From the Mud WIP


It’s about time I got this one out there, need a push. I’m Beck, I’m kind of new to writing, on bare ground, bear with me:

The vast stretches of lone trees and wild grass of the rural countryside lures the ego overboard, pulling consciousness off course into addiction, delusion and seduction’s disintegrating madness. You barely pull yourself home from there every evening, the sun telling your time, the birds your weather forecast. One day you might not return home at all.

From the Mud is a Midwest gothic inspired horror romance set in a solitary countryside occupied only by two small towns and stretches of untamed nature. You play a troubled cowboy/girl/puncher who‘s ground deep into a maddening, repetitive routine that a string of deaths suddenly upends. The sheriff of the neighboring town along with a driven journalist and an old friend whose bridge you’ve long since burnt comes to town having heard the news. As you’re hunting for the culprit and running from yourself, your quiet life on the ranch is disturbed, forcing you to keep your cards close and choose your company carefully. But the most pressing matter proves to be whether you can trust your own mind.

Demo | tumblr (dev blog)
2/5/25: about 26k words

Characters

The Sheriff ☆ Zachariah “Zach” Mallory ☆ a man in his mid thirties

Sheriff Mallory works from his office in Two Rocks, and though his occupation means working closely with other people and seeing to their needs, it would be indolent to describe him as being good with people. At all. Being abrasive and ill-natured, the man does, however, suit the role of authority well. When the angry crease on his forehead soften, you might find there is something else within his tired eyes.

The sheriff has dark brown, chin-length hair and a matching little effort short beard. His sand-colored skin is sun-kissed from being outside, the circles under his eyes almost a purple kind of shade. Under a heavy set of brows sits a pair of dark blue, almost stormy gray eyes. Standing at an imposing height, Mallory is nigh refused anything, and can’t be forced to wear the ugly uniform his rank requires. Instead, he sports a simple white fitted t-shirt and a pair of well-loved denim jeans.

The Journalist ☆ Candy Tillman ☆ a woman in her early thirties

Working for the local news station in Two Rocks, Ms. Tillman has through work experience and excellent mentoring from her predessessor become a hound chasing stories and truths. She is both idealistic and romanticizing (that which shouldn’t), and yet entirely unsusceptable to bullshit. When her facade falters who will accept her then?

The woman with the sweetest name has blonde hair that falls to the middle of her shoulder blades, which she loves to blowout. Her tan skin is contoured by a natural style of makeup, her small, light blue eyes painted. Candy is average height, reaching taller stature with her go-to minimalist pumps. The journalist prefers simple, feminine silhouttes of clothing, keeping up with the times.

The Best Friend ☆ Blythe Abel Goodwin ☆ a woman in her mid twenties

Blythe is your best friend who you grew up with in Ashley and who stuck around when everyone left, though you know she would’ve loved to leave just as much as you once did. In response to the death of her dreams and the narrow-minded opinions of the general inhabitation of the area, she has defiantly become a person of unique and unpredictable character. You’ve known each other through thick and thin, but is there a side to her yet to be discovered?

Your childhood friend is a contrast-filled woman just under average height. Long, black, cascading hair falls from her head down to her mid-back. Choppily home-cut bangs frame her small face. Her fair skin turns rosy in the cold. Blythe’s almond eyes that are sometimes obscured by a pair of reading glasses, are hazel. She wears whatever the fuck she wants.

The Colleague ☆ Ford Wiley Mallory ☆ a man in his early twenties

Ford Wiley is the younger half-brother of Sheriff Mallory and your colleague on the ranch. Working there only half-time, the younger Mallory is dedicated and driven only in the field of his passion; music. His band has only ever played at the local bar, though. Reserved and perhaps somewhat more thin-skinned than most living out on the countryside, Wiley makes do with refreshing optimism. Whether this optimism is genuine or fabricated is yet to be revealed.

Your part-time cowboy coworker has long, wavy brown hair that he sometimes makes an effort to style, and otherwise lets it live its own life. He and his half-brother have little in common, appearance included; Wiley has olive skin covered in freckles. His eyes are dark brown, and he is of average height. The musician’s clothes consist of unwanted (by himself) hand-me-downs from Zachariah and ill-gotten items.

The Old Friend ☆ Sawyer “Saw” Brennan ☆ a gender selectable person in their late twenties (m/f)

You grew up with Sawyer along with Blythe, and the three of you braved your childhood and youth in this godforsaken place for years. But they left when things got hardest, and you haven’t been able to get past it even after all these years. Over the years Sawyer has been away they’ve grown into a person you barely know anymore, and you struggle with their sudden return. Will you be able to understand and forgive them for leaving?

Sawyer has inky brown curly hair, worn long (f) or short (m) and loose, carefully taken care of and styled. They have warm brown skin and sharp eyes to match. Your old friend is tall, fitting their frame into oversized graphic t-shirts and either color matched sweats or baggy jeans.

Features
  • Play as either a man, woman, or other
  • Choose your appearance from overall features to minor details
  • Experience nuanced romance as either straight, gay, or bi, or forgo romance altogether
  • Choose whether you’re religious or not in an overly christian rural town
  • Experience the world react differently towards you depending on who you identify as
  • Get wrapped up in the chaos to solve the mystery of several murders
  • Lose touch with reality and slowly question everything around you
  • Remember: you have to choose to get better
  • Reject the possibility of unnatural forces at play, or believe
  • Rot in a jail cell
  • Ride a horse!
  • Play a game mostly not driven by numbered stats but meaningful actions and a fuck ton of trackers
Feedback

I am mainly looking for feedback on the general style of my writing, the pacing of the story. Does the characters and their actions feel organic? Do the choices mix well with the story? Are there any continuity erros? Bugs? Does it convey a certain mood?
I am not interested in grammar right now, I know I am not a native english speaker, my writing reflects that. Unless it disturbs the flow of reading, I don’t care. Thank you

Other

My intentions with this game:
It is not supposed to be a beautiful story, it is supposed to be ugly. Writing this game in the way I am is my taking a step away from perfection and seeing where my unpolished writing takes the story. I have been ruled by fear of inadequacy and a desire for ‘perfect timing’ long enough. If I continue to wait for the ‘right moment’ to create, I will end up not creating at all. My only desire now is to simply create, and continue doing so until I have something to show for it.

The mc is rather set, I know, but that’s the way I have chosen to write this game.

…Sorry about the click bait on that other topic, I accidentially deleted my first attempt lol

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Not one, but TWO from the muds :drooling_face: we’re so lucky
but on more serious note; I’m already stalking you on tumblr and I LOVE the vibes.
I noticed that the beginnings of sentences/lines spoken by the characters are in lowercase.
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And this one line doesn’t quite fit the context for me, but that could just be me.

Other than that, I personally don’t have any major objections. I love love love it!!

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I almost deleted this topic as well :sob: I am not tech savy

Thanks for your notes, I’ll look into the weird line, don’t think both are supposed to be there

This was amazing! love the atmosphere and cannot wait to see where it goes!

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I hid the duplicate topic to prevent confusion. :slight_smile:

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The Midwest is such a diverse area (it should really be split into two or even three), that it’s so interesting to see the different takes on it. For example, I never associate it with cowboys. Farms? Absolutely. Cow? A must. Cowboys? Nope.

This seems like a fun story! I love a small town mystery

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Thank you both!! :))

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Ooh, this is good! I’ve been meaning to read it on Cogdemos for a while and I finally did. It didn’t disappoint. Great writing, great setting and interesting characters. It all felt very vivid, your writing style is so natural and descriptive I genuinely felt I was there. I’m very excited for more!

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Liked it a lot, it was a good start. Very authentic-feeling :folded_hands: Hope to see more of it!
Small observation, you sometimes don’t capitalize first letters in the dialogue, is that on purpose? Should I report when I notice that?

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I dont exactly know the rules of English dialogue grammar, I always do capitalisation at the beginning of a paragraph with dialogue, but if the dialogue is broken up by a description, I don’t capitalise the other half. I do this to indicate it’s the same person still talking. Is this what you meant? Is this wrong in the English language? Thanks for your notes

Your writing is really good. I just hope there’ll be more saves so I can try different choices easily.
Really looking forward to next update!

Thank you! I’m not sure excatly how saves work, I just checked the box in cogdemos allowing them. How many are available?

This is very weird, they should be working

right now no save is working😭 I don’t know if it’s just me.

Glad you’re enjoying it! Love your enthusiasm! :blush: And yeah, the small details like capitalization can be tricky. Keep up the great work!

Thank you I Will!

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The “From the Mud” WIP looks promising! It’s great to see progress on this project. Looking forward to updates as you continue refining and developing the work in progress. Keep up the excellent effort!

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Thank you so much! I apologise for being bad at replying, exam season has begun and I’m unfortunately preoccupied with that for a while ://

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Good luck with your exams!

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This was an absolute joy to read and I seriously cant wait for more.

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