I really enjoyed the update!
A coding error btw, I chose male Yuri and Flavius but sometimes, they are refered to as females.
Overall, it was such a fun read! 
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Overall, I quite enjoyed my time playing this though i do have some gripes with it. Now understand that my issues boil down to me wanting more so try to take it as a compliment. Now ill try to go through them in the order of appearance.
Firstly i think the second job we do(the prime minister one) is a bit of a missed opportunity. For the prologue i completely understand starting at the tail end of the mission since it really sets the stage and makes for an impactful opening to the story. The second job however would be the perfect opportunity to let the player experience the whole process from the briefing to prep/planning and then execution of the mission. This would allow us to further customise how each of our twilights operate.
My last issue was that the latter bits(that is the events after our encounter with lykon) of the demo felt very disjointed. I believe the story would benefit from the additions of some more āconnective tissueā so to speak so that the story flows better. Specifically, the church scenes and our visit to lykons place felt very out of left field. Maybe add a small exchange at the end of the talk with condor after our failure to fill her in on the events with lykon trying to kidnap lillian and then she assigns you to the protecting isabel from lykon(this would explain the ābaby siting dutyā that is talked about by twilight). Twilight could then go to check up on isabel and talk about what happened last night when they find her understandably distraught/worried. so she decides to have a relaxing evening out with her daughter to the church which twilight is invited to. This would give us a reason to go to the church (as well as our subsequent break-in to lykons place) and an opportunity for you to punch us right in the feels since we would be interacting with the child, weāre complicit in poisoning.
Of course, this is just me spit-balling and im sure however you would go about it would be great.Keep up the great work and i look forward to seeing where this story goes.
edit. quick question i forgot to put in, will there be a friend route for our favorite inspector?
i would of liked to go help her rather then drive away while sheās keeled over without the romantic pretense(for this char at least, one of my chars will definitely be pursuing her just not my first one).
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Regarding dealing with isabel it would feel more organic if the options where more along the lines āI find myself getting lost in her beautiful eyesā or something for romance route and other sentences along those lines for the other routes.
Also I think thereās an s missing ahead of kip in the fight scene with lykon.
And regarding the story Im curious what condor or her scientists did with twilight because MCās capabilities definitely seem to be going beyond anything humans can achieve. Something interesting as well I wonder how those rebels in the north-west of evallon are getting supplied because at least in my mind I picture gralea being to the east of Evallon but then I could be wrong on that one.
Something in general would be nice if there were another one or two persoanlity options besides being more joking and serious, maybe one playing more into the angle of twilight being a basically a child soldier who probably still has some issues from that.
Also is it even possible to succeed at the Intimidation/Persuasion check with Isable you mentioned because I played through the game a few times and didnāt find a single option that actually increased either of them, not even the one in the beginning where MC talks to the trafficked women and can choose to be nice or intimidate them.
Overall though I definitely enjoyed the update and damn my girl yuna has some issues on her own but I love the kind of woman that will actually just kill me. - YouTube
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Iām more curious about what Evallonians did with Y. And how to kick their assā¦
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@Max_Jones I keep messing up the variables, especially when they are green. It should be fixed now. As for Isabel, there must be some mistake with the labels. There should be an option of not having any romantic feelings toward her.
@Big_fan1231 Haha! Great.
@redfield Thanks! Iāll look at the codes again and try to find the wrong variables.
@Determined_defeatist Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. I considered adding the prep stage, but decided against it. It was just going to be Twilight walking over a bunch of faceless soldiers who have no bearing on the plot and would add a lot of filler with no stakes, because Twilight is clearly not going to lose. Thereās a game I really love. But thereās this particular scene where I have to fight through a number of faceless mobs which I always skip. Thatās the reason I decided against showing the prep stage.
And adding a friend route for F only occured to me after I had already posted the update. XD
As to your second point, I see what you mean. Iāll try and add some connective bits to it.
@Silverpin First off, thanks for the feedback.You are right. I should change the names of the routes. As for the other point, I am a little confused. Are you saying it should be skip up? Because kip up is what I mean.
Iāll have to dive into the codes, but I think there is a way to reach 15 Persuasion/Intimidation. Iāll take a look when I get home. And yes, I am considering adding more personality types.
Regarding the rebels, Evallon claims Gralea is supplying them.
In a smilar vein, the Protagonist thinks he is a product of SIN like the other agents. However, something else could be going on. Googling a certain phrase might help.
PS: Love that line from Cowboy Bebop. Itās my favorite anime. Well one of my favorites.
@Cingulum_diaboli Regarding Y as well. Thereās more going on than what meets the eye. XD
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@Silverpin So I checked. You can succeed the checks as long as you remain consistent.
Probably gods, and of course, humans are their pawns in the grand scheme of things
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@Cingulum_diaboli Something like that perhaps.
Also, if anyone has deduced something about the world, please blur it. Thank you in advance.
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I wish there was a friendship route with the cop.
I want to be a good samaritan without romancing them, because leaving them stranded is just a jerk move.
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Could we have any confirmation whoās fine with polygamy? Dear author
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Yes! I will be adding that in the next update.
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I havenāt made any final decisions yet. Iām inspired by Rand alāThor though. XD
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Damn that guy pulled 3 girls and none of them are trying to kill eachother
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The books are a masterpiece in my opinion and do not ask my opinion on what Amazon prime put out. serious no one ask me unless they want a brutal and uncaring regard for feelings answer.
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The story is excellent so far! I love being an agent of vengeance lol. Only real problem I saw is that peoplesā pronouns kept flip-flipping back and forth throughout the story
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Loving the update and like previous poster noticed pronoun errors playing female twilight but kept getting references to be male.
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@Silverpin Haha! Randās situation is crazy. Also, about the show, have they merged the characters of Ishamael and the Dark One? Because last I checked, the actor was credited as the Dark One.
@katieb @Valixon Thanks! I appreciate the feedback. I will try to look for the errors in the pronouns and fix them. Itās because I keep messing up the variables. I wrote the first draft as a male MC for convenience.
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I think I have part of an answer for you. I am thinking I and F and Leone.
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To the show from what I could tell Iām just hoping itās there attempt at keeping the twist a secret from people who havenāt read the books. Yet considering the other issues the show has I donāt hold much hope for them.
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