found a bug, this part doesn’t change statuses as it should
even after choosing one of the choices, it does not change the stats
even after choosing one of the choices, it does not change the stats
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Otto is such a scumbag. Knocking up almost every woman he meets and setting the realm up for years of chaos and conflict after his rule.
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Found a couple errors. One is girl incorrectly capitalized and the other is an issue with pronouns. Also I’m curious as to whether the stats are supposed to change yet?
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So it really stop in Queen Celine telling a story?
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Finally got a minute to finish reading the update. I still remember liking the first or second demo but your writing has improved so much since then. I really love this story and the characters really seem like they’re coming into their own now. The scene where Otto comes to see us is pretty great because, while he’s still a shitty person, it seems like he has at least some redeemable factors in his dialogue which I don’t remember thinking about him before.
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Using naming conventions for the different regions of the empire. Now by hearing one name, you can guess where they are from.
Fixed.
Fixed, thanks. Yes some stats are supposed to change but most are still WIP.
Yes for now.
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Just read the new demo. Your writing has improved significantly. What resources did you use to improve it? I think I asked this question on Tumblr some time ago and you asked me to talk to you on the forum. It must’ve slipped my mind.
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I try to improve my writing skills by engaging in various activities. Firstly, I read a lot, and when I constantly come across sentences that impress me. I make a conscious effort to study them and try to emulate them in my writing. I keep practicing until I have grasped the technique.
Additionally, I watch a lot of videos that focus on enhancing body language, description, and other writing-related topics. These videos provide me with helpful tips that I apply to my writing.
I also use lots of online resources that offer extensive word banks. I find the right words for my writing and incorporate them.
Moreover, I have learned that the “show don’t tell” technique is crucial to good writing.
It is not easy at all, but you will see yourself improving with time.
I can send you some of the sites I use if you want.
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Please do. That would be very helpful. Thanks!
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Strange. It work fine on my end. Give me a sec.
I tried both the dashingdon demo and the one I have on my PC and both are working fine. Dashingdon could have just bugged out.
Really strange. Will try from another PC.
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Definitely getting that on my end too
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I’m on mobile. Maybe try from there, but performance shouldn’t be effect on different platforms with dashingdon
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We have reach a point when the world of For the Empire has materialised in front of us on so many shapes and manners with each revamp that it has become somewhat difficult to keep up, the improvements are for all to see but here hoping that after finishing feast the prologue can finally stay the way we have it as of now.
Before I forget there is a bug going on with the skills, the second skill point you can get does not register on the interface, tried out with the martial point(crawling as a baby) but the game ignores it registering only 4 skill points before the cheats are accesible.
After checking out the updated prologue(and taking a note of the new names of the cast in order to not be confused) there are lots of stuff to praise starting with how colorful and on point your descriptions are of both emotions and clothes it really added to the overall understanding of the characters specially Celine(her expanded birth scene really did justice to the whole ordeal,you carried out a good character transition from girl to woman how she tries to gain her father’s approval but also defend her children filial pity and protective instinct all at once), Otto(his vulnerability and doubt showing his true face to his baby boy while at the shame time handling the lover-nanny) and Eleanor(the closeness between Eleanor and baby MC,their motherly “bond” being shattered with courtly ambition along with Eleanor’s guilt due to the forbidden relationship with the husband of the woman she was politically linked to) their pieces were masterful, you’ve given us something that we wanted for a long time know the intrigues between their relationships using the baby MC as the POV only reinforces how vulnerable we are at the face of the plotting of our elders(and yet the elders feel more Impulsive and foolish than ever ruled by emotion rather than logic), young and unaware bumping into the shadows of feudal politicking.
Personally another great point of the new beta was including more character customisation sub traits, from stuff like your baby personality to your hobbies and finally but most important where was your grandmother from, there is so much that can change character interactions based on your hobbies alone(how you can share passions with other characters and make friends easily) and how the maternal grandmother’s house is like people from a place called the Northreach and the Sunlands do seem like opposite ends in their live outlooks-more introverted or extroverted-(even the grandma’s character can also be altered depending of her childhood on one place or the other), for me this is the most CYOA aspect of all would love to see two different houses with different characters making up the families depending if you chose one background or the other for the grandma.
Surprising was also the addition of a Jon Snow-esque character into the family a lad called Rowan(Cedric is Eleanor’s kiddo right?) presumably of common origin and older than the cast, this little guy here is extremely close to Aeron and seems to me to take heavy inspiration from the Robb-Jon brotherly relationship, that being said these are different characters and Aeron seems a tad more egoistic than Robb ever was so who knows how Rowan will develop knowing that, probably ending as some sort of lackey at first glance but as these characters always do hiding some sort of true parentage(Theory ground:
Perphaps Rowan is not Otto’s kiddo at all but of one of his siblings or of someone that might not be on the best terms with the family but because of reasons he took him in).
Quella’s introduction was something we needed for a long time effectively peeking into the first contact between cousins,it is accompanied with a moderate info dump which also comes in handy, describing her character as sensitive and delicate/sweet kind, the demo allows you with a little insight to understand the evolution of the relationship between the sisters how Gaspard is the element that divides them and how his demanding/stoic personality has affected his children on one way or another(he wears red like a certain bald old man), Fleurine to a point that focused completely on her new family to flee those unpleasant moments and a family dynamic where she only had the support of her sister(after the grandma’s death).
Gotta recommend Cat that there should be some kind of pop up in game when Quella mentions she likes singing and if you’ve also chosen singing as a hobby, extra lines of dialogue and perphaps extra friendship points? More things must be done to link side traits to the story.
Meeting Helga/Freya for the first time, she shares the same history Nrein did with MC’s mother, there is always a mix of intrigue/ambition but also heavy affection for anything related to MC’s mom whenever her character appears, the deep links she shares with the cast and how her life has been shaped by the machinations of others and the unforgivable court life.
The return of the Stefield twins was well handled, meeting the infamous Archduchess for the first time was really fun, gotta keep in mind we do not longer have an Oddo around the lad is Oliver and the lass Varina, cute moments indeed generally love how playful you can be on this new demo with everyone you meet, we used to be more of a stuck up little boy so I am proud on how the narrative is willing to accommodate other character types.
Really intrigued by the expansion of a very old scene on old demos where James’ mother the old third wife offered you something to eat but here that is replaced by a brand new character Lady Anabel, perphaps another adopted commoner into a noble family? Or does she come from poor nobles that were relocated/promoted to the Imperial court? Anyways she brought some light to Aeron’s nameday that is still on a pretty much in construction.
Even if it is something small, I loved how the little sis is included on more scenes than on old demos, these scenes were originally somewhat unremarkable and disconnected(sometimes struggling to make narrative sense) see the going through the tunnel initially only with Celine, with Lucie there is far more fun it allows you to keep building on the family dynamic it is a great move overall, props to including extra stuff like the fear of water(reflecting phobias on fiction is quite the challenge, you are braving dark waters indeed cat).
In conclusion it was a great narrative advance and nearly nothing feels disconnected or strange to the reader(perphaps when Gaspar speaks to his daughter so stoically but guess that’s his character), you really made my night yesterday connecting all of this to the codex when the update comes will elevate For the Empire to the place it belongs, we are going forward lads!.
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“I’m a prince! Bow down before me!” you chuckle while striking a silly pose.
You guys gotta admit this moment was a pure King Robert moment, you cannot help but look back at that scene.
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That was a fascinating read! Thank you for your thoughts. While I will even expand on the prologue more later, there will be no more rewrites and that is final. I’m happy to say that I can finally go forward with the story.
For now, chapter 1 is close to 80k, and once I finish it, I will move right away to chapter 2, hopefully finishing both this month.
There is a reason behind it that I cannot say for now. Also, it should make the siblings’ dynamic more interesting later on.
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That is something we all needed to hear, the story was on the way to become something like the Chronicles of Arthur, each time it appeared it was more difficult to recognise.
The potential is stronger than ever, you just have to make sure readers do not fall into an eternal confusion Cat.
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This hits all the stuff I love. Messy family (rise above them in or become them), political games, kingdom management, and watching the Mc grow up through childhood. I especially have a great weakness with childhood montages.
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Good story so far. A few spelling mistakes but otherwise exceptional work. There were a few WIP choices though. You added another peasant’s children as a heir. I didn’t understand why though. I mean there’s already one illegitimate child why add another.
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