Runt of the Litter - BETA TESTERS NEEDED


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Runt of the Litter: As a thrall in the city of Aerie, you are tasked with maintaining the gryphons that the elite of the Vaengren Empire fly into combat with the evil wyrms. But when a runt egg ends up in your lap, you can’t just let it die. Risking your life, you tend the egg until it hatches, but that just leaves you with a baby gryphon to take care of…

Email me, jason AT choiceofgames for access. DO NOT SEND ME A MESSAGE THROUGH THE FORUM MAIL SYSTEM. When you send your EMAIL, include your forumname and the game you want to test. I would also prefer if you included your real name, but you don’t have to.

(You cannot be testing two games at once.)

I will send you a link, a username, and a password.

Return feedback TO ME. Preferably part of the same thread, rather than a new email.

I’m looking for “high level” and “low level” feedback. Not mid-level feedback.

Low-level = typos and continuity errors. A continuity error is when a character’s gender flips, or someone comes back from the dead, or you run into a plotline that just doesn’t make sense (because it’s probably a coding error).

For these low-level issues, SCREENSHOTS are VERY HELPFUL. If you see a problem, take a screenshot, or copy and paste the text that is in error, and email that. Also, the “BUG” button is great; but if you use BUG, make sure to say in your email who you are, so I can give you credit for the report.

“High level” feedback has to do with things like plot, pacing, and characters. “Scene A didn’t work for me because x, y, and z,” is useful feedback. “B character was entirely unsympathetic, because u, w, and v,” is also useful feedback.

“I had a great time and saw only a few spelling errors,” is not useful feedback. In fact, it’s the sort of thing that results in you not being given access to future betas.


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#3

New draft up!


#4

New draft up!


#5

Thanks to beta feedback, the author is re-writing the last chapter. I’m going to suspend the beta for now, and reopen when a new draft is submitted.


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#8

Ok! New draft up!

  • Rewritten epilogue.
  • Typos

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#10

New draft up! (in five minutes)

  1. Addresses typos
  2. Clarifies the reasons behind a few choices, specifically in the “cure” storyline. The beta reader was right, if a player takes that path, the reasoning should be more gryphon focused.
  3. Expands a few conversations to include more clarity or relationship based reactions, particularly in chapters 5 and 9.
  4. Expands on the meeting with Neeris in chapter 9.
  5. Changes the names for the early Follower stat levels.

#11

New draft up!

• Typos
• Made “not getting exiled” easier.


#12

New draft up!

  1. Fixed typos
  2. Adjusted the appearance of the stat screen
  3. Made minor stat adjustments
  4. Made minor adjustments for clarity and consistency

#13

New draft up!

  1. Typos, continuity.
  2. “Reworked stats.”
  3. “Made it less impossible to beat.”

#14

This game satisfied me, I went in expecting fluffy gryphons, romance and angst. And there was much fluffiness, more games should have fluffy gryphons. Angst and romance were also at acceptable levels. Four tawny owl-mountain lion feathers out of five.


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