Aw man now you got me all curious!
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@Alexia9848 Ah yes, it’s working then 
Almost there!
@Takashi_Shin Yeah! Hope it’ll be worth the wait!
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Like now how is villain is it king from first chapter
@Takashi_Shin You’re about to find out! 
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Me be 
-ed. 
… 
-ted?
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-ted? 
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Very good writing. Love this game so far. My only problem is that your english is way to good. I have serious problem to understand some things cause I’m not a native english speaker.
like what is “make a wing”(or something like that. You know in the Dream/inn scene) even supposed to mean. I’m clearly to dumb for this. (not criticism at all. Really love that because now I’m reading really more carefull and lose myself in the story)
@Bizimo Yeah, I know I can get a bit wordy sometimes… But I can’t help it 
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No harm done. It’s great. That way it feels less like you are reading a Fanfiction and more like you are reading a novel. Absolutly love that. You are a great author. Im really hyped for chapter 4
Maybe it just to late to read this wonderful Novel.
(3 a.m. hardly got enough sleep yesterday. Wanted to sleep today early but found this. Thanks for keeping me up. I mean it! I’m mad at you. a bit. a very bit. I forgive you if you keep up with that project)
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camp
I think one ‘back’ is enough
Remove it
Also ‘and the back of his head’ is repeated.
Since we still don’t know our background, instead you can use ‘village’.
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Remove ‘go’
him
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That’s not my name…it’s my mule
@Morgan_V
Btw…can we collect more than one stone or we only get to have one stone only?
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@Sailendranath_Murmu Woohoo, that was some grade A bug finding! THANK YOU SO MUCH! I have corrected the mistakes and will upload the fixed version along with Chapter 4. Again, thank you, you rock! 
As for the Soul Stone, no, you can only get the one and there are very specific reasons for that that will be revealed later on!
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I don’t know why but for some reason Straasa seems dangerous
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I’m just about to start chapter three and I thought everyone was late teens even though Morkai has facial hair but thats good to know that they are older. I’m assuming Straasa is around the same age as Morkai? because of them being childhood friends but this also means that I can say my mc is in her twenties like I am.
@Lola Oh no, they are early thirties! Morkai is 33 and Straasa is 32. And your MC can definitely be in her twenties!
Also, that’s not a typo, the MC is opening and closing her mouth without saying anything, you know, like a fish! I think I’m so funny
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I like the book. I like the NPC’s. I love the hateibility (not sure if that’s a word, but spell check isn’t having any problems with it) of the villians. What I don’t care for is the damsel in distress feeling that my character gives off with their thoughts after meeting Strassa and Friend. I accept their help because of the tactical advantage of numbers, but my character would never admit, even to himself that he needs their help, and I doubt he would consider killing some scum bag bounty hunters in self defense murder. Still love the story just offering a character life view choice that I feel was missing.
@Dartknight I’m glad you like the book and the NPCs! I love that you love the villains, haha!
I think that if you choose the less friendly options in the conversations, the MC can be more cynical towards Straasa and Morkai, even say that they’re just using them.
I remember writing something like that, lol.
But yeah, there is a damsel in distress feeling cause you basically are a damsel in distress in the beginning. But that will fade away as the MC levels up, so to speak.
Also, for the record, the bounty hunters were trying to intimidate you, but it’s always the MC that becomes violent first, lol. Is it self-defense if you make the first move?
But yeah, I know that the MC can have too much of their own character at times
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how old are we The soul stone war
@Takashi_Shin You can roleplay that for yourself, but the way I have it in my mind, you can be anywhere from 18 to 32-33.
That’s the way I’ll have the characters react to you at least
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well like play my age so be 19 but I will be 20 in next month 
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