made it available in two languages. The pacing is a bit off but since it’s still a work in progress I don’t mind it too much.
He, I wonder how mc will adapt to this world.
One thing I wanted to mention, if you pick the Netherlands as country of origin it says that mc is a Netherlander. I’ve never heard anyone say that. “I am Dutch” is what we usually say.
It also goes for nationality. Nationality = Dutch.
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Ooh okay! I was a bit confused when I searched for the Netherland nationality and put Netherlander xD
Thanks! I will change it 
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Thank you very much for the feedback! ^^
Yeah, that’s so many things to fix yet in the introduction. I’m working on it before progressing with the story.
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This update was supposed to come out yesterday, but I had some problems. I’m sorry!
The exclusive conversations with the taxi driver are important for the world building. With the new save and load system, you can take a look in all of them.
And that’s it! 
I’ll start writing the first day of the game, also known as “day 0” now ^^
Thanks for checking in!
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The name caught my attention. Reminded me of an actual anime that I watched a while back. Super excited to see the rest of your ideas 
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Adorei encontrar um pouco de língua portuguesa nesses fóruns! Me senti até mais alegre com essa representação! Já tenho 3 anos que acompanho o CoG e Hosted games, é realmente inspirador encontrar autores que não tenham medo de arriscar em escrever e publicar sua história em sua língua natal! Sei que os trâmites são muito dificeis para publicar a versão em 2 línguas, fora também que o Português não é uma língua muito “acessível”, digamos assim. Enfim, desejo todo sucesso do mundo pra vc @ZCometa e que não desista dessa obra que com certeza só tem a melhorar nos próximos capítulos! Boa sorte!
Obs: Sua atitude também me fez refletir se eu teria essa capacidade de publicar uma história de minha autoria por aqui 
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Seu jogo tá foda ein irmão
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Bom começo! Eu não tenho coragem de escrever um jogo assim em Português, mas fico feliz que alguém esteja escrevendo. Quero ver onde vai dar, boa sorte!
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Good start! I’m not brave enough to write one of these games in Portuguese, but I’m glad someone is. Excited to see where it goes, best of luck!
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Lemme take a shot (or two).
- Rakudai Kishi no Cavalry
- Roku de Nashi Majutsu Koushi to Akashic Records
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100 % Chivalry of a failed knight. 
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it’s similar to Mahouka Koukou no Rettousei (The Irregular at Magic High School). class and rank based on magic power, class discrimantion, weak protagonist but actually godly. Rettousei could also translated as “poor student(poor in academics)” or “lower level student”.
The Poor Student at Magic High School…
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Well now my excitement just multiplied by a whole lot. Good luck writing.
So pretty much every anime ever 
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highly advanced technology with magic application theory.
One Punch Man would like to have a talk with you😂
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We all know if we were isekaied to another world, we wouldn’t be the badass or overpowered protagonist and would likely have to start off as a weak support or irrelevant side character who is likely to get one to no scenes.
I never watched Roku de Nashi, but yeah, this universe looks a lot like that anime in some ways xD
