Try adding /mygame to the end of the url. COG Demos changed the way they did urls.
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The link is now edited on the main post at the top of this page. Thank you for bringing it to my attention!
RIP the lovely click count the link had. Again. 
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Sigh* my obsession begins 
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Don’t worry; with how fun the demo is, it’ll get back up there again, haha.
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Progress Report:
It’s been a while, so I thought I’d check in and let you know how work is going for The Eternal Library.
I’ve reached the middling chapters and am chipping away at one of the routes that leads through chapter five.
Often when starting a story the writing comes easier. When an author nears the midpoint, it can be more challenging to put everything in order. Especially when side quests appear and you’re off writing some obscure detail that wasn’t outlined but will add to the overall depth of the story.
Such is my writing life lately, when I can find time to get words down.
The other thing that helped when I was writing the start of this story is I had a good chunk of time to focus on writing during Christmas break, when I first released the demo. Now, life is so busy I have to sneak in an hour here and there when I can. I’m not complaining. Life is full and wonderfully so. I’ve just slowed down with writing and am flowing with that for now.
My latest worldbuilding quandary: Just how smart are Fae horses?
My latest Patreon post includes insight into some worldbuilding I’m working on: backstory on the Fae horses.
So much of my story process starts with a question the MC asks, and then I’m forced to answer, making it up as I go. If you find such things interesting, check out my latest Patreon post on Fae horses!
I’m still quite happy with the progress being made on The Eternal Library. The public demo is at 95,000 words, and the Patreon demo is nearing 120,000 words. I’ll be updating the public demo again in a couple of weeks.
The mini-update I just released for Patreon subscribers includes a sweet scene with Dorian and another look into Angelina’s life. I know people have wanted more with both characters, and I’ve finally been able to fit that in.
Since this is a slow-burn romance, the romance is drawn out and savored. It’s such fun to let the characters grow closer with deliberate care rather than reckless abandon. I’m enjoying this story in so many ways!
I hope you’re enjoying your weekend. Thanks for following along as I write The Eternal Library! 
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The public demo for The Eternal Library has just been updated! This brings the word count to ~120,000 words. (Demo link can be found in the original post on this topic.)
In this update you get:
- To go on a mission with Dorian, Temphesta, and Leonz,
- OR stay at the castle with Prince Collin, Gemma, Mari, and Sevitas.
- More intrigue and worldbuilding.
- Romantic moments (with more coming as the chapters progress!)
- A scene from Princess Angelina’s POV,
- And much more!
I hope you enjoy the new content! As always, if you want updates as soon as I have them, consider becoming a Patreon subscriber, which gives you access extra worldbuilding, POV scenes, and the latest additions to the game itself.
If you find typos or bugs in the demo, please let me know. And if you enjoy the story, please share it with your friends!
Thanks for following along as I write The Eternal Library! 
I hope you have a wonderful weekend!
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The way I went to replay this yesterday and told myself, no, hold off until the next update so everything is shockingly fresh. Can’t wait to dive in!
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Good to see you! How was your break?
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Congratulations on the update, I hope you’ve been enjoying writing!
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Waaaaaa I’m so excited to play this again! 
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Hm. It seems a bit odd to still be in braids, something I chose because it would be practical when working, at this point. Maybe have an option to change the hair at some point? But thank you, for adding in the choice to have soreness and fatigue and a body that can’t quite keep up with the still foreign instincts and impulses now infusing it.
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I’ve missed a few updates, I think, because indie gaming has been persistently good as of late, but I am returned. And I…
...have THOUGHTS! It's a medical condition, I'm afraid, the doctors say it's untreatable.
Missing “glass” here.
This bit of the sentence is missing a “to” somewhere. Maybe at the end, or start it with “to whom”.
I am disappointed in you that this isn’t “fire, flood, and filching.” 
I think this choice could benefit from an extra two options where you don’t tip your hand to her either way, but would reflect how you really feel.
Wooo, finally, time with fighter girl! 
I have at least one rebellion that says his forefathers weren’t all that great, either, spirit chatter.
“her”
Please tell me you took the jacket off at least, my dude.
Extra space.
So, like, a couple of pages ago spirit chatter says current!Ga’vaan is unworthy of his predecessors, but here you are reinforcing my previously-stated view that previous!Ga’vaans were also, uh, trash? And in the NEXT paragraph you even say THIS Ga’vaan is far from being the worst of the lot.
Suck to be you, bitch, I’ve been fired, you have zero leverage, neener neener. 
“envoys”
Well, it’s past 2 am, so chapter 4 tomorrow. 
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Great! Minor stuff:
-when the sorceress is negotiating with Colin, “Leonz” needs capitalization.
-At one point at the boat part, you misspell “unwavering” with an “i.”
Question: what matricide is this part referring to? I think i missed something!
“ Illastra is not here," observes Leonz.
“She hates Owien as much as I do,” Temphesta says quietly. “Abandoning his heirs after doing her part in matricide is her sense of justice.”
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Yay! Your intuition told you an update was coming. How cool!
Hi! I took a small break then got back to writing, albeit more slowly. Life has been full but lovely, thank you for asking!
Thank you! Writing has been slow but progress is being made. I’m definitely enjoying how things are evolving with the story. I hope your writing is going well, too!
I guess I figured braids would still be practical but fair enough. 
I’ll see if I can sneak another hair option in for those with braids. Don’t think it would be necessary for any of the other hair variables. Glad you like the nod to the fatigue which one would certainly be feeling as the night stretches into morning. I’m tired just thinking about it. 
Oh, fabulous! Thank you for returning and catching so many details I missed!
Nope, you missed nothing. That was my brain switching words when it should be regicide. Definitely my bad. Thank you for pointing that out, and for catching the other typos!
It’s late after a long day, but I will try to get to these mistakes tomorrow. Thanks all for your fabulous feedback!
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Chapter 4 time!
Summary
Bold of you to assume the kith would care, considering the king’s stunt.
Khanna spends so much time inside the closet that PLEASE tell me she’s going to turn out to be gay, just for the lols. 
She’s also very clearly the smartest person in her entire family:
“as” is already an equivalency, you don’t need it when you have that “equally” there. Also, very sad about these two, I’m heartbroken, is the funeral going to be catered, I’m hungry, when’s lunch?
Well, yes. There’s always plenty of royalty; you put two of the things together and they just keep making more, and then you have to call the exterminator and it’s a whole mess. A good cook, on the other hand, is hella hard to find.
I should probably get to work on finding a scabbard for this thing, huh?
There’s no mention of the healer Collin told Dawson he’d request for him. They only get brought up in the next screen and she’s volunteered by La’rast without any prompt whatsoever from Collin.
“another”
I mean, yes? Because Imma be honest, I’m finding it really hard to sympathise with Minare AT ALL through this whole shebang.
Not capitalised.
Missing a “to”
I have news for you, buddy - Khanna ain’t your betrothed. Last thing you heard was a “no” and that hasn’t been rescinded, though I have no doubt that Dawson or Collin will.
Improving IS taking a turn (for the better).
This has always been capitalised so far.
Are you sure you meant “secrecy” here?
Continuity hiccup:
But this is the previous screen and Mari is right there. She even talks.
I don’t know exactly when the hiccup starts, so you’ll want to review this entire scene to make sure Mari’s where she’s supposed to be at all times.
Pretty sure you mean Dawson here, unless this is genre-veering into zombie apocalypse.
Such loss, much sorrow, so bad, these events are catered, right?
Maybe I missed this earlier, but this takes place in the throne room? I must confess to some confusion. Earlier in the scene, you said this room was scarcely used (which is why it was cold), but a throne room should see quite a bit of activity. This should be where the king received envoys and performed pretty much all of his official business that is public. I thought this was like a cathedral expy or something where the coronation took place.
Aaaaaand I’ve reached the end.
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I think I’ve got all the reported typos and made some good changes. Thanks to everyone who posted feedback thus far!
I’ll plan on updating the files after the weekend to avoid interrupting gameplay. If anyone catches anything else before then please let me know. I appreciate you helping me wrangle typos and continuity glitches.
A few notes below for anyone interested (specifically @JBento and @AnneWest).
I couldn’t find a good place to fit a hair choice into the flow of the rescue chapter, so I changed the hair mentions so the wind is pulling at your hair, rather than your braids. That way you can imagine your hair loose or braided and it still works without the mechanics of another choice. Thanks for that suggestion!
Basically the first of Minare’s kings were power-hungry and heavy-handed, leading a mutiny against the empire of Varvash. They conquered Minare and the heavy-handed rule has continued for generations. This is the story about breaking that generational curse, as it were, though I haven’t decided if it’s an actual curse or just the way kings raised their heirs throughout the ages.
I’m wondering if there’s something specific you’re looking for with this line of narrative. Is it missing world building, or too repetitive, or …?
Calling the ancestor’s voice “spirit chatter” is delightful, btw. 
I actually wrote her as leaning that way in the original story 
but I didn’t think of her as in-the-closet until after I’d written the first draft. Like totally didn’t get the connection of what I’d written, probably because I associate wardrobes more with Narnia so I was going for that magical feel.
Regardless, that was all before I created La’rast, who is perfect for her. The tie between the Kitherin and Minare works really well with him and Khanna.
Absolutely. The kitchens take pride in keeping good eats well stocked in times of turmoil.
The thought behind the throne room being seldom used is the king wasn’t doing a whole lot of official business. He basically stopped caring after the queen died, and had taken to having Donled do most of his business and avoiding public appearances when possible. But I’ll just make it drafty and delete the bit about it being unused so as to avoid confusion.
Thanks so much for playing!
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No, no, see, I GOT all this. What I don’t understand is why spirit chatter says current!Ga’vaan is “unworthy of his predecessors”. Like, for him to be unworthy of his predecessors, wouldn’t his predecessors have to be… y’know… good? Because what it sounds like to me is that he is EXACTLY worthy of his predecessors: they all suck.
Thanks so much for writing!
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Gotcha. That makes sense. I’ll reword that bit. Thanks for clarifying!
Edit:
I just uploaded new files but hopefully it won’t effect gameplay. My apologies if it does!
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Thanks for taking the suggestion and working with it!
(Wow, that is not the emoji I intended.)
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So, I really love this. My only critical feedback is that I found there to be a lot of overlap between the Passionate/Stoic opposed stats and the Peaceful/Vengeful opposed stats. Specifically, it could be difficult to tell if a choice was going to raise Passionate or Vengeful, because they’re both indicative of strong emotions. The opposite was true for Peaceful and Stoic choices, which both leaned toward calm.
While the above issue certainly didn’t occur with all of those choices (some were much clearer than others), I think I might just eliminate the Peaceful/Vengeful pair. Barring that, it might be worth revisiting any choices involving the two pairs to add some clarifying language. Unfortunately, that’s probably not a small amount of editing.
Anyway, completely your choice, but it jumped out at me when attempting a Peaceful but Passionate character. Thanks for all the work you’ve done! It’s really a wonderful story, and I can’t wait to see how it progresses.
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