The Lost Bride

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:drop_of_blood:The Lost Bride:drop_of_blood:is a reimagining of Bram Stoker’s iconic novel, Dracula.

Play as Mina and shape her fate. You will have the freedom to customize her name, sexuality, personality, and relationships with everyone you meet.

:drop_of_blood:Summary :drop_of_blood:

Congratulations, you got engaged. How you feel about it is up to you.

Shortly after your engagement, your fiancé sets out on a journey to the distant lands of Transylvania, a real estate opportunity that proved too irresistible to decline.

With your wedding temporarily on hold, you don’t hesitate to respond when your childhood friend Lucy implores you to pay her a visit, seeking your company and counsel with an urgent matter concerning her very own future.

Even since you arrived, you have been sick with constant nightmares and strange dreams. Not only that, but it always feels like your every move is being watched.

Why do you keep feeling like that? Why is Lucy acting odd?

Who is this mysterious figure you keep seeing?

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:drop_of_blood:There will be four romance options for you to choose. :drop_of_blood:

Jonathan Harker (M): Your sweet fiance who is currently in a land far away from that of your own.

Lucy Westenra (F): Your childhood best friend whom you share a past with.

Van Helsing (M/F): An experienced and knowledgeable Dutch doctor with a wide range of expertise.

Dracula :bat: (M/F): A mysterious and charismatic Transylvanian noble with dark secrets.

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Eyy! It’s out :heart: :heart: :smiling_face_with_three_hearts: Congrats!
It’s a lovely piece of gothic romance :smiling_face:

:face_with_monocle: Now for me to once again decide if I simp for all of them or if I can make up my mind at all…
I fear I won’t be able to decide this time either…

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Omg! I have been thinking about this game for so long! I’m so happy to see it back!!!

Now excuse me while I go throw myself at Dracula’s feet. Or maybe Van Helsing!!!

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Looks like a promising start.

One thing I’d do is, if your betrothal is an unwanted one, explain how it came to be that Miss Murray got into the mess with Jonathan in the first place.

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Alright, I gave it a read. Hope you don’t mind if I give my thoughts on it.

First things first, I love the timeless feel of the writing. It’s like reading something victorian? It has that vibe.

Second, I like the options for how you feel about Jonathan. I am curious how this will evolve as the story progresses. Like will you be able to fall in love with Jonathan later on if you are friends?

Also he is a treasure of a man!!

Lucy is very adorable and likeable and I would give her the world if she asks!

And that cliffhanger is diabolical :sob:

Found some typos, but very minor things. Overall I love it and can’t wait for more.

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I’m enjoying what’s here so far, but as others have voiced, it would be nice to get some more background to Mina’s relationship with Jonathan. As someone who plays a Mina who hates the idea of being with him, it would be nice to know what lead to the engagement since it would have to be a special case for Mina to chose to be with him if she hates the idea of being with him.

On another note though, I appreciate our ability to name Mina ourselves. In previous Dracula IFs that hasn’t been an option, and while I did enjoy those stories, it’s so much better to me when I can name a protagonist in a story myself. It makes the story that much more immersive.

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Glad to see this posted! While it isn’t for me, as I am not comfortable playing femMC, it is wonderfully written. I wish you all the best!

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God, I can’t wait for Dracula to break me

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First of all, ty everyone for the support :smiling_face: :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:

Oh, you will get that in future chapters no worry.

Ofc nah!!

Ofc hehe even MC who hates him can fall for him later.

hehe next chapter soon

Btw have some art of D! The looks of any art I post is not canon!!

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love it already!! keep up the good work

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Ty ty!! :smiling_face_with_three_hearts: :smiling_face:

Cuz I forgot here also one of Lucy! Remember, no canon!!

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Sorry, that Lucy is now canon.

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Such a cruel cliffhanger. Is it bad I want to kick Dracula’s butt? :sweat_smile:

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Does this have any relation to Wilhelmina?

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ofc nah! They are evil after all lol

Nah it doesn’t

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That’s little surprising to hear, as structurally both demos are extremely similar. Yours is extremely well-written, but if there really is no connection between these two demos at all, I have some concern regarding the resemblances.

  • Both Wilhelmina and The Lost Bride begin with the MC (referred to henceforth as Mina for ease) riding in a rocking, hectic stagecoach/carriage on the way to visiting Lucy
  • In both stories, as Mina rides in the stagecoach/carriage, she has flashbacks to interactions with Jonathan, her fiancee that she may or may not love depending on player choice
  • Both stories feature a gender-swappable Van Helsing and Dracula as love interests
  • Lucy greets Mina with a hug in front of the estate immediately upon arrival. At the same time, Mina has a strange supernatural experience with someone or something watching her.
  • Mina has a locket with an image of a loved one in both games, the shared options being Jonathan, Lucy, and her parents.

If it’s just coincidence, I totally get it. But I think it’s important to note that as it could give readers familiar with both demos the wrong impression.

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I see the resemblance between the demo Wilhelmina and this one, but I am still super excited for this wip. I missed the other demo since I read it and this is a good revamping of it. I really enjoyed it and thought it was well written. I look forward to the continuation of it. But I request save slots. Makes playing easier as the story gets longer. So I figured I’d ask while the demo was smaller.

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Hi and sorry if this feels rude.

Well there is a storm raging outside and the driver is going at full speed which I think it is not in the old demo. This was me trying to get the vibe of J in the movie when he was vising the castle.

Also in most books and movies Mina goes to visit her which is not smth new.

Well this is a great point to establish the rel early which cannot be done later cuz you already meet them soon after.

Sorry I don’t understand why that matters? No one owns the Ip and the reason I thought they would make good gs ros cuz it can work.

It is well known how Lucy loves Mina. She did come out in the rain and didnt even care. All she wanted was to meet Mina. Not making her hug Mina would have been a strange choice

Also that was a great place to put D there cuz if it wasnt the scene would have been boring

Fair for that one. This might be more on the memory and I don’t remember how it was done in the other demo.

I can’t go read the other one right now cuz it might affect stuff I’m writing.

I think the best thingy right now is to wait to see the others chapters first.

I’m not trying to hide anything here or give wrong impression. since ppl can read both games anyway.

If I did try to go for a copy paste then I would have been the biggest dum dum there is lol

Thank you for your point tho!

For chapter 2 you go out with Lucy and get dresses for a small party she is thrown

In chapter 3 there is a small ball that is happening so lemme know if its the same for the other demo

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Anything adaptation based will surely bring comparisons, but once the story gets further along the differences will become all the more clear.

@Printesa_Carmilla can I ask, would you say you take inspiration from any source more than others? The original book, any particular movie, etc? Any favourites? :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:

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