Nice W.i.P. Enjoy a nice little crime story now and then.
Few things
First the huge blocks of text on a ceullular phone. They’re really really big. Trust me I had this problem before (still kind of have it, but not as before before on my own wip.) It makes reading a bit unbearable for some.
Also after the first heist (which for me was the gas station just in case the first heist is randomized as well…) The amount of cash earned kept changing. First it was supposed to be a share of 3.7k. Then the share given was 4.5k. Then after splitting the money with Mouse (I went with Aveline) I allowed her to take some extra cash and my share ended up being over 5k.
I saw no text explaining the increase in cash, so I’m assuming it was a bug.
If it helps any, I changed the luck modifier to +20
If you picked the easier difficulty you gain more cash from the start.
The heist was supposedly 3.7k each man…, but unexpectedly, (and fortunately) the store had pretty decent week, and more was in the safe.
Now, the total money SHOULD be over 5k, but if the share was over 5k, then either there’s a bug, or you and the leader was the only left alive…
Also, terribly sorry for the Blocks of Text, I’m using the compiled version of the game since Dashing don Hasn’t quite fixed the error with the Label printing issue… still waiting
And @DemonArcher13… I actually had look through my browser history… I should probably be on some government watch list or something… “Where to buy AK-47”, “How does an EMP work”, “DIY explosives” “Bank Robberies in Chicago” And this last one was just out there for no reason… “How to get away with a bank robbery”…
… I’m totally gonna get a “Random Security Check” at the airport…
Alright, so… I’m trying to fix this huge blocks of text when opening the dropbox link…
but I can’t seem to figure out where the text formats are located for me to modify them… if there even is the option to format the text…
Until I can figure out how to fix them, or until Dashingdon can figure out the problem with the checkpoint system not working… I am terribly sorry for the inconvenience of all smart-phone users that tried the dropbox link… again, I’m terribly sorry…
I’m pretty sure he’s referring to the amount of text per page, which doesn’t have anything to do with formatting. Just make sure you properly devide your text in paragraphs at regular intervals and maybe split a few of the larger pages using a few more *page_breaks.
Just to help put this in perspective - a game as experienced in a browser (such as Firefox) is much different than one experienced on a portable devise such as a cell-phone. I never appreciated this until I saw the same game on two different devises side-by-side. The viable area for a phone to display your story makes it really important you consider this because a signifigant number of sales are for phones and tablets.
Huge LOL! Man, you just cracked me up. But I think that it is worthy that you might get a “random security check” the next time you travel, the game is turning out pretty awesome.
Then shouldn’t it be a big when Mouse supposedly takes a cut of that? I have Mouse a larger share when she asked and none of the initial money I got was changed. Still got the original 5k+
Oh no, your total share was already cut when you get the money from the picard/smiley… But I get what you mean… It only changes if you want to let Mouse take some extra.
I’ll try to redo so that the money decreases AFTER Mouse takes the share…
Have a good day…
Oh, and I’m posting an update soon… so, I’ll be sure to fix few more things…
If there’s one thing that bugs me, it’s how often the person switches back and forth between 1st and 2nd, as it gets confusing and dilutes the narrative. The use of italics to signify when our character is speaking is also understandable, but as a resault I keep thinking that it’s the MC’s thoughts, not their actual spoken dialogue.
I haven’t played through the entire demo yet, but I’ll keep digging up questions and food for thought.
@RagEgnite
I’ve been meaning to ask people what they think about the Narrator… And thank you for answering the question I never asked… = )
Right, so the Idea is, the Narrator, is me… I was going to have the MC being able to converse with the narrator himself, but that was scrapped seeing that it’s hard to differentiate…
At first, The system was that the Narrator would be the main text, and whenever the MC says something either to the Narrator or to someone in the story, they’d use italicization…
… I’m trying to make the system work, and, so far, you’re the only one that’s said anything about it…
P.S: I also tried having the Narrator say things in past tense, and the MC saying things in present tense… but that didn’t work out either…
What if you put the things you as the Narrator think or say in parentheses either as a part of the paragraphs or completely separate from them, and have the MC’s dialogue all standardized to the normal font?
Here’s an example:
Before…
You practice a genuine smile with a gentle gaze. Staring sincerely into the mirror, you’d guess that people would be more likely to trust you… heck, I don’t think they would even suspect you’re a criminal… Speaking of your parents, you’ve never really met them, nor remembered them clearly. As a kid, you grew up in an orphange, and moved from foster homes to foster homes, Though you did go through kindergarten, elementary, and high school, you never had a “real” Family…
After…
You practice a genuine smile with a gentle gaze. Staring sincerely into the mirror, you’d guess that people would be more likely to trust you…(heck, I don’t think they would even suspect you’re a criminal…) Speaking of your parents, you’ve never really met them, nor remembered them clearly. As a kid, you grew up in an orphange, and moved from foster homes to foster homes, Though you did go through kindergarten, elementary, and high school, you never had a “real” Family…
@DisturbedOne
If you like, you can give it a try… the only problem with it is that the game will simply ignore that you ever killed Smiley/Picard when you try to escape the precinct
Just do the steps above…
Also, note that Chains cannot kill Picard… for… reasons…
