A Tale of Heroes (WIP) - 224k words. Updated 29/01/2025!

This is exactly how I know you haven’t been reading the story. Quitting equals jail time, no ifs, ands, or, buts. As soon as the MC tenders their resignation or goes AWOL, they have 3 of the strongest heroes on the planet hunting them down. In the prologue, the MC doesn’t even make it to Canada when they try to, so how are they going to escape Seeker, or Forlorn who we can all admit is faster and stronger?

Edit: Additionally, Nova likely has a failsafe on that necklace or a way to ID the MC if they went rogue. Your ‘scheme’ falls into pieces the moment we start reading the text, and stop complaining.

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Again, you missed the point but whatever. I’m gonna just quit since you’re not really seeing what I’m trying to say the entire time

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So, seeing how we just broke 100 posts on this discussion again, couple of notes:

  1. There isn’t a ‘cuck fantasy’ in this story. There is a failed romance, which ends, and only after does anything more happen. It’s got nothing to do with cheating, and the amount of borderline creepy, racist, absolutely sexist commentary regarding it has gotten absolutely unbearable. Quite frankly, if your characterisation of that part of the story boils down to someone ‘stealing’ the girl from you or anything close to that, I don’t need to hear your opinion on it. I don’t want you reading my story period, I’d feel significantly better if you didn’t.

  2. The fact that there exist stronger characters than the MC does not mean the MC is irrelevant or ‘Krillin/Yamcha’. It simply means that there exist other entities within the story which are capable of acting on their own that can’t currently be stopped, and is a basic fact of reality in every modern shonen story, which this series is inspired by. There are people stronger than Goku in Dragon Ball, Kengan Asura ended with someone giving the protagonist an asswhooping, and until the very end of his story there were people stronger than Ichigo in Bleach. Characters being stronger than the protagonist doesn’t take away from someone being the protagonist, or else Dragon Ball would follow a football-headed dwarf, and Lord of the Rings would be about Gandalf, not Frodo. The MC’s still in the midst of growth, they are at the very center of a global conspiracy which is currently threatening to start World War Three, and as I’ve said before, is the main target of a massive group that could, quite honestly, colonize the sun. They have plenty of stakes in the stories, and have their own set of foreshadowed mysteries surrounding them.

  3. Very clearly, the situation cannot currently be handled by the members of the League. If they could handle it, the president of the USA wouldn’t have just gotten beat up by terrorists. The point of the ‘Libertador’ comment that was brought up above is that the supposed strongest member of the cast can’t actually solve the issues at hand. Even forgetting the fact that one of them is trapped in what one may well call a different dimension, they are just not at all equipped to be the global leaders needed to face the incoming threat. If you left the matter to Victoria or Seeker, they’d alienate half the globe because things have to happen how they want when they want, and end up giving the rest of the planet the same fate that befell to Natives throughout North America- either get them wiped out to the last man, or turn them into perpetual second-class citizens under the yoke of unrepentant conquerors.


That aside, I got so sick I had to be rushed to the ER a while back. I’m better, and back on my feet, but that’s why the chapter is late. Either way, here’s a short teaser to tide you over until I can publish it:

For seven days and seven nights, the Aegean Sea acted as if possessed by hell. Santorini erupted, the inanimate waters roared with fury, the sky shunned the sun, and the ground, from the seabed to the highest mountain all shook so greatly that it was clear Creation was at an end. Something had awakened, something had been filled with wrath, and the Aegean had been where it chose to display its rage. All around, the people prayed, they bargained, and even returned to rituals discarded ages ago, in a vain attempt to calm the fury of God.

And then, just like it began, the terror went away. The sea calmed, the shaking stopped, and the sun began to shine again. The people rejoiced, until a cruel reality asserted itself:

A price had been paid.


@moderators Sorry for the bother, but could one of you please close this thread until I can publish Chapter 6 of the story? I’ll contact one of you when I want to have the thread open (apologies to those of you that’ll get the notif clogging up your bar after it’s already been handled).

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I won’t talk about the cuck and cheating stuff i haven’t gone through the games enough times to comment on it anyways but i personally don’t see the point of having a character as a RO if it can never end up working out anyways

Unless the route has some internal or external overarching effect on the story or the characters

Though i suppose it’s fruitless to keep talking about something being good or bad until it’s finished keep up the good work :smiley:

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At author’s request.

At author’s request.

Hello! The thread’s been reopened since I plan to release most of Chapter 6 this Sunday. I’m not dropping any hints or teases since I want to keep the rest of the chapter more or less secret, but I’d like to hear some discussion and see how well (or badly!) I’m hiding a fair chunk of the secrets to be revealed by the end of the game, so here are a couple of polls for you:

Who is the Broken King?
  • A complete stranger.
  • Someone we’ve met.
  • A League Member.
  • Other You.
  • None of the above, but he’s stalking us.
  • (Other).
0 voters
Where are Forlorn and Aki from?
  • Crete.
  • A hidden nation like Themyscira.
  • Another planet.
  • Another galaxy.
  • Another dimension.
  • (Other).
0 voters
Where is Victoria, the previous Seeker?
  • Dead.
  • In space.
  • Hiding from the government.
  • Captured by something.
  • She’s perfectly fine, but she’s also evil.
  • (Other).
0 voters

And, lastly…

Will the Blitz Queen be revived by the end of the Book?
  • Yes, and the League will help make it happen.
  • Yes, but we won’t be involved.
  • No, the King has to move on.
  • No, and the King will die too.
  • She’s not even dead in the first place.
  • (Other).
0 voters

If you want to share why you voted one way or the other, please, feel free to do so!

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For the very last question, I’m voting other because there wasn’t a “hell if I know” response. Everything else assumes way too much about your plot since I don’t really follow the extras, and my MC isn’t really all that invested that subplot of the whole, which also accounts for the first Q’s answer.

Victoria wouldn’t be pinned down by anything less than the BK, I don’t think, so half the pick I chose is what I think. The “evil” part of it is not.

Half joking response on the Aki/For one–they may as well be with how odd they can be sometimes, but usually in an adorkable way.

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The queen would has a high of reviving regardless of the league trying to stop it. I doubt they would want her back especially how ridiculously powerful she is. She might get BK to calm down and control him but we don’t need someone who could solo a entire country on the loose if they disagree with how things are run now in the world. Highly doubtful she is alive cos why is BK trying so hard to get her back and evidence in previous chapters point she is dead.

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Never really thought the BQ was ‘dead’ dead, I just thought dead was used as a descriptor because they didn’t have a better way of describing what kind of state she is in.

With Victoria I get the vibe that she just does what she wants, and she ain’t the kind of person to hide from something…but at the same time she’s just not making a big deal of herself so I’m honestly guessing she’s just shootin’ the breeze in the background. All chill and relaxed like.

For the Forlorn and Aki question I just get the vibe of secret location home. Be it a proper hidden nation or some kind of shadow gov nation thing going on with them.

…with BK I felt a lot of those answers could be plausible, but in the end it’s probably just him keeping a tab on us. Nothing personal like ya see, just a kind of “Hm… Should keep an eye on them” thing. Although that would also imply BK knows something s out us that we don’t know too…maybe… dunno for sure but the tinfoil on my head had never lead me wrong before.

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  1. Other. I think the Broken King became the first Seeker, and that all of the successive Seekers have been reincarnations of him. I will probably turn out to be wrong, but hell, who knows?

  2. I don’t think they’re necessarily from anywhere in particular, but something in their powers may be linked. How did Forlorn find Aki in the first place? Neither is mentioned as having any sort of accent or different manner of speaking, so I’m going to go with “wherever PC is from, it’s just power weirdness.”

  3. If the Seeker and Successor thing is what I think it is, she’s dead. If it is what my other suspicion is and the Seeker’s successor is a successor in power/ability only, then she could be anywhere. Maybe quietly retired or maybe working as a superhero under some other power set.

  4. Probably? I really can’t get a good read on this, partly because I think Ignis and Seeker may be reincarnations of the Blitz Queen and the Broken King, but if they’re not, or if they’re just sort of…power-wielding avatars because their own abilities matched what was needed, then anything could happen. She could revive or not (but I hope I’m right.)

Probably rather obviously, my answers were other, other, dead, and other.

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It’s already been said we’d meet her though. Not to mention Seeker getting back with Victoria and in a relationship with Ignis.

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Said where, in story? I must have missed it, then.

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In Chapter 5 they speak a language that the translator collar doesn’t recognize, with it defaulting to broken Russian as the closest equivalent.

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On their Tumblr it was said, also this

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I’m not on Tumbler.

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It’s been said on here to, but I don’t feel like searching through all the post tbh.

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So. This asks us to make some rather… committal statements, whereas my style in this thread has been more of a dartboard and analysis without meaningful conclusion (only implication), but each question offers some interesting springboards for discussion.

Where is Victoria, the previous Seeker?

I selected (Other) for this because I don’t find any of the offered explanations particularly convincing on their own merits, though were I forced to select a nearest-neighbor I’d go with Dead. So let’s just start there.

“Oh, right, right,” Seeker replies, pouring an amber liquid into his glass, the only one of the two that looks touched. “I’m here… For a meet-up. With an old friend.”

Our introduction to the Lightning Tamer, that rooftop conversation with Seeker in Chapter 4. It’s melancholic, it’s dark — but it’s also ritualistic, something he’s likely done many times before. “Normally, there’s this place I go to meet up with them, but, well, with the way things are, I couldn’t leave to go hang out.” He speaks of her in the present tense: she has no equal (physically); she is a sun (metaphorically, probably); her level is “a combination of sheer talent, and a frankly insane training schedule”. All this to indicate that for Kratis Daimon, Victoria is present in some way, right this moment.

Note that this still does not strictly contradict the idea that she’s dead. Visiting someone’s grave is, in a way, visiting them; and the idea of Victoria still lives on in Kratis’s mind. We’ll revisit the possible death of Victoria later. But what this does make me question is the idea that she’s “Captured by something”. We saw just how fast Seeker flew off to help Ignis when she was in trouble: he yeets Forlorn to the ground, breaks out Aki and Forlorn’s hitherto unknown language, then immediately leaves without a word — and this is for somebody he can’t even admit (doesn’t even know?) he likes as more than a friend. Meanwhile, Victoria was like, the single most important person to him in the world, the sun to his moon, the one who set him on the path he’s on today.

So, if Victoria’s being held against her will, I doubt Seeker would be fine chilling with the League — even if the enemy was far more powerful (which it would almost certainly have to be, judging by Seeker’s assessment of Victoria’s strength). This is also why “Hiding from the government” strikes me as wrong: there is no known government on Earth that should be able to threaten her. Seeker also seems to roughly know her status, because he has a place where he goes to meet her. I think the main feasible way to thread this needle is to require Seeker to think she’s dead, but that she actually isn’t; but given their collective power and the depth of his admiration, Seeker believing she’s dead without hard proof seems implausible to me.

  • Anyway, there’s also no reason to believe that “she’s also evil”; she’s a shonen protagonist who’d punch Seeker through an entire city block if he “bailed on protecting people to go see” her, who lights up a room and reassures everyone that things will be alright. As Lat says, “It sounds to me like this V is a pretty awesome person.”

  • Finally, as for “In space”: really, this one’s good; the main issue I have is that there’s not evidence to suggest that Victoria’s powers allow her to overcome the core problem of superhuman space travel, the ability to just not die out there without oxygen (and for prolonged periods, without nutrition). But you’ll find that there’s synergy between this and some of my ideas.

This brings us back to what I’d consider the most likely on its own, Victoria being dead, though I still don’t buy it. It requires too much stretching of Seeker’s words for my taste, specifically the present tense references. The act of visiting someone’s grave to see them still demands a level of acknowledgement that they are, in fact, past tense. Furthermore, we have out-of-game indications that we’ll meet her in the future, and supplementary works showing Crete is planning something relative to her (scroll to the end). I don’t think it’s impossible — I just don’t think it’s necessarily the right answer.

So to finally get to my thoughts, let’s have a look at one of @Jjcb’s most recent comments about Kratis and Victoria:

Very interesting stuff here.

So I’m of two minds here, which is why (Other) still grants useful coverage of both. First is the elegant solution: she’s currently where Aki and Forlorn came from (which I begrudgingly selected as “Another planet” but more importantly I’d argue is not of this world). It would neatly tie two of the main mysteries surrounding the League together, while offering mechanisms for why Seeker can’t just (with his super speed) fly off from Naha to meet up with her quickly, why roughly he knows Aki and Forlorn’s (and potentially Other You’s) language (“He said it wrong!”), and why he wouldn’t act worried regardless — we can infer, comparing her to Aki and Forlorn, that she would still be among the more powerful beings in such a place, just that she may not be able to easily leave (note how Aki and Forlorn’s pasts don’t seem to have caught up with them yet).

I will admit, though, I do have my biases. Pre-Chapter 5, I had a hypothesis that Victoria was, in some way, connected to Valkyria (per Forlorn’s tattoo and military background), as a warrior woman (goddess) and one of the strongest known beings, while Forlorn’s military culture clearly values strength and (super)power. That’s broadly not sustainable anymore, but I am fond of any ideas that suggest the connection.

Another interpretation of “a different dimension”, I think, would be something similar to our classical conception of a ghost. Imagine she literally doesn’t exist in full anymore in our 3+1 perceivable dimensions, outside of a projection. So she could still be an observer but not have a tangible effect on the world — after all, we really haven’t heard anything about her in the past decade. But this lacks a mechanism for making it happen.


Anyway, a brief interlude on the topic of Victoria:

I’m somewhat fond of this imagery, though I think it’s more likely that Victoria parallels the Queen while Kratis parallels the King. Ignis represents something that wasn’t a part of the original story, and a chance for a different ending, I think. Note the very first line of the entire game (after the Prologue + Chapter 1 update):

‘I’m going to give you one chance. Come with me, or meet your end.’
—The Origin

This is much more in parallel with Victoria and Kratis’s relationship (recall how the story behind Seeker’s scars is that a “15 year old girl beat me up […] She was actually 19”).

There is also evidence that the King still exists in-game: see how the American troops get cut up in Mount Ida. And that’s not even mentioning his diary covering up through 2020 (present day in-game).

I also hypothesised something similar, though at the time it was that the Queen was the first Seeker (aligning with her being the Origin of the superhero as well). For what it’s worth, I do at this point agree that there’s a connection between the power of Seeker (Kratis) and the power of the Broken King, by way of affecting the weather. I see it more as a fragment of the Hero-Monarchs than reincarnation, though.


Where are Forlorn and Aki from?

I’ve mentioned my opinion on this earlier: I do not think they are of this world, and would choose “Another planet” first, though I’ve previously not had to make distinctions between planet/dimension/etc.

A hidden nation demands mechanisms for how it remained hidden for so long, and why it hasn’t affected the setting otherwise. Furthermore, the scale of the conflict Forlorn is implied to have fought in doesn’t fit a conflict on Earth for me either: the trauma he suffers when attacked by mechas (a never-before-seen technology in a major global conflict, as far as we know) suggests that Valkyria Regiment engaged with a similar force before, at minimum ten years ago, which was not known to regular people. Furthermore, Aki and Forlorn’s language is so eldritch and incomprehensible for our protagonist that their mind literally re-interprets it as a more familiar language

‘You heard it wrong! That’s not her tongue, fool! You’re just going for what’s closest, for what’s easiest!’

and then proceeds to shatter our mind.

Part of you recoils in fear. Another part demands you stand tall in defiance. Another chastises you, for dancing so close to death. Yet another roars at you to not tremble before the vanquished. And a dozen more join, creating a cacophony of demands so confusing and loud that you cannot make sense of a single one.

Thereby linking our powers and Other You to the mysteries surrounding Aki and Forlorn: and Other You seems concerned about threats on a more cosmic scale, the kind that could genuinely threaten Seeker and Forlorn in a way that national governments can’t: “You- We need to reach their level. Attempting to face what’s coming without that strength would be a disaster!”

Anyway, what’s more simple is the Crete hypothesis. I used to think this at one point, tracing a potential lineage for Valkyria through the Varangians, and possibly drawing a connection to the Queen’s Guard, but at this point I don’t think it’s directly viable. For one, Aki and Forlorn are not your ‘typical’ Cretan, who (because the Byzantines failed to conquer the Emirate of Crete due to the Hero-Monarchs’ intervention) are more Andalusian and Arab in ancestry, generally speaking. Aki and Forlorn also have a different religion featuring “the Heavens”, not to mention their language, and there also aren’t conflicts that would seem to match Forlorn’s experience at war (as a child and teen, no less).

Lastly, a bonus point that helps lean me more towards “planet” than “dimension” is that Forlorn’s powers likely draw inspiration from Superman (Superstrength, Flight, Heat Vision), and that guy was from another planet, so…


Who is the Broken King?

I really didn’t want to pick “None of the above, but he’s stalking us” — feels too much like a trap, a very broad answer. Not to mention how he does know where we sleep, if you peek at the current header for the (mostly empty) Chapter 6 file in the demo’s code. So we’ll come back to that.

Other You is an interesting idea but one that I’m unconvinced by.

“Right, so we look the exact same because, why? I’m an asshole trying to scare the crap out of you?” Other You replies. "I’m you. Down to the very bones.

“You- We need to reach their level. Attempting to face what’s coming without that strength would be a disaster!”

Note the implication there that “we” are not yet at Seeker and Forlorn’s level, when we know the King is immensely powerful. It just seems like an unnecessary complication on the King’s part if this were true. Not to mention the existence of Other Lat that would need to be explained. As well as that time Other You appeared three times simultaneously in our mind, “eyes shining golden” and “bodies flickering in and out of existence”.

Personally, I find it more likely that Other You helps regulate all the Thoughts inside us, that bubbled up to the surface when hearing Aki and Forlorn’s language, and that they really are just us.

Anyway, my reason for selecting (Other) is that I think the King is singularly focused on the Queen, her will, and the path to her resurrection, and if we personally aren’t an integral part of that, then he wouldn’t care enough to stalk us. He’d know: he’s a thousand years old and immensely powerful, and nothing’s stopping him from keeping tabs on what’s happening in the world. But that wouldn’t necessarily imply that he cares.


Will the Blitz Queen be revived by the end of the Book?

I haven’t thought about this one; I picked “Yes, and the League will help make it happen.” because they deserve a happy ending after all this, to just go off and have adventures together all over the world (the universe) and catch up on everything they’ve missed in peace, and I’d like to help make that happen.

(Is the Queen dead? At the very least, I think the King thinks so, and I kind of trust his word on this.)


And with that, we’ve reached the end! Nothing I’ve said should feel definitive — I think Juan has overall done a good job at not showing his whole hand when it comes to the story. At the end of the day, I’m mostly going off of vibes. But I hope it’s fruitful food for thought.

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Am i the only one who is overwhelmed by the lore like damn i just can’t keep up XD

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Nice!

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