I am here to deliver my promise. 
basic typos punctuation errors
Ch 1 (i think)
completely unchanging, Unfortunately, - comma instead of period
Ch 2
"Anyway, something else to pass the time? - missing close quotation (during amity lake)
"We know absolutely nothing, besides what you and Sofie told us. The Guardian Order has plenty of questions, but little in the way of answers. Still, this earth sorcerer could be dangerous, especially if he’s creating Dire animals in the Eterna Forest. This warrants an investigation. – missing end quotations
“I’m ready,” you say, picking Midnight off the floor. Let’s go." – missing quotations before Let’s
"Looks like a witch hunter is looking for me. What do you want? – end quotations
Lanna & Ria sidequest
She does not seem to be entirely clueless, although are still the better baker, working in your own kitchen. It will be up to you to run to show this time. – Although you are & Up to you to run the show
Suddenly, you head an ominous bubbling in the pond behind you. – hear instead of head
Ari gathering sidequest
not difficult to observe her as she swims around, picking up flora and fauna at every step, as well as any other useful materials, on the lakebed. – at every step while swimming?
Alaric Castle Mystery
(upon finding the fellbeast) but it grow stronger as the three of you close in on your target. – grows
Chocolate sidequest
it does not take long to sense a magical aura from within. – forgot to caps the i
Breaking into the Archives
“Sofie and I be meeting Erling,” Gaius says. – will be meeting?
“He’s always bothered by something,” Gaius says. Anyway, goodbye." – missing quotation
After learning about your mom
“It’s not,” you say plainly. "I just want to talk. – missing quotations
Talking to your mom
“Is Amity Lake still around? There is so much I can show you.” With that, her hands glow with magical power." – extra quotation this time lol
Queen hops onto your broom
Has she ridden on one before. – ? instead of a .
Sexy Gaius times
before pulling of his shirt and feeling – off instead of… of 
Sexy Elbrus times
“Are you ready?” Elbrus says teasingly, brushing his hand on your cheek." – Extra quote
odd transition or confusing moments
At the very start
Standard mode - Play the game the way it was meant to be played.
This wording feels condescending 
why have a story mode available if you’re going to say it’s not the way the game is meant to be played
Naming confusion – for some reason I thought the last name was a new first name that the lord chose for you 
I wish I could see my stats sooner! Particularly for picking specializations and such, I worry I’m missing out on important info. I switched to the stat screen so many times during the character builder because I wasn’t sure what any of my choices were actually doing. Playing thru a second time I wouldn’t have this anxiety haha, but it wasn’t clear on a first time play.
Should chapter 2 begin with the start of the new day? Right now it’s click next chapter, more talk from gaius, then click ‘the next day’. It feels like an odd transition
When meeting Mystria
“Liselle, meet Elbrus. Water sorcerer.”
Elbrus gives you a low bow, before taking a seat on a rickety wooden chair.
– Odd transition from handing over half my jewelry to suddenly… being in a room of people, i think?
Alaric Caslte Mystery
Carefully, you put each trinket on, securing the chains and feeling the magical energies coursing through your body each time. No sorceress ever leaves her home, let alone faces a magical problem, without wearing her jewelry.
“Sofie, I’m not done yet,” you laugh.
Was Sofie supposed to say something here?
Going to the tailor with Gaius
Seraphine City is filled with beautiful stone buildings and bustling streets. Unfortunately, the townsfolk are not too enamored by the presence of a sorceress. A powerful magical aura, visible to even the ordinary folk, emanates from you. However, it is nothing more than a mark of evil to the distrustful townsfolk. Dark looks greet you every now and then. Still, this is something you have largely grown used to.
Thankfully, Gaius is by your side, distracting you with conversation. Occasionally, the townsfolk greet you with particularly hateful looks, which Gaius quickly counters with a stern expression of his own. Without him, you would likely be left to the tender mercies of the people all around you.
– Isn’t this the same text as when going to the bakery/a walk in the city with him at the start?
Breaking into the Archives
If I helped Ria on a previous quest, couldn’t she be in on the break into the archives? Or is that the clue she left?
general thoughts, feelings, and vibes
I’m pretty chill with not having a lot of customization for the MC, but because I was playing on carefree mode, I was mostly annoyed by re-entering changing my hair, eye, and skin tan without prompting before certain missions since it really has no practical use.
One thing that got me, though, was a thought I had during the night after getting halfway-ish through the game. I tried to age MC and landed on her being 16… and then I realized I could not disprove this theory. I think part of it is that my random evening scenes were almost exclusively reading fairytales and playing with dolls (at one point playing with dolls 3 nights in a row ) I think some more random scenes that aren’t necessarily domestic or girl-coded would be beneficial. Seriously, I cannot tell you how relieved I was when MC’s mom woke up and did some serious math for me 
In general I find it hard to pick siding with the outlaw mages because like, they want to rock the boat and stuff but personally MC has it so good? Like, Gaius is nice and the whole system lets MC basically run around on errands and do whatever anyway, and she’s never attacked by the townspeople (that I saw) when alone and whatnot. So there really wasn’t any benefit for me to side with them, esp after mom woke up.
I will have to be honest and say the romance wasn’t very engaging. I think it was because I could, for example, kiss Gaius at the solstice and then afterwards it’s never ever mentioned again no matter how much I pick him over Sofie – I actually couldn’t even believe I was able to propose to him in the end because he was so lukewarm the whole time and also because I accidentally romanced Elbrus at the same time. I misinterpreted “having a moment of affection” with him since I literally only spent one scene with him (brewing potions I believe) over Mystria but sought him at the party because I was worried I might’ve accidentally been racking up Mystria romance points or something.
I was typing up notes on a doc while playing, so I will leave you with this gem:
I had fun though. It was cute, and while I think it could be fun on harder difficulties, carefree mode was nice in that I could just be a badass all the time. 
The game has already crossed 2000 views and 1000 browser plays on itch.
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The game says multiple times that having him around strengthens our magic but I don’t think it’s an actual mechanic. Perhaps choosing his fur color could function similar to customizing the PC’s appearance, giving different stat boosts? Just a suggestion!
