Finished it up, it was a pretty fun read and I almost got a headache trying to solve the mystery before it pointed it out to me. Since you want feedback, I’ll go ahead and write down my thoughts (none of the negatives are dealbreakers, obviously). Also, spoilers.
Things I liked:
[spoiler]The depiction of William Blake and Bloody Peter.
Choices were interesting and increased the most logical stat (lots of games miss this)
Excellent usage of flashbacks for the main character’s past.[/spoiler]
Things I didn’t like:
[spoiler]Characterization wasn’t very strong on some of the characters. Especially the introductions, they were introduced a bit too fast and there were so many that they each needed some kind of thing to make them stand out. For example, Remiel and Raphael confused me, I couldn’t tell the difference. And when Jet died I had to spend five minutes trying to remember who he was and how he was connected to anyone, instead of being shocked at his death.
Some of the events in the interim were poorly explained. Like at one point it mentioned Alphonse looked down on me, but the only interaction the story showed at that point were us playing chess. It didn’t make sense, and offered no explanation why.
Alphonse felt largely pointless. Most of his role could have been folded into Brother Orpheus, the only thing he actually did was serve as a prop to gt Orpheus out of Ibis.
Speaking of props, in addition to Alphonse there was also the Chess Club plot thread that went no where. It seemed to only serve to introduce the House of Ibis to the player and was promptly forgotten about.[/spoiler]
If we’re German descent (I assume, our father is called Herr), shouldn’t we have some faint recognition of the language when others speak it? Presumably he spoke his native tongue around the player at some point. I’m willing to give the note a pass, since we may not have been old enough to read.