[WIP] Chains of Destiny: Book One (~450k words) - Last update: 2025/06/28

Thank you for giving it a read, I’m glad you enjoyed it!

I’m working on the scenes for both him and Zenon, so hopefully, you won’t have to wait long to read them! :smile:

I assure you that I want to be very mindful of how mental health is portrayed in the story. In fact, I’m aiming to avoid the pitfalls of oversimplifying complex mental health issues. The intent is to create a narrative where your character’s mental state reflects the unique experiences and choices they’ve made.

There’s no insanity stat in the game, what I have instead is a trauma stat. This isn’t meant to represent insanity but rather acknowledges that some experiences leave a lasting mark (like what happened to the MC). It simply tracks how severe the ‘incident’ was for the MC based on the event itself (so having 0 trauma isn’t possible) and your choices during that part of the story.

As for a sanity stat, I do plan to include something along those lines, but it’s more about representing your MC’s mental health rather than insanity. This stat will reflect how your MC is coping with the challenges they face, with the possibility of improving or worsening depending on your decisions and circumstances.

I believe that, as humans, we have an incredible capacity to push through obstacles with sheer will (and stubbornness), so life’s challenges are more about growth than making your MC “go crazy.” The sanity meter will influence some aspects of the game (like subtle changes in your inner thoughts or how other characters interact with you/treat you, etc.), but it won’t force you into unwanted actions—you’ll always have the choice to try and climb out of that dark pit rather than make it your home.

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@Notlev Just wanted you to know I enjoy the story so far, I am glad that MC still have Family, a place to go home to, it’s pretty rare to see MC with family unit intact normally they’re lone wolf with nobody that help them.

The story is detailed, I like the pace and with the update finally we get into the core of the game, this shape up to be one of my favorite story.

Congratulations for the update and for reaching this milestone. :partying_face::confetti_ball::tada:

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No our MC is 16! :smiley:

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so still a child :smiley:

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For now yes! >:D

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Hey! Thank you, I’m glad you liked it! :blush:

Chapter 2 had a lot to accomplish, and while I always see room for expansion and improvement, it’s really encouraging to see so many positive reviews and feedback.

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I read the whole demo in a day and it was excellent. I especially wish we could have fought with Eric in the future. Wanted to tear him a new one lol.

Is the voice in Nemio’s head in his fight a god or some supernatural being?

Also, during our birthday celebration I talked with Julia and Neimon told me Iris’s location and I talked with her and even ran off with her to the garden. But afterwards, when I talk to mom and Emma, the game acts like it didn’t happen and they tell me to find Iris and talk with her. Seems like a continuity error.

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Hey! Thank you for giving the demo a read!

Unfortunately, I can’t tell you that. You’ll have to pry that info out of Nemio somehow in the future chapters, so…good luck :smile:

Thank you for mentioning this! I’ve found the bug and now it’s fixed. :blush:

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Saaame, that man’s just :pinched_fingers: He’s my TYPE!
No, I don’t want MC to romance him. I want ME to romance HIM.

*don’t mind me as I build a Nemio shrine and pray to some eldritch being so I can be reincarnated into this IF :bowing_woman:

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MC is 16 at the end of the demo, which is an age of legal adulthood within the world that he’s in.
I’m not advocating for immediate explicit debauchery, but for a possibility of choice in the future. There certainly won’t be any romance for the next few years of the war.

'dis better be a bromance of epic proportions, otherwise my MC will retire to monkhood from all the pining in the temple for the broken heart.
Which of the mentioned gods could heal such affliction, I wonder.

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:smile:I’ll try not to disappoint then.

Meilė, probably. She is the goddess of love and healing, after all.

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I tried to use my silver tongue to make Ben tell me about his past but he didn’t know it lol. I will employ every dirty trick to pry his secret from him. :smiling_imp:

How old is Leona? I know Juna is ahem 26. The other generals seem to be quite older. Also, if she is a governor now then won’t she be more on the political side of things than leading a war? Is the lead general also a governor?

I may have missed some info but since there is a senate making decisions, it seems unlikely but is there a king? Who is at the head of the Republic?

Also, thanks for providing a cheat mode. I don’t like managing stats and like to choose options depending on the situation. With stat heavy games I’m forced to put my skills in a certain stat because I’m afraid I will not meet the required stat checks and am forced to play in a very one dimensional way. I’m more in it for the story.

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Writing in this is as good as some professionally written fantasy novels I’ve read, really enjoying it so far!

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Personally, I imagine since we’re forced into a soldier path, Julia could take a politician route. I could even see her do so in an attempt to bring her big sibling home and get back at those who sent them away to war. At least if you have a loving relation with her. (Which I do)

As for Nemio, I do adore the man. Not wanting a romance, but he’s definitely like a mentor/trusted brother-like figure to my MC. Losing Juna made my MC determined to get stronger to protect himself and his family, so I feel he would have gravitated towards Nemio.

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Hey! She has a character page (integrated into the stats page) where it’s mentioned that she is currently 32 years old.

Being a governor is an appointment decided by the Senate, and the individual must be someone of high rank in the civil administration who has already proven their experience. The territory governed by Leona is on the northern border with the Ceover Confederacy, the nation that has been at war with the Republic for some time (this is the “Northern War” all the characters in Juna’s squad are talking about), though it has simmered down to border skirmishes now.

It will be mentioned in passing later, but it’s not a huge reveal, so: Each governor’s term usually lasts 3 years, and, as I mentioned, they are chosen from high-ranking civil administrators. However, considering the risk of another invasion from the North and the ravaged state of the territory after the war, Leona, the most experienced general in the area, was given command as a military governor for 5 years to restore order and safeguard the Republic from another invasion. By the time the MC takes part in the current war in the West, Leona’s term has already ended (I forgot to update her character page; she is no longer a governor), and she is now given command of a single cohortum to serve under Dolion’s command. The other generals are not governors; Leona is just a special case.

No, there is no king. The Republic is governed collectively, designed to prevent any one person from having too much power. Technically, the Senate is the head of the Republic, but you could argue that as the First Citizen, Lucius is currently the head of the Senate and, therefore, the Republic.

I’m pretty much the same—I like to play IFs for the story, and I’m not one for achievements or specific challenges in these types of games. My goal is to make sure that everyone can enjoy the story in the way that suits them best, whether they like managing stats or prefer to focus purely on the narrative.

Thank you! :blush: I’m glad you’re enjoying the story - if you have any suggestions or critiques, just let me know.

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Please tell me you are not planning on removing POV changes. They add Soo much depth to the story

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Hey! Nah, they are staying, and there will be more of them in the future. The POV changes and interludes are there for a reason (other than adding depth), which will be explained later in the story. The only thing I won’t do is a POV change where the MC is involved, but you’re not in control of them.

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Pretty good,but after Junas death i just kinda stopped caring. Like what was the point of giving her her own relationship stats if you are gonna just kill her off in the beggining? I don know man i really did not like that. It reminds me of ,the beggining after the end" in all worst ways. Can be just me though…

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Do you have any suggestions then, or…?

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Honestly I think that exist for dialogue variation is MC close or not with Juna, like her sister/parents still around, friends like Nemio probably have specific dialogue on how close MC’s relationship with her.

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