Sure, like I said, I can certainly see that. But since your character grew up in New Zealand, you’re going to have a New Zealander accent whether your family is from the US or Russia. And I don’t know about you, but personally, I can’t really tell a Russian and an American apart just from how they look (especially since there are many Americans of Eastern European descent). But you bet I can tell, say, a Pacific Islander apart from a European. Here’s another example - if an ethnic Chinese were to speak Japanese and claim he’s from Japan, can you tell if he’s lying without some intimate knowledge of Japanese culture? What if he claims he’s descended from Japanese immigrants and has long lost touch with his cultural background?
Also, please don’t feel like you have to be defensive about anything. It’s your game; I’m just trying to give you some ideas on maybe improving it or making it less tedious for you to work with. I really appreciate that you’re considering my advice and discussing it with me.
when i completed the game there was the text “thanks for playing the demo! bla bla bla” and then there was the coffee part below that and it turned to random scenes from the demo…
My suggestion is to start with what you know and what you want and go from there. If you want there to be something special for the Russians, then perhaps make a check for if the player knows Russian. If you want to make something relating to the Maori, perhaps give the player the option of a childhood event regarding a Maori friend or relative. Don’t feel like you have to cater the audience. Like I said in another thread, what kind of story do you want to tell and why is it important for you to tell this story? Write from that and the rest will follow.
Maybe if you choose to be American, instead of having your grandparents move to New Zealand, perhaps you could have moved there fairly recent, say in your mid teens. That way you still have a strong American accent and have American birth records. Otherwise it might be difficult since Americans come in all shapes and sizes, including Russian.
@Dark_Bear2899 I will probably do that. thanks c:
as a matter of fact thank you very much. I will go over my story and change it so the player moved from said country to new zealand when they were 14 C:
First off I really love where your going with this, I’ve always had an interest in visiting New Zealand.
Now as much as I like your story i do have to agree that it does seem a bit rushed and could use a little more detail. Such as when you choose the clothing that you will wear for the day instead of “you picked something normal to wear” could it be a bit more descriptive? Because I mean what’s normal really? Something like “you’ve decided to just put on regular blue jeans and a t-shirt” is a bit better. I’m no writer but I do like the little details here and there, it’s what helps the reader feel more “there” if you get my drift.
I have to agree with Penguin I love where this is going and it’s giving me ideas for my own game but it seems a little rushed. Can you delve into his childhood a little more, also why do you have to get a job in New Zealand can you make it a little more believable. I mean it’s nice your parents got you a job but you should decide whether to take it or not.
