I understand, and I didn’t mean to make you feel bad. In fact, I appreciate your efforts to keep the genders balanced. Thank you!
By the way, if you need a beta reader who chooses female ROs, feel free to tell me, I’ll help you when I have time. Your story deserves to have as few mistakes as possible, so that we don’t talk about that, but about how great the story is anyway.
I feel like maybe some authors put too many ROs into their games which games coding hard. I always prefer like about 2-4 fixed ROs. Genderchoice for ROs makes coding harder too because men and women are different in social situations.
Ngl if this were the ending, It’d be a really anti climatic ending XD But no, not even close
Started out as male, for balancing issues cause every one was apparently a guy (Adrian, Vigil, Micheal, Solathis etc etc) I turned Solathis female and Adrian gender dependant! They are now female (Sorry again that you have to go through all this!)
Hmm, that’s weird, I’ll look into it, I had this issue before and I thought I fixed it. Will look into it!
Haha, indeed! You can finalize things with him on chapter 6.2!
Thank you so SO much for this comment, you have no idea how happy it made me XD I’m glad that you enjoyed and hopefully, the next time you play, I’m sure you won’t have any pronoun errors or the errors that you mentioned! <3
I just saw your reply, thanksss <3
That is also weird, will be adding that!
Not at all! You didn’t make me feel bad, if anything, the more you point out my mistakes, the better I become so really, thank you so much ^-^
I know but I can do it, you’ll find more issues with the first 3-4 chapters where I was getting used to the coding and wasn’t rereading what I wrote. The years have hammered it down my brain on what I need to do so yeah 
Update time!
This week has been well.
Wrote around 5K words, out of which 2K words were deleted. A lot of it were mostly due to redundancy issues.
Chapter 6.1 is now 15K words! Will be releasing it on the 11th, I’m just going through editing and polishing a bit more.
That’s mostly it. Will be releasing the patron update in Wednesday. Thanks for sticking with me and for all the support! <3
Hi! After the new update, I can’t choose Alice, only Alex.
I’m having the same problem
Oop- Sorry about that, fixed!
Update time!
Alright, this week has been productive!
chapter 6.2 is now 3K words in.
6.1 has been released for Patron and is 15K words with 9K words per play through.
Since chapter 6 is going to be lore and story heavy, I’ve decided to create options that you can trigger so you can go out with different character (and even potentially harem route if you so wish.)
That’s mostly it, thanks for all the support and I hope you all have a wonderful week and weekend! <3
I’m not going to lie, if the story ends with Melissa And Vivian And Elizabeth And my Nadine being together…then I would be very, very happy.
I’m glad I waited for A to come back because the polish in the story was amazing! Under details is mostly pronouns errors that I noticed (there were some in ch. 3 but was on mobile and had to switch to pc so only took notes from after ch. 4)
“Maybe.” You laughed.
“Maybe?” Marcus asked, surprised. “Well, what do you like about him?”
You shrugged. “She’s just funny. Nothing to it.”
Should be her as its refering to V
He went rigid, and when you stepped back, Marcus looked up to you, eyes luminescent with tears. There was a small spark of happiness in them. “T-Thanks.” She whispered.
Should be he
“That was a good one,” Richard said, wiping an imaginary tear from his eye. The dealer sure was honeying her. “You’re a funny girl, Mrs Vivian. You’re a funny girl.”
“A-” Vivian’s laughter suddenly faded away. “I’m a what?”
Richard’s smile faltered. “What? Did I say anything wrong?”
There was a moment of silence.
Vivian just stared at him, her gaze suddenly grew angry and her lips pressed thin. “You said I’m a funny guy. How am I a 'funny guy?”
Richard glanced between you and her and laughed again. “Well, you’re funny. You know-”
“No, I don’t know.” Vivian frowned. “Funny how? Are you calling me a clown? Do I amuse you? Am I here to make you fucking laugh? How am I funny, huh? What the fuck is so funny about me?”
“No, No-” Richard tried to defend herself.
“I think you’ve gotten a little too comfortable, Mr Richard.” Vivian cut him off.
“And I’m very, very sorry about that, Mr Vivian.”
You made a mental note to never call her a funny guy.
The guy should be girl but it just made it funnier haha
He’ll be satisfied for a while. Vivian’s words rung in your mind. What exactly does he have planned for the guy?
Probably should be she as it seems its referring to V
You took a deep breath. This was a lot to unpack. You started off by calming him down, telling her that you were okay.
Then told her everything that led up to where you were now. You mentioned how calling her a ‘Funny guy’ would not be a good idea, especially with what she did to the clerk dealer.
First two her should be him as its referring to M and the last one probably should be changed to V’s name to avoid confusion with M if they’re the same gender, and the guy should be girl
“We’re not going anywhere with this.” You glanced him.
Should be her
“So what brings my loveable son to his washed-up, deadbeat dad?” Fin flopped on the couch and gestured for you both to sit.
Typo on lovable and should be daughter and her
“Yeah,” You said. “Fire from above and pick as many as you can,” “Take my Pistol if you run out of stakes.” You said and gave him your pistol and handed over all your ammo. “Wait, what about you?” she asked.
Should be her
Before you could even process what had happened, Marcus stopped, moments away from hugging you.
He froze and stood by the bed awkwardly, relief showing all over her face.
Should be his
Marcus walked out of the room with all the files in hand and fought back the urge to face palm. He tried to keep everything summarized but he ended up asking Alina more questions about the time she spent with Vivian.
He was thankful to know that nothing explicit happened. Vivian still pissed her off.
Should be him
Vivian was a coughing mess on the bed and John could see a small bruise forming on his neck. “We were just having a roleplay, John-” Vivian coughed again and swallowed thickly. “Marcus was feeling a little kinky.”
Should be her
Which shouldn’t be possible because Vivian was the son of an Ordo Solathis! Maybe it could be that it was the expectation of being an Ordo Solathis’s daughter that had turned Vivian the way she is.
'Still, Vivian is stronger then I am,’ Marcus thought to himself. His lips twitched into a fierce frown. ‘I need to do something to keep up with Alina. If I’m going to be worthy of her love, then I’ll have to work for it!’ And it was with this determination that she left the hall and walked towards the Archivists.
Should be daughter or child and he
“Us kissing is what I mean.” She said bluntly. “It would be gay. I’d be willing to overlook us kissing on the cheek, since it’s kinda sweet and all, but being gay?” She gave you an awkward laugh. “Yeah, no. I’m a degenerate but not that degenerate.”
On the option ‘Try to convince her. I have feelings for him!’ should be her (also, not relevant but cannot wait for A to come back and V eat shit seeing us together being gay thank u)
The room was as dark as dark could be. One bed was unoccupied, and the other held Alina, sleeping soundly and looking as peaceful as an angel. Marcus couldn’t help but smile at the sight.
Her face was a little pale, most likely because of the blood she had burned through in his battle against the werewolves.
Should be her
The pendant suddenly became warm, and you instinctively glanced at it.
“Oh man-” You heard Adrian’s groan and turned to see her stretching in the rays of the sun.
Should be him
Marcus looked visibly disgusted. He looked at you with a gaze that said ‘Why am I here?’
On the option ‘I looked at Vivian blankly. Where does he even think up these things?!’ should be her
Vivian sniffled and blew her nose with a tissue, slowly got up on weak legs, then collapsed into the chair. The telltale signs of laughter still made her body tremble. “Oh, I haven’t laughed that hard in a while.”
“Yes, well,” Marcus gave him a disgusted look. “We’ll be going away for two months.”
Should be her
Vivian’s hopeful look faded away. “Friendly fire or were they sent to a mission and then abandoned?”
She seemed to be in denial.
This might be me nitpicking but on the option ‘Try to convice her by revealing who you are. Vigil’s wrong about her. ⇑F’ shouldn’t it refer to Adrian’s (idk if they can be gender variable but if so would they called A2 because that’d be funny) judgment(?) of V, as in, Adrian must be right when not marking V to be taken down, thus should try talking it out? Also, typo on convince
Reporting that A’s image is broken… because it’s mostly a cogdemos compatibly issue I don’t see it as a bug since on actual release should have no issues, and some images actually worked (on the arrival to the church, the tapestries I think) but A’s image is and I am sad 
Can I ask for a link for it?
She laughed then and it was a broken, shattered sound. “I know this isn’t the reunion you thought it would be. Just… get better soon okay?” Street light shone on her face, and you saw her clearly for the first time. The dirt and debris on her face, the worried lines creasing his forehead, the dark circles beneath his eyes.
And his eyes that were filled with guilt.
Should be her on both his
This made me laugh so hard XD
Ofc!
Werewolf Alex:
Human form Alex:
Werewolf Alice:
Human Alice:
So, Adrian’s only marking those who have killed innocent people in the past. Since V hasn’t killed anyone innocent (Yes, V has killed, but not anyone who didn’t deserve it ) they weren’t marked. Vigil (Or V2… I need to get better with naming 
) just believes that V will kill innocent Vampires given the chance because of the amount of hate and xenophobia that was observed. Also, yeah, Adrian is gender variable, but they’ll always be named Adrian because it’s a unisex name ^-^
Massive MASSIVE thank you for pointing all of those out, sorry that I couldn’t get to you before but I have fixed all of them 
John & Adrian poly/harem route?
Thank you!! You are very talented and A is so gorgeous in all forms 
Ah I understand better now, so it was MC referring to Vigil’s belief based on V’s behavior and challenging it, it’ll be a interesting meeting the next time… with both of them lol
Yep! That will be in the game!
Thank you! Again, A is how you perceive him to be, the drawings here are vague on purpose (coloring and all that, I was thinking of having it a bit pixilated so your own brain fills out but opted not to) and yeah, Adrian has no particular opinion on V cause Adrian knows that V’s like that due to environmental factors. But yeah, next time MC meets V, it’ll be “interesting” for sure XD
Update!
About 4K words were written, putting the book at around 7K words.
A lot of bugs and typos were fixed. Massive thanks to @dawn!
That’s pretty much it, work’s been keeping me busy, sorry you guys! Next week be more productive though! I also got caught up with making a scene for Alex/Alice Hayes but realized it wouldn’t work and would be too short so I kinda scrapped it. Will be adding it on the next chapter though!
Dragging myself from the depths and pulling myself back to shore at the possibility of a Haye’s reunion coming soon?
(Haye’s content is the Stede mermaid)
@Silly_Cat_69 Also, the public demo link is broken. Nevermind, it’s fine. Must have been fixed while I was looking for the OFMD gif Nevermind, again. It’s just my internet and nothing to do with the link
Damn! This is not how I imagined werewolf Alice, but she looks much better than in my head.
heeeyyyyyy
heyy
how ya’ll doinn?
Nitpick:
“I did,” Natasha said, almost proud. “There’s an abnormally high amount of Mana in him.”
“Of course he does.” Nathan said with a proud smile. “He’s your son after all.”
“Of course he has.” or “Of course there is.” sound like a more natural response to Natasha’s statement.
Like, if the dialogue response was longer and less conversational “Of course he has an abnormally high amount of Mana in him. He’s your son after all.” or “Of course there is an abnormally high amount of Mana in him. He’s your son after all.”
While “Of course he does have an abnormally high amount of Mana in him. He’s your son after all.” feels more awkward because it’s missing the “have” in the inferred response, but “Of course he does have.” Nathan said with a proud smile. “He’s your son after all.” is more awkward to read as dialogue.
Her fiery red hair were being brushed by the air and trailed behind her.
was would have better sentence flow
“Yep,” You said, exhaustion slowly setting in. Since you performed well today, Nathan gave you the day off, and you and Alex have been playing all day.
Is that today supposed to be “yesterday”? That would make more sense on why the kids have today off. Unless it was meant as “earlier today”, and then it would make more sense to be “Nathan gave you the rest of today off,” but then the follow up of playing all day wouldn’t make sense haha
You squinted your eyes and tried to look through the darkness, and saw Alex trying to stifle a laugh. "Pssst, “Lila-”
A rogue " before MC name.
He wished he had become stronger and didn’t trust his enemies.
I’m a bit confused by the trust his enemies part. Did you mean “didn’t trust the people who became his enemies.”?
But then he came back to the present, where he got to see MC smile every day and enjoyed her hugs.
in continuing with the present tense of this specific sentence, “enjoy” rather than “enjoyed” would flow better.
“Children, children, please! Stop screaming! It’s just me!” The monster said in an eerily familiar voice. What kind of monster looked gorgeous, had blond hair and stunning gold irises?
Missed updating Natasha’s hair here.
There was a flicker of hope in his almond-brown eyes, but it vanished the
Vigil eye color inconsistency here. In a later scene, they’re ocean blue.
It reverberated through your soul, making you shiver a little.
You looked up at Natasha, wondering if she had the same effect, but you only saw her give a solemn nod.
“if it had the same effect on her” conveys what I think you’re trying to better, because MC is wondering if Natasha is as startled by Vigil’s timbre as they are? “If she has the same effect” would convey that MC wonders if Natasha also has a bottled thunder-like voice.
You remembered the way Natasha scolded ${hhim} while trying to teach ${Hhim} to sleep on their own.
Missing ${hhis} where bolded
${Hhe} just… stood there, trembling like a cold, wounded sparrow.
Pronoun here should be capitalized.
The large hall was filled with Werewolves, vampires, and a few Magi battling
werewolves and magi need not be capitalized here
Usually, it’s Through Media, the internet, or word of mouth
lower case these words?
saw the Werewolves, Vampires, and Magi split up once you reached an intersection in the hall. Alex noticed and gave you a worried look when you both entered the hall filled with Vampires.
the werewolves, vampires, and magi needn’t be capitalized, neither does the last vampires.
“And I promise that I won’t leave you alone, ${hname}. Ever.”
Should be ${pc_name} name here, instead of Haye’s, as they’re the one saying this to the MC haha
“And I promise that I won’t leave you alone, Alex. Ever.” He cupped your cheeks, just like your dad used to whenever you felt down. You met his worry-filled gaze. “Of course, I remember. I’ll never forget it. Ever, The same goes for you as well. They’re alive, and we need to rescue them, is all. Once they’re with us, everything will return to normal. I promise.” his hand drifted from your face before gently taking hold of yours, giving you a self-assuring smile. “You can trust me.”
This paragraph feels a little strange. After MC meets his gaze, it’s hard to tell who is speaking the “Of course, I remember.” Which, also feels like a strange follow up to the dialogue that came before it.
but when nothing happened, ${hhe} started to jolt ${hhim} violently.
the ${hhim} should be ${pc_him}
and his almond-brown eyes scanned
Blaine’s eyes are said to be hazel on the previous page.
“I-It wasn’t either of our fault!” Marcus suddenly blurted out.
“MC took care of it, but if not for them, I wouldn’t be alive.”
"You fought an Experimental?" Vigil didn’t bother hiding the surprise from his voice. “And won?”
There seems to be missing dialogue after the first line? We don’t hear what the MC took care of until Vigil’s dialogue.
three days, rested at an Orphanage Vigil for two,
is there supposed to be more words after Vigil? Such as “rested at an orphanage Vigil recommended for two,” or maybe “rested at a different orphanage Vigil owned for two,”
Seems like Adrian blessed with a great with how tall and muscular they had gotten.
Sentence feels stuttering.
Fields where the Vampires, mages and werewolves frolicked.
vampires is capitalized here.
making that special for you when you first came.
making that special what?
Not a bug or anything, but I wanna hug Sagittarius and Kate when we meet up with them 
End of chapter 1
But you did try, and every time you met him, you cherished it. And just like that, 5 years had passed.
In between chapter 1 & 2
6 years later.
Chapter 2
2 years later…
Okay, so chapter 1 PC is 9 years old, then 6 years after that, PC would be 15 years old, and 2 years after that would be 17 years old, but the stats page is saying 18
And now, five years had passed since your childhood friend, and arguably your only friend, vanished. Five long years where you bottled up your feelings,
I thought it was just 2 years since the incident?
Opening up to your partner had never been easy. But after four years of working side by side, you finally came out of your shell.
Assuming that we’re going with the 2 years at the beginning of the chapter, were PC & Blaine working together while Alex was still around? Or was this part missed when checking the time line.
“That was five years ago,” you whispered with a heavy heart.
It has been five years since you’ve seen Alex.
It has been twelve years since Nathan, Alfie, and Conner
If going with the 6 years and then 2 years, it’s been eight years since they’ve been taken.
“We’ve doing this for the last 8 years. This is our life.”
Would be 2 years?
"You’ve had my back for four years.
You thought about 6 years ago when you first met Marcus.
I misunderstood Adrian still being gender variable! Ignore the stuff about them. I saw that Solathis was changed, and thought Adrian was also changed to she/her
EDIT: Found out that we can only post twice in a forum before we have to wait for someone else to make a post. So am adding things into this post.
I am almost caught up 
Before I read chapter 5, I’m gonna make the guess that the magic wielding alpha is Hayes?? Only bc I know from their art that they’re a mage and werewolf 
The choice for Blaine to grab Valentine by the collar is either broken or incomplete. May want to put a note to let readers know if it’s not yet implemented?
opened, and a man stepped into the bar, a bowl of steaming stew in ${Jhis} hands
Forgot to put J’s gender code here.
Elizabeth suddenly stoop up and gave him
stood
something no Vivian of Solathis should even think of.
lol i think V’s gender should be here, rather than name. the sentence is funny, tho.
Gregory once gave ${vhim} an apple, and he just crushed it in ${vhis} hand
missed a ${Vhe} here
Give me those Binoculars?"
binoculars doesn’t need to be capitalized
He walked towards ${vname}, fingers pointed towards him.
missed ${vhim} here
Even if he were, you would be under
Missed V’s pronouns here
You woke up to John looking out the window. (Your POV}
Missed J’s name code here. My version should be Elizabeth.
Vale’s words had some truth to it.
Missed V’s name here. My version is Vivian.
“I-I didn’t think she’s a pervert!” Marcus ye
sentence is unfinished. And, don’t would work better than didn’t, unless you extend the dialogue to “I-I didn’t think she was a pervert!”
You didn’t need to take off his helm to see he was smiling.
can we see his smile past the helm, or do we know that he’s smiling?
Commentary: Absolute oof about Jinwa insulting Viv while sort of complimenting MC. Maybe if you (Jinwa) were half the dad that our GigachaDad was, Valentine would be doing better.
“Your pendant is over there.” He said, pointing towards the table.
missed j’s pronouns code.
“Thanks I guess,” You chuckled at the compliment, feeling the pride swell in your chest.
Opinion: pride seems like an odd feeling to have after being told that you (a vampire) went easy on a guy who murdered innocents of your kind. I get the John/Elizabeth is complimenting us, and perhaps, for those pursuing a romantic relationship with them it may make more sense to feel good about it, but in an earlier conversation, they tell us not to help the people of the church, because even bystanders are contributing to our (supernaturals) suffering. I imagine that the PC would feel more conflicted about it?
“Father gregory is calling for you.” She said.
Missed capitalizing Gregory here. It’s spelled Greggory below this, so I guess one of those spellings is a mistake.
he uses it on is daughter every
missed the h in front of is.
as if the name you took wasn’t his.
spoke?
I-I guess he was trying to pull Vigil off?
missed Elizabeth’s pronouns here
spark of happiness in them. “T-Thanks.” She whispered.
Missed Blaine’s pronoun here.
“Good.” Vale clapped his shoulder,
Missed Vname code here.
your partner, but he has
missed v’s pronoun code here.
The sperm bank’s" both embarrassing and
rogue "
You gave him a disgusted look
missed v pronoun code
Sir, with your credit score, you could afford
would probably be Ma’am or smth like that for Viv.
“You said I’m a funny guy. How am I a 'funny guy?”
Missed Valentine’s pronoun code here.
His long hair were draped against his shoulders
was fits better than were here.
it seems he’s in the same church
missed j’s pronoun here.
telling her that you were okay.
missed blaine’s pronoun code here
You glanced him.
missed v’s pronoun code here. also, the at before the pronoun (you glanced at them)
Vivian lifted the blood covered orb
Where did the orb come from? IDK if I missed some information, or if something got cut? okay, later on it’s referred to as a pebble. makes sense now. I had pictured Valentine finding a wizard’s orb or something. And I am keeping this line of thought in in case someone else thinks that Valentine pulling out a wizard’s orb from the ground is funny imagery. Valentine’s version of “pondering my orb” would be bloody 
“So, how’s he like?” You asked, trying not to arouse suspicion.
what’s he like? or how is he?
what brings my loveable son to his washed-up
missed v pronoun codes here
You gave him a weird look.
missed v pronoun code
area of district dawnspire. You tried to look for Werewolves
If dawnspire is a specific place, it should be capitalized. While werewolves, should be lower case, unless it’s referring to a specific faction. Tip: Proper nouns (specific person, organization, place, thing) are capitalized, while common/descriptive nouns don’t have to be (unless at the beginning of a sentence).
E.g. I watched cats (the animal) yesterday vs I watched Cats (the musical) yesterday.
E.g. The protagonist attends an academy for vampires vs The protagonist attends Vampire Academy
You said and gave him your pistol
missed V’s pronoun code here
He dodged the first attack, and before you could launch the next
missed j’s pronoun code here
EDIT AGAIN: 2/28/2026 adding more
He didn’t die of course, but was incredibly weakened.
missed updating Solathis’ pronoun here.
come here." ${Jname} said and took ${bhim} hand
${bhim} should be ${bhis} here.
${Vname} still pissed ${Vhim} off because ${Vhe} was
${Vhim} should be ${bhim}. ${Vhe} should be ${Bhe}
Vivian was the son of an Ordo
Missed Valentine’s code here.
with this determination that ${pc_he} left the hall and walked towards the Archivists.
should be ${Bhe} here instead of pc’s.
I realized Solathis betrayed me. I managed to fight him off, too, but, well, in the end, it was his followers that
missed updating Solathis’ pronouns here.
but it was your grandfather who felled him a few
missed updating to her.
Try to convince her. I have feelings for him!
Missed Valentine’s pronouns at the end.
had burned through in ${bhis} battle against the werewolves.
should be ${pc_his} here instead of Blaine’s
As homely as Elizabeth’s room was, it wasn’t as homely as it felt when he was in PC’s hands.
did you mean homely or homey?
Still, I would consider being careful around him
missed Valentine’s code here
was ultimately only categorized as Predator.
Apex? There’s isn’t a Predator level threat in the stats info.
You heard Adrian’s groan and turned to see her stretching
missing ${ahim} here
even Solathis took at least a few tries before he got there
missed updating pronoun
“Yes, well,” ${bname} gave ${bhim} a disgusted look.
Should be ${vhim} instead of ${bhim}
${vhim} and get ${vhim} to understand. Hopefully, he’d prove Vigil wrong.
missing Valentine’s pronouns here.
Taller than you, sure, which
I chose the average height, which followed with text that said Marcus was just a bit shorter than my PC. There may need to be another option for the height differences? E.g. along with TallerThenBlaine=true/false, a SameHeightAsBlaine=true/false? Which could follow a TallerThenBlaine=false check. So, like, a PC who was short could be of a similar height to Melissa, but shorter than Marcus (and everyone else, I think). An average height PC would be taller than Melissa, but of a similar height to Marcus (and Vivian).
Have I reached Alpha Predator yet?
Apex?
Pick him. Adrian ordered. Consider this as another training.
Pick him up? Or Carry ${bhim}.
All three of them were in a cell 6 years ago, but your father had been moved a year after Alex’s capture. As for Natasha and Alex…
Based on the current timeline, it would be two years ago?
It was a lot like Jinwa’s blood-list
bloodlust
Even he seemed guilty. “Five Years.”
a possible timeline miss?
kicked your feet hard enough to hard enough to dig
doubled.
Commentary: Le’me hug kate
I’m making my stoic MC cry every chance you give me with what you’ve done I’m crying. I’m glad I finally know the mom’s name.
Anything, as you still keep going.
as long as you still keep going
who’s an Apex predator, everyone else is on the level of a Predator.
Missed capitalizing Predator (as it’s apart of the specific title). And the same question as earlier, is Predator a level that was missed on the stats info page, or is it supposed to be Apex?
${vNAME} didn’t have a speck of blood on him
missed pronoun code
Greggory said, before ${Jname} elbowed ${jhim} on the face,
the ${jhim} here should just be him, as it’s referring to Greggory.
“Soalthis,” Adrian whispered.
“Ignis,” Marcus muttered, clad in heavy armor.
Is Marcus now clad in heavy armor?
desperately trying to keep the light alive Adrian’s prison.
is there supposed to be an “in” in between alive and Adrian?
You saw ${jname} behind him, his face grim and ${Jhis} bloodied.
missed ${Jhis} where bolded.
then Adrian in flesh eclipsed
“in the flesh” is the full phrase.
as if the presence of Soalthis had an effect
In Alex’s intro, Alice’s picture is shown.
"I’m sorry I can’t see you right now because I was a bit afraid that if I would
Is this was supposed to be an am? Or if they’re talking about the past, “I’m sorry I couldn’t see you until right now”?
and you saw ${hhis} clearly for the first time
should be ${hhim}
Commentary: Not only did the PC get absolutely rocked, but I feel like you blitzed me narratively with unexpected reveals. THE PARENTS. VIGIL. THAT’S WHY BLAINE IS SO LOVE-STRUCK. help me, I’ve been downed, I need heals. Natasha and Alex healing, please. Natasha is so cool btw 
I’ve seen the MC’s age change twice in the stats page thus far. Going to 20 and then 21. Since the PC starts chapter 2 as 18, I may have missed it move to 19. Has 3 years passed while at the church??? If so, could you make note in the story, as well? I recall it being mentioned that some months passed, but I didn’t realize it was years.
Vivian’s name on her stat page is Valerie Valentine.
Apex Predators aren’t bolded in the Power Level info.
I made this while sick so yeah-
That’s weird-
Will be fixng and updating in 3-4 days! <3
Update time!
Chapter 6.1 has been updated now! Putting the entire book back to 250K words
Chapter 6.1 is around 15K word with around 7-8K word per play through.
Around 4K words were written in the recent chapter putting chapter 6.2 on 11K words.
I’ll try to upload chapter 6.2 on 7th-8th and it’ll be around 15-16K words. Thanks for sticking with me you guys! <3
