Actually kind of creepy, the Scene with the old lady got me xD
Absolutely loved it!
Keep up the good work!
Thank you!
c l o s e e y e s i n t u n n e l i t c a n s e e
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I have no idea what youāre talking about
Thanks for playing!
Listen. LISTEN.
That had me SPOOKED, you hear me? SPOOKED.
THEREāS AN UPDATE!! My eyes have been blessed thank u.
Lovely author, do you plan on opening up a tumblr/discord/smth??
Thank you!! Iām glad youāre as esctatic as I am about the story!
And I havenāt thought about making one, since weāre in the early stages yet, but I think when the story is a bit more established, it might be a fun idea!
Thank you, this is really fantastic feedback!! Youāre absolutely right, and it would be good to establish how the MC feels before the group chat.
I tried to write it so that you find out about your past from talking to them (i.e. being able to ask questions such as āwhy did you leave?ā), but it would be good to add a few lines beforehand too for clarity.
For your other point, itās infered from your text convos: they tell you that they are waiting outside the station, and I tried to code it so that if you skip the texting or never read the text they sent you, you can only say āExcuse meā when shouting out to themā¦ But that whole meeting needs a lot of work
Sorry for the long rambling reply, I hope that made sense, and Iāll definitely change some of these things so it plays and reads better, thank you!
I really like the email/text idea, great for immersion and getting to know the characters a bit!
Oh, the options where you walk away from Jackson without acknowledging him give you an error so I thought that was all the wip had.
I keep getting 404 errors. Itās most likely because you didnāt wrap up your endings with *finish or *ending. Make sure to add a blurb saying āthis is the end of this routeā or something whenever you hit an end.
Yeah same. I keep getting the same error too.
Love at first read!!! Iād really like to see more of Little Pickering and the other charactersā¦ Andā¦
Watch out for the Nose!!! Yeah, the
Ahhhh this is so good! Are you thinking of adding a tumblr for updates and such? Iād definitely follow for updates!!
If you like fae and vampire stuffs with wholesome action packed thriller horror themed and steamy sex scenes I suggest u guys read the Anita Blake series and Meredith Gentry series
yours truly SPANISHBREAD
I donāt know if itās just me but every time I head to the meeting place with Jackson it doesnāt work and instead say āOur apologies; there was a 404 error while loading game data. Please refresh your browser now; if that doesnāt work, please email support-external@choiceofgames.com with details.ā Is that suppose to happen or?
Absolutely wonderful! Your writing is fantastic and the character interaction is on point. I loved the phone features and the errie spooky feel of the town. Iām really looking forward to reading more of this game.
Thank you so much to you all for your kind and supportive words! I didnāt want to post here until I made another update, but I also didnāt want it to look like Iāve abandoned this
Iāve been writing, but Iāve also been incredibly busy with life, and Iāve hit a bit of a brick wallā¦ Iām rewriting some of the beginning with better character introductions and more memories from your childhood, but Iām finding it so difficult to make it flow without losing pacing, and I donāt want to drag out back story. Iāve ended up writing and scrapping so many small vignettes, I could actually just make an entire deleted scenes section/bloopers, which is mad because have you ever considered books/text games having bloopers? And Iām still writing the first chapterā¦
@beespls thank you! I would love to make a Tumblr, but maybe when Iāve added a bit more to the story! I wouldnāt even know what to post to Tumblr right now for updates
@cone if you mean the part where youāve both been to the liqueur store, and now youāre heading to your friends house, then thatās where the demo ends right now! Iād add a page at the end where it lets you know that this is the end of the demo, but my dumb ass didnāt save a copy of that version before I started making edits
@Barb thank you so much! Iām happy you like it so far
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