Just a note: if you check the code, you’ll still see faith points, but no worries at all, it doesn’t have an impact on the universal path. I’ve made the necessary changes so they won’t affect your overall experience and I plan to perfect the chapters even more as I continue writing!! 
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If you haven’t done so, I strongly recommend making it a habit to run quicktest every time you update the files on CoGDemos.
Optional feedback: You might want to provide some default names a player can choose from, rather than requiring them to type out a name. It’s one way to add flavor the story. (Plus, I’m pretty lazy to type stuff.)
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Thank you so much for your help and for your feedback. I appreciate you taking the time to explain things to me. It’ll definitely be useful to use Quicktest instead of testing by myself, as it takes a lot of time. I’ll fix the issues on the screenshots now. Thank you again 
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I am really enjoying this story. I am someone who does not mind locked characters, and I’m finding it interesting playing a story where a character’s choices are shaped by their culture and faith. I’m enjoying the set-up being a cooking competition and you are doing a great job of creating tension in the competition.
One of the things I noticed is that most of the time the choices we’re making are about how we feel, or what we observe, or an emotional reaction to something that has happened to us. These can add great nuance, but they can be difficult for a reader to understand how their choices are affecting the story. Are we simply receiving a slightly different flavor text, or are the choices that we’re making changing the plot?
For example, let’s say one of the family members does not support the protagonist going on the show. Our protagonist could have the choice of lying about the show, trying to convince the family member, or being honest but going on the show without support. Each of these options creates a very clear action on our part, that should affect the story. Perhaps we are successful in convincing the family member but at the cost of a good night’s sleep which changes how we compete the next day.
I’m not saying to use this in your story, I’m just trying to give an example of action-based choices, verses feeling based or reactionary choices. I think there would be a benefit to have a mix of action-based choices (outside of just the cooking scenes) that have clearly different outcomes. If the story you are going for is more atmospheric or introspective, and you want less action-based choices, I think it would be helpful to have less stats so we have a clearer understanding of how our feelings are shaping the protagonist.
Take my feedback with a grain of salt, you know the kind of story you’re wanting to tell better than we do. I’m really enjoying the start to this game, the interactions with our roommate are very insightful to our protagonist and I’m curious where things are heading. I’m feeling very pulled into the narrative by your writing style. I can’t wait to read more.
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The premise is super fun! I kind of agree with what has been brought up before regarding some of the cooking choices so far being common sense more than anything else, but otherwise I am delighted that there’s another modern competition if!
One thing I do wonder about is whether MC is always locked into being straight in this if? The description did make it look like you would get to choose (on that note, I would add Adam/Amina in description instead of just Adam as otherwise it just reads as the character being written as a man and being gender-flippable an afterthought). Since the code is not accessible rn I’m not sure if it’s my choices or if the judge is just always the opposite gender. In which case, it would be something to note down in the description of the game as, personally, being locked into being straight does turn me off some games unfortunately and I can imagine that being the case for other people too. Still a fun premise, just a personal preference and it would’ve been nice to know about it in advance!
Best of luck with your writing though, it looks promising so far!
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First of all, I’d like to thank you so much for your feedback, and I’m really glad that you’re enjoying my story so far! Here’s hoping I’ll be able to keep it up until the end, as I’m truly dedicated to finishing it. I’ll do my very best to update weekly with new content!
I think my personality comes through in the story, since I’m a very introspective person myself
But what you say is true, and I loooove the example you gave! I’ll do my very best to add more action-based choices in those chapters and in the upcoming ones.
The outcomes in the story are more tied to the competition itself (you’ll notice that your response to Elias at the end of Chapter One leads to three very different challenges and rivals in Chapter Two).
I’m playing with ifs concerning the MC’s personality, which generally lead to different interactions with others. So I’m definitely keeping your feedback in mind. After Chapter Three, I’ll see which stats aren’t really needed and remove them.
Thank you again for your feedback and for your time. It truly gives me a boost. Bless you
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Oh my—thank you so much, I’m so glad you’re enjoying The Cooking Show. It truly means the world to me. 
I kept in mind the feedback about the cooking choices being too easy, and I’ll do my best to strengthen them and make them more complex as I continue writing and editing. Thank you!
I apologize for not being clear in the description. I wanted to change it, but I think I’m currently not able to edit the topic (if there are mods who could allow me to do so, that would be very helpful). I did, however, update the description in the game itself. I believe you just clicked start thinking it was the same as what was written here, which is fair : I added that the story follows the heterosexual route.
And I understand what you said—I’ll make sure to be clearer from the very start from now on. Thank you so much again for your time and your heartwarming feedback. I truly appreciate it. 
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Most likely because of your trust level. You can ping @moderators here or try messaging one of them directly to get some help with editing your WIP thread.
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Try now.
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As a Muslim, this game was a delight to come across! I still need to finish it, try all the routes but so far I really like it.
Just some lil notes/ suggestions:
- I know we can customise the mc’s appearance, but could we also state whether or not we wear a hijab? I personally like to wear the khimar or al amira due to simplicity.
- Would we have the option of reading prayers before certain actions? Or even saying stuff like ‘Astaghfirullah’, ‘Alhamdulillah’, etc during certain moments
- You could put a lil ‘guide book’ so to speak, in the stats screen about what is permissible and what is not. That way people who are interested in playing the faith-driven route can be more aware of why certain choices would decrease or increase faith
- On a similar note, will islamaphobia be a theme/ topic that comes up? I.e a chef/ judge that looks down on us or thinks we are too ‘ancient‘ or if we’re playing a Muslim woman how ‘of course we would be in the kitchen’ while a Muslim man why ‘our four wives aren’t doing the cooking‘. Or even innocent ignorance, like someone offering us pork/ bacon or alcohol
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Hey, ya oukhty <3 Thank you so much! It makes me really happy to hear that. I truly appreciate you spending your time on my story and enjoying it so far. Also, thank you for your helpful feedback 
Okay I’ll try to add that into the story!
Yes, there will be options for duas, but I planned to make them sometimes instinctive!
Thank you, I’ll definitely do that. (I’ve already planned to explain what some words and lines mean as well!)
That is a great idea. There’s a scene in Chapter Two between MC and Zahra about MC’s modesty, haha! I’ll also develop the Islamophobia issues lightly throughout the story.
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Thank you so much for your help . When I try to save the edits, I can no longer keep the story cover in the topic. I guess it seems that my trust level doesn’t allow me to do that at the moment, too.
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Try now.
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Finally had time to finish the wip lol. Lovely all throughout. I like all the characters so far, interesting cast and plenty of different personalities and dynamics
I obviously played the faith-driven route which I think integrated the values/ culture very well. (I’ve ranted enough about how much i love that aspect so I’ll keep it short)
One lil bugs/ typos I found:
Not only did Zayn change gender, ‘she‘ also has a split personality it seems 
(/lighthearted joking)
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Thank you so much for your feedback, dear, I truly appreciate it
Ooh, about Zayn! I planned to update that there are finally three Romance Options:
• Zayn/Zahra: The Mean Girl/Guy (Enemies-to-lovers)
• Noor/Noora: The Sweetheart (Friends-to-lovers)
• Adam/Amina: The Judge (Forbidden Romance)
I edited that in the first post. They already have a lot of moments together, especially in Chapter Three, so I thought, why not make them romance options too?
As for the switch in personality, it was supposed to be Noor defending the MC, but while editing I made a mistake
Thank you so much again! I’ll do my best to update the story by the end of this week
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UPDATE!
• Chapters 1 and 2: updated! You now have three romance options.
• Chapter 3, Part 1: is OUT!
(The full chapter is available on Patreon.)
I’ll be adding a few more things soon—for example, a set of default names for readers, and some clarifications in the stat screen about the faith-driven path versus the universal one.
But nothing stops you from enjoying the story right now!
Let me know your feedback, or if you spot any bugs.
Thank you!
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During some parts of the game, especially when you first arrive at the building, people address you by contestant number rather than by name. This is… a bit rude. 
While people may be identified by contestant number in production documents and such, they should be addressed by name in face to face conversations and when the show is on-air.
"SubhanAllah,
is this what they call a red carpet?" Your jaw drops.
There is a strange spacing between these two lines. Is this a bug?
Good luck.
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It’ll be fixed. Thanks!
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Update!
4k more words are out on Patreon (Chapter Four Part One)!
Next week, Chapter Three will be available in the demo link, hopefully.
Thank you. Have a nice weekend.
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I genuinely like the stories which we are on reality show, good luck with your project.
Sorry to ask but, is our MC locked to be straight, or do we get to choose someone of same-gender?