Okie thanks for taking the time to reply this 
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I am at a loss of words holy crap that was amazing
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Keep up the good work, don’t sweat getting out major updates to the plot. While I am a bit late to the whole ‘romance thing’ I do think keeping Silic in the mix is a good idea, as written they are such a wonderful ‘bad influence’ should one wish to take First in that direction.
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Your prose is always worth reading 
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The story is sooo Great! Can’t wait for the update! XD
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Thanks guys
Luv seeing new people still passing thru and the steadfast hanging in there.
The tops up to 300+ likes! I was like holysh** When I saw that.
I’m making regular habit of writing little bit when ever i get a moment to. If I keep pace I’ll have enough yo show off soon.
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That is awesome to hear
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made another push into the next section weaving everything together into the silic section. Also I hit upon the gender identity choice made in the shopping section. So I thought Silic broaching the subject in their quirky way was the best method of solidifying that choice.
SO I’d love to hear what you think about that.
ANYWAY
update enjoy.
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I think it is great you can approach the choice decision by using Silic - it is a natural and intuitive way of doing so.
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All 3 of them will happen!!!
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That’s what i thought. Silic being so awkward and a touch crazy makes discussing a usually awkward discussion easier because the characters tendency to defy tact and personal boundaries.
So I thought it’d be fun for Silic to confront the character on it.
That said the dialogue could be tweaked as I’m thinking through some other fun ramblings for the Red Menace.
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I’ll provide feedback asap - still trying to catch up on other responsibilities atm …
One thing I’d like to say for sure is that Sillic is turning out to be the “fun” character I had hope he would. 
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ok.
Feedback time: The dialogue at the end was fine, word and attitude but the pacing was a bit rushed.
In both the plane and in the store Sillic was rushing and trying to get First to “hurry” yet the pacing in the plane still allowed time for Sillic to shine - the dialogue pulsed in a rhythm truly Sillic’s own.
The store dialogue had all the right words but instead of pulsing with Sillic’s rhythm it bashed over like a wave.
Please keep up the great work; thanks for updating what you had 
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Thankya it’s much appreciated.
I had a feeling in regards to that, so I wanted another pair of eyes. It’s still pretty fresh and I’m going to be toying with this Silic section quite a bit. (Cause it’s just so damn fun)
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Also noted you added even more leather to the clothing choice, I approve but now I’m torn between dark and imposing or leather and metal.
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Mad Max style 
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Does anyone remember the ro’s interest like what their into I’ve been looking for awhile now and can’t seem to find it
Original post it was on.
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Is Hightide still romanceable?
Me not so sure 
So much hightide dirty humor could arise with them…silic would tease them relentlessly.
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