Thanks for listening to my borderline condescending opinions lmao. I apologize if I made you feel badly in any way.
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No, it’s okay, it was constructive and it’ll help me improve my story in the long run 
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I’m glad you said that. I was half expecting you to say, “Borderline?”
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NOO IT ENDED I WASNT READYYYY
(This is awesome, I must have more)
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Just a quick update—I made some more fixes and improved the dialogue clarity. Hopefully, everything flows better now. Apologies for how rough the prologue was! The good news is that I can now fully focus on Chapter 1.
A huge thanks to everyone who helped—I really appreciate you all! I also added some extra text for good cook MCs regarding healthy food options and a streetsmart MC during the conversation with A about MC-14, due to something @ClaimedMinotaur brought to my attention. That’s all for now! 
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Does the demo go past the prologue? Whenever I try to go past the “End Prologue” part it says there is an error.
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The end of the prologue is the end of the demo for now!
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Interesting start, looking forward to more!
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Oh … oh I like this. The fact I can play a f!mc with a wife and the potential for some fun toxic yuri? Sold. 100% here for it. grabby hands
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The leader being an RO was all I needed to see
Edit: Okay just finished and loved it!!! 
I think the dialogue being more controlled or pre-established will take a bit of getting used to for me though. We get the options on how to react but no actual dialogue options, it’s more like reading a conversation in a book- if that makes sense. (not an immersion breaker really, just different than how many IFs are, plus it’s just the prologue so who knows if that’ll change)
Also I think the stoic and emotional stat is backwards. I made mostly stoic options but emotional was up by the end.
So yeah, this was a great start. I crave more. I can’t wait for MC to meet Frank.
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Thank you! Regarding the stoic and emotional stat, do you mind sending me a message with the choices you picked? Sorry, I hate to ask, but I could only find one choice that raised the opposite stat, the others meant to increase stoic seem to be working correctly.
As for the dialogue, there will be a mix throughout the story, but Im mostly focused on giving the MC choices for how they react to different situations. I have to admit, this surprised me a little since I feel like many IFs handle dialogue similarly, but I hope the way I’m doing it isn’t too jarring 
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I appreciate the feedback!
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Just. Played through the demo and I’m loving it so far! I can’t wait to make my MC realize just how ruthless she actually is beneath the surface. Thanks for sharing
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will we be like a hitman
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I won’t go into specifics because I want to avoid spoilers, but the MC will have to take on different jobs, so there will be a variety rather than just one. As for what those jobs entail…guess you’ll see.
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Thank you!
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Thanks, yeah ruthless MC is gonna be an interesting one to play 
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Just seeing this yeah basically i chose every ‘numb’ or "emotionless option’. But I’ll do another playthrough just to see exactly which places may have been causing it
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I really appreciate that, sorry .
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@Diane Found this:
prologue line 1733: Non-existent variable ‘forgiveaconditions’
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Thanks!
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