The last chapter of part 1, where the curtains finally fall down to reveal the eerie truth behind them.
…here I deliver (anxiously) chapter 5, the last chapter before part 1 ends! This entire chapter has around 63k words in total and around the 26k for one read. Though, I did split it into two but you can still read it as one chapter because, well, I’m releasing both of them at the same time.
The MC’s world gets turned around in this chapter- and you get to unravel all your companion’s backstories in part 1. Part 1 of this chapter is more or less calm before the storm. Literally. OH- and there’s a potential (unromanceable) companion you can get in this chapter.
Minimal romance and I feel guilty about it. In both parts, there aren’t a lot of romance-related options. There are only mentions of it in part 1 but everyone is… well- let’s just say nobody really is in the mood for it in part 2. So I moved every fun idea I had with romance to chapter 6.
I’m sure; I will edit some scenes- maybe delete things or add new scenes in the future because this entire chapter was like juggling for me. Writing a complex sci-fi story about parallel universes is more challenging than I thought!
So, in short- this chapter includes;
63k words in total, 26k words for one read
Backstories
A potential new companion
minimal romance (sorry)
One wip scene. One very big wip scene. One, almost story changing wip scene. (hides under the bed) you guys will hate me for having this choice as a WIP.
So yeah. Either people will like this or hate it; there is no in between. So I’m slightly anxious Though I’m happy how this chapter is finally done and I can go crazy with chapter 6- yay. I HOPE Y’ALL LIKE IT I really do.
AND one last thing; the chapter could be a bit buggy if you start chapter 5 with a recent save file (?) Just… keep that in mind :')
In the first jump through the mirror, there are two scenes attached: where the MC ended up with scratches and where the MC doesn’t get any. Also I won two paradoxical achievements
ouch… - chp 3: You ended up with a few too many scratches after your first official jump! (10 points) like a pro - chp 3: You didn’t even get a single scratch after your first official jump! (10 points)
Some catches
Repeated sentences
"…will get to have fun without you besides him." She said with a small wink and Flynn scraped his throat… straightening his back. “… without us,” she said with a small wink and Flynn scraped his throat… straightening his back.
Taylor’s pronouns (“his” instead of “her”)
To my surprise, I also found Taylor standing in the corner- light coming from his phone illuminating his pale face- auburn brown hair falling in front of her eyes.
Hey, as someone who likes original things created through creativity and own effort if this somehow comes from your mind I must congratulate you. It is amazing how you are tiding everything slowly with good causality and certain sense, despite the fact that it seems science fiction you are making it logical (wich for science fiction is good). Hope you improve even more because it is really a good work. Wish you a good day and week.
I had a feeling MC was going to be a replica. When Amethyst started talking about replica’s feeling the ‘storm’ and being unable to recall their surname, I knew it. Honestly, the fact this guy thinks I’m going to kill all these people and then myself is hilarious. 'Cause that’s totally going to happen. I thought I was ready for this but I very clearly wasn’t. It’s soooooo good! Now I’m just sitting here wondering what’s going to happen next, waiting for the next update.
@Vashnik Thank you for the catches and yes: that wasnt meant to happen :’) maybe the mc wasnt sure whether to be all wounded or not.
I’ll look into it! Thank you
@JQGDwpr I was worried that It wouldn’t make any sense so your comment makes me really happy! Thank you so much for the nice message
@Liza_P hehehe, thank you soooo much this actually makes me grin so much! And yeah, the mc being a Replica was being hinted at from the start so that one was kinda obvious :’) and when you put it that way: yeah. That sounds funny. But Amethyst sees you like a tool to save the universe rather than a living being, despite being a Replica.
@FireFlyyWow, finally met Amethyst! Also, that fact that we are replica is also kinda surprising. I was suspecting it of course given the hints like migraine during the storm and the dreams which somehow connected us to other replicas. Thank you for the update by the way! Hope we get to have some romance later. No pressure though!
@Mei_Hiroshi Thank you for reading and there will be romance- there wasn’t a lot of this in chapter 5 because everyone was a bit shaken up and not really in the mood for it- but I have a lot of ‘fun’ romance scenes in mind for chapter 6!
Well now I will waiting for the next update, I must also ask you to read my wip wich is going to be in this forum the next week and since J am working in two projects I may need advice with the dialogues.
Thankfully I discovered some ways to make the characters kind of funny so I hope it works out.
@LordOfLA Yeeaah- I’m not a native English speaker. (I don’t want to use that as an excuse anymore) but I confuse the two of them a lot- write them down without thinking much. I’ll try to change that in the next update, thank you for pointing it out!
And yes- someone else pointed that out, too. It really was a small typo in the code only- but I can fix that in the next update!
@JQGDwpr oh wow, I didn’t expect the dialogue in my game to be good enough to want to get advise from :'D I mean, yeah, I’m flattered! Though I am 100% sure there are tons of better writers out here on the forums! But I can give it a read- I don’t mind.
The wip s a good work as always The scene Amethyst banishs Shale shocked me seriously And omg the MC is throwed into a dilemma. We have to kill our own kind or all universes will crash.
for me it started all ‘‘Oh noe! I can’t possibily do that!!!’’ (with ash looking at me like ‘‘if you don’t…I’m throwing you in a black hole myself!’’ ) . Then I meet Shale and he goes ‘‘La da di dooo…its won’t do squat…so y’know…gotta go thnx bye!’’ . that made me think of a giant sling shot and throwing Shale at the darn thing…
next find a catapult to do the same to amethyst…
@Vashnik I don’t think so , homewhever her agressiveness was surprising . And her quote ‘‘gotta learn to accept your fate and shuttup’’ made me think ‘‘you re not practising what you preached dear! the failur was yours to begin with , shouldnt you be whaling somewhere where you came from and watch the universe collapse ?’’
The only thing I wonder is , she lock you in one path . Die or do . There must be another way right ?
I haven’t played very much yet - I’ve quickly skimmed through some chapters and I think this seems very promising! I’ll definitely be watching this and coming back in the future!
@E_RedMark okay I was giggling our loud when reading your descriptions for Shale and Ash because those are so on-point :‘D though- catapulting Shale will be alright. Amethyst is an entire different story though :’)
The end of the current update had me so SHOOK!!! It kind of made sense with the whole last name fiasco but stillllllllllll… and OMFG I think I have an idea of who some of the replicas are already
Though I’m happy how this chapter is finally done and I can go crazy with chapter 6- yay. I HOPE Y’ALL LIKE IT 
and yes: that wasnt meant to happen :’) maybe the mc wasnt sure whether to be all wounded or not.
And omg the MC is throwed into a dilemma. We have to kill our own kind or all universes will crash.
