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In chapter 1. In the choice: “Possess Ollie and tell the people not to go in the attic.”
"I’ll check this out later, Samantha says, in a tone that certainly preoccupies you.
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Becky dances with Ollie, too, shaking her hips and trying not to stpill the alcohol out of her glass.
Spill
Rita, hearig this, directs a deadly gaze at Amber.
Hearing
Rita and Laura leave for the bathroom as Diana leads rita to the glasses of water
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and you can even sense how fastly and hardly their hearts are racing.
Hard
You know," Amber says, almost gaspinG.
Gasping
“I havent’, too,” says Edgar
Haven’t
You show up in the middle of the dancefloor.
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If ask youserlf whether this is common with kids nowadays.
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sometimes standing up and longing at the senario through the windows for lengthy minutes.
Looking, scenario
she stops, on the bed, and listens to the silent of the house.
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