Law-Abiding Citizens (WIP) -- Updated 23/08/18 (HUGE HIATUS)

**Zsero** · March 19, 2018, 12:01pm

Aye aye captain smol!

**Zsero** · March 19, 2018, 1:20pm

Captain oh captain. I’m not sure if i just reached the end of the demo so far or if the machines are trying to trick us again.

Edit: 3 of the 3 options end in an error. Damn machines!

**SmolPirate** · March 19, 2018, 1:36pm

It’s been an hour and I’m still trying to fix This. I will report back here when I do get it! Freaking machines…

**Fluffy_Buffy** · March 19, 2018, 1:59pm

Machines strike again!

**SmolPirate** · March 19, 2018, 3:52pm

Alright! Everything seems in order! Tell me if it’s not, I appreciate all of your reports guys, it helps a great deal.

**moskus4** · March 19, 2018, 4:13pm

Looking trough your code, I think you can simplify it quite a bit by adding pronouns when the character chooses gender. Then you won’t need a separate paragraph every time someone says he/she/they. Need help with name, gender and pronouns

**SmolPirate** · March 19, 2018, 4:56pm

owo Thank you so much… I will definitely use this.

**Aleksa100** · March 19, 2018, 6:29pm

Bit of a gender typo for male char here

**SmolPirate** · March 19, 2018, 6:49pm

Omg I’m so sorry, and thank you for pointing it out. I try my best to not accidentally do this type of stuff but sometimes it slips out. If there’s anything else of this genre that you find please let me know!

**Fluffy_Buffy** · March 20, 2018, 1:32pm

Ooi! You did a great freaking job!!! Just caught here one double word ‘just’ that repeats itself.

**SmolPirate** · March 20, 2018, 2:01pm

Thank you! I’m so glad you liked it, it’s good to see that my hard work does pay off. I’ll fix it in mere moments.
If you see anything else that seems wrong, please tell me. I would be internally grateful!

**DrDolphinrider** · March 20, 2018, 2:05pm

You’re not going to tell us?

**SmolPirate** · March 20, 2018, 2:23pm

HAJSJHQKWHGSJJSHSKKS

I MEANT ETERNALLY GRATEFUL!!! LIKE FOREVER GRATEFUL XD

**AmericanShakespeare** · March 20, 2018, 2:29pm

errorszzzzzz

“I know, I’ve there before remember?”

I’ve been there

You had no idea Felix was involved in any way, he was the smartest and riches gang-leader you knew.

richest

“-working here?” A woman’s voice, and sharp echoes of heels.
“Just quit then, why won’t you?” Another woman’s voice, this one with a heavy accent. You very silently peeked through the slit of the stall’s door. You could see the two women, hurriedly applying makeup as they examined themselves in the bathroom’s mirror.

Erm… I’m in Men’s room

**SmolPirate** · March 20, 2018, 2:59pm

Thank you! I will fix these mistakes.

As for the last one, I’m sorry If I was misleading when writing it but the MC enters a unisex bathroom. Which means any genders are allowed.

**AmericanShakespeare** · March 20, 2018, 5:19pm

Ah okay must be a bug from my side then…gotta run Diagnostics on my eyes

I’m one of them machines

**SmolPirate** · March 20, 2018, 9:11pm

It’s alright! It’s the thought of helping that counts

I swear I have nothing against the machines ‘-’

**SmolPirate** · April 5, 2018, 2:05pm

GUYS NEW CHAPTER IS OUT! Trevor’s chapter four, check it out!

I also have a tumblr now, so feel free to poke me there ^-^ : https://www.tumblr.com/blog/ravenissatanplzsendhelp

I love you all

**Aleksa100** · April 5, 2018, 2:08pm

Yay
Next on chopping block is Serena right?

**E_RedMark** · April 5, 2018, 2:17pm

was trying the demo…

Got: chapter 1 line 2: Invalid use of curly smart quote:(there is a straight line here) , use straight quote ‘’ instead