If you’re going to complain about someone’s grammar, try and have good grammar yourself. 
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Dang bro. Way to rip on our boy Spider. It’s called a WIP for a reason 
and some people like parodies
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hello
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Even flawed man is entitled to Critisize flaws of others.
Its less ripping and more of tough love, I genuinely hope to help Spidey.
@Qwtdr that isnt done here according to rules, better delete the post.
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…People like me! 
I can’t wait till the next update, haven’t played this one yet, as waiting till the full chapter is complete, but I love how over the top it is, it has me literally lolling all the time .
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We don’t do that here
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Hey man. Sorry for not responding sooner! School started back again and I have been kinda busy choosing my major, getting acclimated to the campus and everything else. I do apologize for the late response.
My grammar is atrocious? I’m sorry if you feel that way. I don’t publish any of my chapters without proofreading it so it must be a glitch in the coding or something else that may be spelled differently. Can you perhaps point out examples of poor writing?
??? I honestly have no idea what you are trying to say here. Are you saying its a problem for the fake guns being NERF guns, instead it should be PAINTBALL guns or something else? I’m really lost here. If that IS the case, I also don’t understand why Nerf guns can’t be used in this scenario.
Lol. I don’t think ANYONE will ever figure out my purpose in writing this story. Is it just simply humorous writing? Or am I making fun of the presidency and politics? Hmm… Guess you guys have to stick around till the end 
No offense here, but I feel like we are speaking two different languages. I literally have no idea what you are saying, or what the problem is.
Can you elaborate???
WHAAAA?!?!? Bro, seriously I am not joking, I cannot understand you at ALL. Whatever do you mean???
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I kinda felt that way to but apparently it was all in good meaning… Appreciate it bro 
My mom used to say “the pot can’t call the skillet black”… I’ll let you guys figure that one out…
Awww! I love seeing you around here 
appreciate all the love @CreepyPastaKittyFay. I love making people laugh/be happy and I guess that’s working out for me, I GUESS. Lol.
I love memes. Carry on 
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The paintball part is that, if you’re checking for whether the President (Secret Service agent) has been “shot” then you can tell because of the splash of paint, but because Nerf darts just fall to the floor (and Velcro is pretty terrible), so in reality, for accuracy purposes, paintballs make more sense.
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They used paintballs to shoot Jay leno in The Professional. I don’t think you can ever fake a shooting with Nerf they’re silent, foam, and Technicolor … I haven’t played this update but if it’s supposed to be a fake out assassination paintball with red paint would be best.
Edit: I officially position for The option of being an musician or entertainer before getting into politics and the outfit of Sequined bodysuit. So I can play president Sexbang as seen here
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Nerf Gun doesnt work for Reasons mentioned above, and it also make general look Childish having collection of nerf guns, while paintball guns would still be fun quirk and make sense.
As for the Dialogues you write 40s year old general like he is 21 year old student. It doesnt fit the character tone simply doesnt fit. 40s year old general is going to behave differently than 21 year old student even when having fun. Your tone makes me think of Frat party rather than Administration just being human.
Russian Names, You Used First name and Patronym instead of First Name Last name russians use in official context.
Patronym being Name after father so if your father is named Alexander Dobrovský for example then you might be Anton Alexejevic Dobrovoský.
The Middle name The Patronym is used between friends, Check wiki for russian diplomats and Check What name is there.
The poland joke was that Im done with part of this and more is to follow.
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Nerf guns are cheaper than paintball guns, so I suppose it would be more logical to use them.
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Nerf Guns are unreliable, short range because styrofoam doesn’t fly far, and you don’t feel them if they hit. Having finished the updated version and knowing the context. Paintball or BB guns BB especially if you’re trying to describe them as hand guns like when you get cornered.
Nerf
Paintball
BB
Also I’m guessing by the tone of the game there’s going to be no consequences at home at least for a single mom president reaching in her secret service agents pants, giving naked interviews and making out with reporters, and likely reaching the mile high club in chapter 3.
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@dungeon_master
In chapter 1.
You sigh and look up at your VP, Penny,who is behind the slightly open door, their head
The bolded word should be: {vphim}
In the choice: “Penny you know you can just call me Samuel. No need to be so formal around here.”
You chuckle and grin at them.
The bolded word should be: {vphim}.
When choosing goals for the upcoming 4 years.
Leagalising Drugs
Legalising
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I can kind of understand what @CaesarCzech was getting at with the “humor turned parody” thing. The way the discription for the WiP is written it makes it seem like a serious political game with some humorous aspects, rather than a full blown parody. Plus the tones of some of the interactions didn’t match the others (your first interaction with the press vs. the whole nerf dart episode). I’m not saying that you can’t write the way you want, I’m just saying that the game feels a bit all over the place in terms of tone and what to expect.
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Those poor girls killed in a drone strike what does the nudist president who’s making out with a reporter and high five the cameraman have to say about this tragedy?
I honestly expect to end up in a daisy chain with my VP, the reporter, and my secret service agent at some point lol.
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Yo careful what you type you had me choking on my own hair over here and in other news this book/game is freaking fun and keep up the good work @Spyder 
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After the reaching into our secret service agents pants getting them turned on do we still get a “young adult” tag?
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I think it’s safe to say that this game is firmly MATURE. Read at ur own risk 
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Aww dang. How did u know I was gonna do that???
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