Small hiatus due to Mid terms. Will update when over. Enjoy april.
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Hiatus over. Progress has begun again. There is roughlyā¦ still 5 to 8 thousand words left give or take before the first path is finished. Once thats done, ill need to do some light editing but I should hopefully be able to have an update finally out by May. Thank fucking god.
See you then. Take care.
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Kept you waiting, Eh?
Two years. But here we are. On the dot. I do not like the amount of stress this deadline provided. In finals no less. So I will be taking a hiatus. Likely until mid to late June before I focus back on this. But I am glad to finally get something substantial out for those still waiting two years on. I hope it is enjoyable. It sort of should function as the base framework upon which all future hits will be based one. Hopefully without the time delay and black hole of motivation.
Additions to this training arc will come out slowly as I am more keen on moving forwards than staying stuck in this one section for another year. The next planned part should be some downtime and more plot unraveling. The next hit should ideally be in the update after the next planned portion. Likely not as grand and branching as this training bit is expected to be.
Still. I am proud to have FINALLY gotten it. Instead of wallowing past my final deadline. Hope you enjoy, again. Take care. Happy Eid. See you on the flip side.
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Mmm. Unsure if thats actually on my end. Could be some sort of network error. Usually errors tell you a specific line. Ill give that path a run and see what pops up. That section should be relatively clean all things considered. Hopefully you saved, that might fix it if its indeed just network based.
Edit: Turns out, when you upload in bulk the text files. Not all of them, at least when uploading 22 files. Which ended up meaning the actual work I did, did not actually get uploaded. So it tried to exit to a text file that wasnāt there. It is now fixed and should hopefully mean you are free to continue whenever! Sorry about that. Long day.
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Came here intrigued by the name (Pokemon). Glad I did. I just completed my first play through. What a fun read it was. So I didnāt wanna say āGudā and disappear. So here is my review
Things I liked (Spoilers)
- I loved the whole tone of your writing. It was fun reading it. I donāt have any strong feelings towards Spy/assassin genre. Yet this was a fun read
- The cast are written good. Especially I love Izzy (Calling her that because I am not old). She exudes the energy of the extrovert friend who drags her introvert bestie to party. Daniella and tea was a fun combo too.
- I loved lot of small things you had added like āKnott Luckeā, āFatalisarinā. Small yet made my read enjoyable. Also the Driverās song choice.
- The setting and planning for training exercise is so good. I know it is not completed yet. Still I liked it and I am looking forward for it in next update.
Suggestions (Spoilers)
First lets get errors and typos out of the way. These are few things I noticed.
- When selecting the choice for your romantic partner gender, the last option should read I donāt find them, instead of her. I think. I am not very confidant with my grammar skill.
- At end of chap 1. āJuni would shake jun_his headā. I think choicescript was forgotten here.
- āI probably am a little like. Calloused too compared to my baby self and I just donāt know itā. I think there shouldnāt be period before Calloused.
- During training the gender of Jun was changing.
Now that are the few things I noted beside that there are few instance of not capitalizing at beginning of sentence. But I think those are bit trivial to mention now. Now regarding the rest,
- I felt second chapter short, compared to rest. I enjoyed it a lot. But I am just pointing it out.
- The second convo with Daniella the choice arenāt disappearing after I select them. Few authors donāt choose hide choice option, I understand. But until before this point, hide choice were present I think. So thatās why I was curious.
- The major downside, I felt was probably stats. Are they redacted intentionally?
- The pricing in Daniella shop, seemed bit unreasonable for me. Especially night goggles costing more than super rare poison.
- My game got stuck after I met Olivia. I took it as the end of demo. Is that the case or is there an error.
Anyways all in all I enjoyed it very much. Especially the tone canāt describe enough how much I liked it. Will look forward for future updates .
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This is very nice to hear! I am glad you liked it. I just like the word āArceusā. Only came to find out its very pokemon related after Iāve made decent progress. I will likely have to eventually find a more suitable name to avoid that bit but eh.
Thank you for your feedback, this is very useable stuff. Though having screenshots or larger snippets make it easier to figure out which part it came from.
Response to Suggestions
1.For that choice, asuming you refer to the gender preference choice. The default for them is feminine should you choose to be asexual/aromantic. Since making them non-binary or making non-binary preference a choice is not quite in the cards given that making Non binary characters on the backend requires a decent bit of work when theyāre a gender selectable character. So itās intentionally her instead of them.2.Fixed.
3.Yeah, youāre right.
4.Forgot to come back and add the code to swap. Fixed! I thought I already did all of those 
5.It is supposed to be a brief interlude yes.
6.Ah, there was an error there as well. Fixed now.
7. Stats are a bit of a problem for this in the sense that the MC is, at this point in time. Basically so well experienced that failure is not something that is in the card. So stats and whether they will be actually made is still up in the air. Currently settling on a trait system once I figure out a decent way to slot and build up on it. It will be unredacted when such a system is added to reflect what part you are specifically good at and which you are less good at. There will be time when during flashbacks you will be expected to make choices your future self doesnāt need to make simply due to experience though.
8.I suppose I could clarify it more in the actual words. But it is mainly due to the fact that the poison is a single dose that youād need to purchase again if you use it. While the NVGs are a permanent upgrade, including other maintenance which you canāt casually get off of amazon. Legally anyway. Itās actually cheaper than the real ones. But it, alongside most of the other items are still up in the air final price wise, since I still need to sort out just how much each hit would pay out and subsequently how much stuff will cost.
9.mmm. That shouldnāt be the end at all. Sounds like a pretty severe error. Which path exactly did you take? Was it the Gina route or the Crowd route?
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Fixed!
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Sorry about that. If I find errors next time I will try adding screenshots.
Regarding the error at training. I think I took the crowd route, because the other option was not available.
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I am going to LOSE IT. You fix one bug in this section and another pops out! I could swear I fixed the indents there. Did they not save???
Fixed. Hopefully now that entire section is bug free. Like it was. Smh. Sorry about the hold up.
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Hi! My general observations are that the storyās premise is very interesting and kept me engaged throughout. I enjoyed the training at the nightclub to pick up the redhead; I achieved an S-level performance, so guess what? I did very well, haha. Well, the story has potential, and I hope you continue writing.
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Iām not entirely sure how I missed this considering how much I comb the forums for WIPs but Iām very glad I found it now! Very interesting premise, I havenāt read thoroughly enough to give proper feedback yet so Iāll do that at some point. Looking forward to this one!
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Oh, hi, great to see the update.Iāve always been really into stories with a killer as the protagonist. And instead of having the usual tragic backstory, it feels like thereās a lighthearted comedic vibe to it, which is really interesting.
Also, there seem to be two bugs. The first picture has duplicate content, and the second one freezes when the protagonist tries to jump down from the tree during the interaction with his sister - it keeps loading and wonāt let you proceed to the next scene.
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I legitimately have no idea how you got that first error. That can only occur if you are somehow both male and female at the same time since thats a gender check. I canāt seem to replicate it. Nor figure out how it could theoretically break like that since the code is set during the very first choiceā¦ Curious.
The second one I similarly do not think I have much control over. Usually that occurs if there is some transition error or missing file. Iāll try and see if some piece failed to upload properly to cogdemos.
Glad you enjoyed though.
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Wow, thatās really interesting. Iāll try to reproduce this bug tomorrow because I donāt think I saved at that point, so I might need to go through the whole story again.Iāll try to keep track of my options and let you know if this bug comes up again.Also, Iāll give loading that scene another try.
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Hi, I think I got the first picture again. Hereās the order of my choices, if that helps.
Starting from the first option after the main text, list them in descending order (for example, if an option has ABC in descending order and I chose B, then the number is 2). Also, I added keywords after some numbers for easy reference.
And thereās also an issue with loading another page - I havenāt gotten that far in the story yet, so if it happens again later, Iāll report it.If you donāt see any follow-up from me on this, then donāt worry about it.Thanks.
Option order
11213221323
6ļ¼Enter last name)1261123141ļ¼pajamasļ¼
121111ā21112
1ļ¼Whiskeyļ¼4213315ļ¼Clothing styleļ¼
12111212ļ¼Reading ļ¼
3ļ¼Add somethingļ¼113ļ¼ Earl Grey teaļ¼
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Ah, found it. An indentation error in the male checked dialogue. Ended up playing part of both the male and female responses giving the repeated dialogue. Fixed! Thank you for the detailed replay. That was really helpful! <3