You return home for a relaxing holiday with a friend only to find your father dead, yourself engaged to be married, your mother conspiring with a suspicious member of the clergy, and your house in a state of medley and chaos. Navigate courtly intrigue, a new title, an annoying younger sister, an arranged marriage, home decor, and potential murder.
genre: low fantasy, courtly intrigue, mystery
the protagonist: gender-selectable [m/f]. A freshly-minted viscount(ess) and university student with a customizable name and personality.
Relationships are an important part of this story, but they needn’t be romantic. Feel free to make lovers, friends, or foes of the below.
Lishan [m/f – opposite gender to MC] a childhood friend whom you find yourself engaged to. Eloquent, charming, and perversely rich, as well as elusive about their long disappearance. Whether you marry them for love, politics, or not at all is left up to your discretion.
the university friend
Elia [m/f – gender selectable] inquisitive, studious, and excitable. You befriended them at university and invited them to enjoy a holiday in your home country, but you both got rather more than you bargained for.
Tanager Aquila [m/f – gender selectable] to you, they are Their Eminence. Scheming, shadowy, and well-dressed, they seem to have gained your mother’s favour.
other characters of note
Lady Latona [surname of your discretion], Dowager Viscountess [fief of your discretion]. A widow who has planned out your future in meticulous detail.
The Honourable Artemisia [surname of your discretion]. A spirited and rebellious young woman who looks up to you. Perhaps your guiding influence will shape her. Perhaps it won’t.
Feedback I’m looking for
low-level: all sorts of typos, missing commas or an overabundance of them, dodgy grammar or dialogue tags.
any coding errors. Pages that won’t load, broken stats, or choices that don’t lead where they ought to.
style and content. Does anything seem strangely worded? Over on under explained? Does the dialogue feel natural? Are the characters believable? Are the paragraphs a readable length?
anything you enjoyed or disliked. Predictions, questions, things you’d like clarified, features you’d like to see implemented, what you’re hoping for or dreading in the next chapters.
current progress + length 1 chapter, published 31/07/2022. 5963 words, including code.