Congratulations.
When you need betatesters give me a ring so i can submit my application.
Did you just say henchman? HAHAHAHAHAHA!
FEEL THE POWER OF MONEY!
Seriously, money is the best superpower one can possibly have.
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Playing with male Ortega and spotted this error in the paragraph.
āOh, Iām sorry,ā you interject. āThis is Ricardo Ortega. I mentioned him}, remember?ā
Well let me know if and when you need people for that final beta. Kind of sad this wonāt remain public though.
I would love to help beta testing this gem, but unfortunately my busy schedule means I wouldnāt be able to give you the love and attention it deserves. I will be sad to lose my favorite wip, even if it is only temporary until I can buy it.
Do you plan to leave demo chapters up until release or will you be pulling them too since you plan to update those? Either way best of luck with your upcoming release. Now I gotta find time for at least one more playthrough before January.
Omg I am so excited! I didnāt realize how much progress youāve really made with this, thatās great!
If thereās still room for testers/proofreaders, Iād be honored to contribute any way I can. Iāve said before that this is, by far, my favorite WIP on the forum and that still holds true now. If youāve got all the testers you need, I hope the story turns out the best it can be. But no matter what, Iām so excited for the final product! Iām so proud of how far this game has come and, as always, great work! 
Another one that would love to beta test for you, however Iām not a native speaker so I may wouldnāt be that much of a help when it comes to things like grammar and the likeā¦
Anywa itās exciting to hear that a release seems to be not that far way anymore. 
I would volunteer for a proof-reader, alas, my grammar skills are not what they used to be. If I may just settle for trying to become a beta tester for future drafting.
Congratulations on the upcoming release of the first part.
This all sounds good to me.
Iām not sure how much free time Iāll have in 2017, but I am a native speaker of the US variety and I would like to volunteer to help with proofreading.
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So excited to see that weāll be able to see the release soon! Count me as one of many whoād like to volunteer for either proofreading or playtesting, any help you need I will happily volunteer for!
Same here. I like to blame it on having to learn multiple languages though. Anyway I volunteer as tribute @malinryden and your timeline is made me happy. I love a good alt history.
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āCome on, Ava, donāt bullshit me. If you want to blow of this for whatever reasons you have, at least have the decency not to lie in my face.ā
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āCome on, Ava. Donāt bullshit me, if you want to blow this off for whatever reason, at least have the decency to not lie in my face.ā
All you is doing is playing into what he wants. Play the martyr. Play the distraction.
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All youāre doing is playing into his hands. Playing the martyr, the distraction.
Lady Argent is a tough woman, you skirt her at a distance, making sure not to get inside her reach as she slowly slips into the water.
I dragged Argent to the sidewalk and this was when I decided to not take a sample from her.
@malinryden
I believe it was supposed to be.
Lady Argent is a tough woman, you skirt her at a distance. Making sure to stay out of reach as you slowly slip into the water.
āI look a mess.ā Ortega tries dusting himself off as you locate his shoes.
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āI look like a mess.ā Ortega tries dusting himself off as you locate his shoes.
Finally got the elevator scene 
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Iād love to proofread for you. Iām a native English speaker from Canada, and I adore this story.
I made an account just to comment on this.
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It took me forever to get that scene, but all I was missing was kicking heralds teeth inā¦ Ugh
Not as much of a crack theory as what goes on inside my head lol
HOOOOWWWW???
D:
Iāve been trying for ages. 