Azmuran: The Rise Of A Vampire Lord (WIP - 80k Total Wordcount)

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Azmuran Origins is a riveting supernatural action adventure that follows the journey of a young heir’s transformation into a legendary vampire lord.

Relive the most impactful moments that occured from when you were a child. The discoveries revealed to you as a warrior, and witness as you inevitably become the most powerful Vampire known throughout all kingdoms. Go on an unforgettable and heart-pounding quest, where you will witness your rise to glory, but also the consequences that come with it.

What to expect from Chapter One

Play as a Prince or Princess.

- Collaborate with the king, the commander and other advisors to devise a strategic plan against your Lord Boltmond.

- Tailor your character’s appearance, including hair length and color.

- Embark on a quest alongside your loyal companions on a perilous journey.

- Decide to go to war against Lord Boltmond(wip), investigating rumors of the church(complete), or ride far to save your twin(wip).

- Decide on seeking justice or indulging in revenge against those who have wronged you, turning you into a demonic creature that can even walk in daylight.

What to expect from Chapter Two Onwards

- Witness your ascension into vampirism, unlocking a world of dark power.

Further refine your character’s appearance, selecting eye and skin color.

Confront those who betrayed you, finally standing face to face with your enemies.

Experience both the rewards and the curses that come with your vampiric nature.

Before You Read

This WIP includes only the prologue and chapter one. At the moment two scenes were left out from chapter one because The Cathedral Scene is structured similar to those other two and I need feedback based on just the cathedral scene so that I would know if I should continue with those two scenes or scrap them out. Those scenes are the battle against Lord Boltmond and That one scene where you have to go after your twin because she’s in danger.

After Reading Chapter One(Polls)

Which Prologue Weapon Did You Like Using And Which Had The Best Ability?

  • Urrul’s Spine
  • Wulfric’s Fangs
  • Blood Wrath
  • Golden Pistol
  • The Bow Of Cyrus
  • I Preferred Throwing Hands
  • Still Waiting To Use The Sword Of Magnus
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Who Can’t You Wait To See First In Chapter Two (Act Two)?

  • Mc’s Twin
  • Queen Catherine
  • The Queen’s Newborn
  • King Magnus II
  • Alaena
  • FRANCIS!!!
  • William
  • Milly
  • Commander Warren?
  • The Vampire That Saved Me From Lucien
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When You Meet Your Twin, Would You Wish To Relinquish Your Title As Heir?

  • Yes. It’s The Twin’s Birthright
  • The King Gave It To MC. I Have To Honor That.
  • Nope.
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Which Weapon Did You Pick?

  • Dagger
  • Sword
  • Dual Daggers
  • Dual Swords
  • Bow And Dagger
  • WARHAMMER!
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Who Defeated Father Lucien In Your Playthrough?

  • Mc.
  • Milly.
  • William.
  • The Other Vampire.
  • We Did Not Enter The Cathedral.
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If You Did Not Go Into The Cathedral, How Did You Avoid The Azrulan Camp?

  • Snuck Past The Camp.
  • A Dark Figure Saved Us.
  • Raced Across The Field And Succeeded!
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Feedback

Grammar mistakes and honest feedback about the story. Is it interesting enough? The narrative as well and did I give enough options and if not what kind of choices would you like to see and where? Also the outcome of that choice, what do you hope to see happen?

To play the demo, go here: https://dashingdon.com/go/14314

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So far so good. I’ll wait till there’s more.

Good work @JonBlack keep it up.

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I haven’t finished reading all, having stopped before the three choices which are still a WIP. I’ve liked what I’ve seen so far. There were some grammar mistakes here and there (I think? Not a native speaker so might’ve just been me), but otherwise I have nothing else to complain about.

I like that one of the weapons we get is a pistol. I was wondering, more or less how advanced is society in this story? Medieval-ish or a bit more modern? Just curious, you don’t have to answer of course :))

Also regarding the prince vs princess path, what differences can we expect? I usually tend to play male characters, however if playing a different gender is significantly different I like giving it a shot (as it was in ITFO, one of the few games I actually preffer to play as a female).

Anyway, thanks for sharing this story with was. It has potential, and I’ll be waiting to play whence chapter 1 gets done :))

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The concept looks really cool and in my opinion we always need more vampire games so keep up the good work

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@Bulk_Biceps @Chickenboy11 thank you very much

@Rock
The prologue takes place in the modern era, approximately +500 years before chapter one. And at the moment, most of the story takes place in the medieval era.

And also about the prince and princess route, at first they were going to be different, where the prince stays with his father in Azmuran and the princess goes with the mother to a distant snowy land which is mostly Nordic based, and both routes provide different stories but I figured maybe a prince would want to explore that part of the story and the princess may also wish to stay with her father so I instead decided that both routes should open for both.

But now depending on which route you take, whoever chooses to go with the mother to the Nordic land, the story will identify them as the eldest of the two while the one who chooses to stay will be considered the youngest. And to whoever stays will be heir to the throne. This creates conflict between the two siblings

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Oooh I really like the routes we can take and the conflict it will create, it sounds very cool. I also think it was a good choice to not block people from one on the other based on gender, as it gives the player more agency. Thanks for answering my questions.

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Very promising. Will there be frequent updates?

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And are the siblings supposed to be “half identical twins” as tv tropes calls it?

Because otherwise it’s a bit odd that my character, a male, is assumed to be Princess Vivian by someone looking at him.

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Sounds interesting

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My plan at the moment, for minor updates I just write down on my update log and once a month has passed I send the update until I’ve caught up with my drafts for this entire first chapter, and then from there on I’ll see if I can make more frequent updates

@stsword thanks I’ll take a look at that one.

Also no not really, must have been a coding error, the twins were identical when they were toddlers up until the age of six, but as they grew, they became more identical to one of their parents.

@Harley_Robin_Evans thank you

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How the hEck do you edit a post!? :person_gesturing_ok:

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Hi @JonBlack –

I just now saw this. I’ll be sending you a DM, regarding editing your original post and thread title.

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Imo there is always room for vampire story.
No need to worry about not having a reader.

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Hmmm, that was great, I love me some good vampire story :grinning: I hope nothing happened to William / Milly after we told them to stay outside of the cave. And what’s with our brother? I’m looking forward to more :heart:

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With Francis around the corner oof, we’ll see😅

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Lol sounds like they won’t get far in life anymore… :sweat_smile:

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Is it always be a choice between William or Millie or we can save both? Can’t replay to pick another cuz there is no save.

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yah at the moment you can only save one. But there is a route that I’ve been working on which allows you to make sure both don’t die during that cathedral scene. It’s just gonna take me a while to finish it off.

It’s that greyed out scene where you can choose to avoid entering the hidden passage.

Also so you know how I can implement that save option thing?

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I never make COG games so I don’t know how to implement save.

Try asking mods or gamedevelopment topic

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Can you add save system please