Lost in your eyes (WIP) [May 01 2025 Update] [5 Ch, 300K words] [Vampires/Romance/Modern Dark Fantasy]

[Silly_Cat_69]

@Drakeye

Good luck on the exams. If i may inquire what are you studying?

What @love4tae said

@love4tae

And accounting a recall, @Drakeye Kathy pls don’t think Im a stalker…

We don’t talk about accounting I had to drop that course cause my grades were being pulled back from that ONE F. But yes! thank you for pointing it out! <3

@GhostofGrief

Might wanna go back through it again, cause peoples genders keep flip flopping, a lot .

That has been a recurring issue unfortunately, and something that’s not easy to find because I’ve gone through chapter 1 almost 6 or 7 times to the point I almost rewrote it completely and divided it into manageable parts once I start rewriting/proofreading it again. (chapter 1 part one, part two etc) but I still wasn’t able to find out all of them. Any help which would point out to where the genders are being changed would be greatly appreciated! <3

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Monday! I was contemplating on whether or not I’d be updating it today cause I already released one on Friday lol, but since I’m already here, Lemme post: An update!!

About 5K words were written this week. Again, I know it isn’t much but blegh, exams and irl is just not being kind to me.

Funny story but the kid I tutor has flatulence problem and I’m dying right now. (Over sharing but my eyes are watering)

John/Elizabeth are kinda OP, My tumbler post that show cased a small sneak peak just jumped to 20 likes so I’ll post that sneak peak here. Shout out to “The Boys” for subscribing to my Patreon and giving me that idea!! <3

(The better version is in the book obviously cause this was for Patreons and pretty old one soooo yeah! Go give it a read! <3)

Spoiler but ||Prepare to get tied down in the middle of the night by Vale/Vivian||

People were reporting that chapter 2 part 2 kinda cut off unexpectedly and didn’t allow you to progress. Unfortunately I didn’t encounter that issue, and multiple random test, quick test and 2 play throughs as well as getting one of my beta readers (Haha, Beta) to read it, showed me that it wasn’t the book. If this does give you an error, you can skin to chapter 2 part 2 in the first chapter.

Annddd that’s pretty much it! I know chapter 2 is just a meat grinder of a chapter, and I do promise to start working on it but hopefully in the next update which will be a complete rewrite of the second chapter. I’ll set up a poll in another link which will ask whether or not you all want me working on Femboy Dating Simulator or continue with this but probably on the 15th.

All in all, pretty productive yet stressful week, Remember that you guys matter, and if no one has said it, a smile looks beautiful on your already beautiful faces. Love ya’ll!! <3

Oh! Before I leave, what do you guys think of John/Elizabeth? Are you going to persue them? Or you not interested? What are your opinion on the update? Anything would be appreciated ^-^

[Shenice_L]

Was anybody able to get past the section that won’t load, without having to skip?

For anybody who’s having trouble, what computer do ya’ll use? (maybe it’s Certain computers, I’m using Chromebook). Because I noticed this same thing also happened to a few people with the Soul Stone WIP. Got all the way through the content, just not to be able to continue, to the updated section.

I want to try deleting my Cache and History, but I’m dreading it because I know it’ll also delete all the saves on the other IFs in my reading list Lol. But I need more time with Marcus so I may have to suck it up, like a buttercup.

slides down wall in utter dispair and anguish

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stops crying Immediately - Oh Yeah, I like John. He’s kinda bossy and intimidating, reminds me of my MC. I’m here for it. Heh, and Of course I flirted with him, would’ve been illogical not to; though I wonder, if Marcus would feel bold enough to do john the way he did Vivian.

[AChubbyBlackCat]

@Silly_Cat_69

Oh! Before I leave, what do you guys think of John/Elizabeth? Are you going to persue them? Or you not interested? What are your opinion on the update? Anything would be appreciated ^-^

Definitely. I like the more mature outlook/personality is refreshing compared to V and Blaine (granted I may not be within the age range of the target audience for this book!).

[Jay5]

Elizabeth is mommy
Me like
Also, in chapter 3, I get soft locked and can’t get past the part where M talks about going to the dorms.

[Shenice_L]

Okay so I’M BACK!! I tried playing on a different device (my phone), on two different browsers Safari and google Chrome, neither go past that loading screen.

I decided to see if I could check the code, which I know nothing about, so I could be wrong and don’t know what the heck I’m talking about lol, but it seems Like it’s 100% showing there’s errors somewhere causing the loading problem, again idk because this isn’t in my set of knowledge .

So of course, i’m not sure if it means anything but its saying there 6 page errors (something about duplicate IDs) and 1 breaking Change( there’s a Deprecated Feature being used.)

Summary

Web SQL is deprecated. Please use SQLite WebAssembly or Indexed Database

AFFECTED RESOURCES

1 source

 persist.js:415

Failed to load resource: the server responded with a status of 404 (Not Found)

Is this something with my computer, that I can fix?

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@Jay5 They said a few people had that issue, but doesn’t seem to be anything with the game . So I was trying to see if anybody could use the info I put above, to see if they knew what we could do. Our only other option is to restart to the beginning, choose to skip ahead straight to chapter 2, part 2. But that didn’t work for me either. Maybe you’ll have better luck.

[Jay5]

Tried everything I could think of, nothing worked.

[Silly_Cat_69]

Huh, I don’t exactly know what’s causing that, I just did a play through again, and Marcus/Melissa leads me to the dorm rooms. (I just played through all three of them just to be sure but unfortunately found nothing. Where do you guys get an error?

@AChubbyBlackCat

to V and Blaine (granted I may not be within the age range of the target audience for this book!).

Ahaha, Both V and Blaine are above legal (Vale is 24 and for those who have read through the demo He/She had half his/her brain fried in an experiment to be turned into Ordo Solathis. This is what John/Elizabeth is referring to in the talk between Alex/Alice.) Blaine is actually above 25. Why does he look like that? 1. Asian (Jk lol) He’s actually a vampire hence they age slowly and look younger (Even though the look is unintentional. Plus, I’m going to be honest with you. I told my artist “Make him a femboy” as a joke and this was what he gave me ) Again, these characters are purely based on your imagination so you can imagine however you want them to be. The MC themselves is actually the youngest which is close to 20-25 in human years.

As for the target audience, I’m going to be honest with you, I did not think it would get this far. I’m not an English speaker so I thought “People are going to look at this, see it’s written by a non-native and toss it away cause of the bad writing” so it’s really touching to see people enjoy it. My original plan was “LET’S WRITE WOOO!” at like 2 am after I finished reading Brandon’s mistborn XD There was no target audience in mind, Though thinking of it right now, I’d say the target audience is YA, and 18+ where the MC grows from a child all the way to the end. It does has those kind of elements and I had to put this in the adult reader category XD

[Shenice_L]

@Silly_Cat_69 Oh no, not at that scene, but the scene at the church. It kicks in right at this point, when you try to click next.

Lol Maybe that’s why you couldn’t find it. We confused you on which part we are all talking about!!

Am I correct to assume the Demo ends, where I screenshotted? ( that’d make sense of why it won’t load) Or should it go further than that?

[AChubbyBlackCat]

Oh yeah. I get you. I think I misspoke when I said “mature” and probably meant to type “personality” instead. John/Elizabeth have a more attractive personality to me than V/Blaine.

As someone who is a native english speaker, there are more than a handful of things I notice that could be tweaked; I just haven’t had time to sit down and work on it. I’m not sure how open you are to suggestions about fleshing out the MC’s personality via *fake_choice’s and working beyond the Dominant/Shy stats that are available. Mind you, I’m not saying we should have more than Dominant/Shy! The way it’s communicated within the options presented makes me wish there were more ways to express it.

[Silly_Cat_69]

@Shenice_L

Am I correct to assume the Demo ends, where I screenshotted? ( that’d make sense of why it won’t load) Or should it go further than that?

Oh! Yeah, that makes sense, I still didn’t find what was causing the problem, but put in a *goto_scene just in cast instead of a *finish so hopefully it’ll work now! The demo ends with another scene with John and you also get to see an interlogue with John and Alex/Alice. Just did a run through that as well so it shouldn’t give you any problems.

@Shenice_L

though I wonder, if Marcus would feel bold enough to do john the way he did Vivian.

Heh, well Marcus is bold enough to try and be a dom (I’ve been told I’m using that word wrong but I dunno what the other word for someone who’s bold in a relationship. Confident maybe?)

@AChubbyBlackCat

John/Elizabeth have a more attractive personality to me than V/Blaine.

Oh yeah, a lot of people are saying that XD Alex/Alice have almost the same personality except they’re a bit more affectionate while John/Elizabeth are distant (John more then Elizabeth.)

@AChubbyBlackCat

I’m not sure how open you are to suggestions about fleshing out the MC’s personality via *fake_choice’s and working beyond the Dominant/Shy stats that are available.

I’m open, I was actually thinking of working on a personality trait and deleting one (Putting in Shy but I think a “Sub” kind of adds that, the one I’m thinking of taking out is the Deceptive/truthful one.) As for the *fake_choice I uhh… I don’t use *choice because It keeps asking me to use Goto and I don’t really see any difference between *fake_choice so I keep using that

@AChubbyBlackCat

The way it’s communicated within the options presented makes me wish there were more ways to express it.

Hmm, I’d be open to suggestions, this is the first draft so any feed back of any kind is always appreciated ^-^ Plus right now I’m more into pushing the story line then giving choices, hopefully once the story line is compleated, I’ll work on adding more choices, I purposefully didn’t add more choice because each choice takes 2-3 days to implement (A choice with John/Elizabeth I just got completed took me a week because John and Elizabeth have slightly different personality and would react differently XD)

[MadAdam]

I really enjoy the story and premise. Your writing is engaging and I am excited for more. I agree with some others though that some choices are tough, particularly those with Blaine. As it stands, the majority of choices (not all, but most) either require you to love him or be an a**hole to him, neither fit my character. Some neutral choices would be great because I’m not trying to play a cold, unfeeling MC, but I don’t have those feelings for Blaine at all, so I am being railroaded into those choices that give me the “you don’t care about those around you” text.

Blaine is also problematic for me because no matter how much I express I don’t like him the text keeps telling me I find him adorable, eye candy, beautiful, my hearts fluttering… none of these are true. For such a great story, these moments (and there are a LOT of them) completely break my immersion and give me the ick. It doesn’t happen with any RO but Blaine. I highly suggest making these passages flavor text for Blaine lovers because it removes player agency and makes me frustrated with an otherwise fantastic story.

[Shenice_L]

Just a heads up, With the John and Al scene, they keep saying “his” vs “Him” when referring to my MC.

Also, I didn’t even realize who said John and Alex/Alice, so I almost screamed In shock when I realized who was standing at the bar.

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Summary

Other bugs, grammar, pronoun etc:

“But she didn’t do it without challenges of course. She stumbled. Seems like she has a lover of sorts.” (My MC is Male)

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“There’s one more thing.” John cut him off, making the man frown. “Do you remember pc_name with an amulet?”

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Al nodded slowly, his gesture making John’s lips thin in a way that wasn’t quite a frown. “so that’s where he’s been hiding.” The priest whispered so quietly, it almost felt like a breeze of wind. (This Is female Al )

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In the heart of the night, under the watchful eyes of the stars.
In the heart of the city, under the watchful eyes of it’s protector.
In the heart of a bar, under the watchful eyes of it’s owner.
Empty it stood, devoid of chatter,
Silent whispers, and echoes that scattered,
In the shadows it died, a quiet romance,
This bar, a sanctuary where dreams had shattered. The next few days were boringly spent. Thankfully, Vivian’s mood was better. She seemed unnaturally cold towards you and Marcus at first, but settled down to her usual self.

You and Marcus weren’t allowed outside of church grounds, neither were you allowed to go anywhere important.

(I don’t think you meant for this all to be together like this. I’m guessing On a separate page to let us know there’s a POV switch, like you usually do)

[Silly_Cat_69]

Thankssss!! I really appreciate all the finds! And yeah, the *goto_scene requires a *page_break first XD Thanks again! <3

@MadAdam

so I am being railroaded into those choices that give me the “you don’t care about those around you” text.

Thanks for the feed back! I do have to agree and while I had to fix that issue in the previous update, I forgot to do a poll and just pushed for continuing the plot instead. I promise to fix it in the next update, and I’m so very sorry that it broke the immersion for you >.<

[Jay5]

Hey, so I’m trying to replay the story because I’m bored, but the beginning option to skip to specific parts isn’t there?

[Silly_Cat_69]

Fixed! Sorry, I accidentally posted the test version of the game there >.<

[love4tae]

Happens to me too, all the freakin time…

[Silly_Cat_69]

Monday’s update

The fact that I misspelled “Monday” like 5 times before typing it correctly makes me wanna bury my head in a pillow and sleep XD Anyways, got exams tomorrow so I’ll make this quick!

About 3K-5K words were written, which puts the game at 227K words. Once the game reaches 230k and all the loose ends are tied, I’ll post it on Patreon (Preferebly on 15th)

The date with John/Elizabeth has been fully implemented, just needs a slight revision.

The night where you get tied up by Vale/Vivians in the bed is deleted/postponed. I feel like it was a bit too rush and the emotion behind it wasn’t as impactful. It will happen but maybe after a few more scenes. A meet up with Vale/Vivians dad, getting special perms after proving yourself so thoroughly etc etc.

That’s pretty much it! Hopefully I’ll be able to complete the piece with Vale/Vivian and Marcus/Melissa at the end of 15th, after that I’ll work on FDS. See you guys next week!! <3

[TithAboutTime]

Just a heads up for those who aren’t in the discord or the patreon; due to internet issues, Kath is unable to work on the book for a brief period of time. However, there’s hope for a possible update on the 18th, so keep an eye out for that!

[Silly_Cat_69]

@TithAboutTime

However, there’s hope for a possible update on the 18th, so keep an eye out for that!

Thank you!! <3

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So uhh, the kind, gentle and without a doubt, amazing person above has informed you guys. Due to internet issues, I wasn’t able to update, but I now am! <3

I don’t know how many words were written but I’m guessing more then 8K. Yeah, you heard that right. Not having internet is amazing for being productivity XD

The John/Elizabeth revolution and it’s consequences on the MC has been devastating. It makes my heart ache and my brain melt. Bonus points for Marcus/Melissa though! While I had to rush this update because AUGHHH EXAMS I had a LOT of fun haha (Sneak peak on my tumblr page! <3

That’s pretty much it. Patreon version has been updated, and until 27th I’ll be on break (Focusing on the rest of exams and then taking a break)

P.S Always eat something for breakfast and do NOT pull all nighters on an empty stomach.

Take care and hydrate yourselves!

[GhostofGrief]

New update has more gender swap issues, notcing them in the scenes starting with Elizabeth and Al.