Don’t get me wrong I like the hero type characters too😁 like Aang, Naruto, Ichigo, Goku, The battousi and Marth. But I find the edgy ones a little more interesting.
I’m glad to hear you’re having fun with the dynamics. Just a note that the dynamics between you and some of the more important characters will be affected based off how you treat them.
So far being the rival/opposite half is only just one of a few dynamics you can explore.
Hello there!
I apologize for the error. I’ll go see what’s wrong.
Yep just like that. The shougen has abilities that can render physical attacks useless just like fire and grass type pokémon. This goes as well for some of the other powers that have counters. I believe they are listed in the Elementals tab in the show stats menu thingy.
Welcome to the Hunter Sky thread!
That sounds like a good idea.
Just finished the demo, I can see the strong influence of shounen in this game with world building and power system.
Unfortunately, the wording and paragraphs show clear inexperience in writing, with certain parts are too short while others are too long, the scene where Lea tells us about the Princess are a prime example.
The dialogues are decent but tend to over-explain the MC’s intention, making them awkward sometimes. Use clearer, more straightforward words while reverse describing the intent behind choices that only affect personality and relationships, the players will fill in the intent themselves, making them immersive easier
In short, the potential and ideas are there but this demo needs a lot of polish
Hello there! Welcome to the Hunter Sky thread!
I thank you for taking time out to play the game and offer feedback. Any advice is always welcome and honesty is always appreciated. I love your response.
You are correct in stating that the game is shonen influenced. That was the aim as well as to add some classic rpg components. I have an acquired taste for anime and you should too😎. This is my very first attempt at making a game of any kind(especially Interactive Fiction), so I expected there would be a few loose ends in certain areas. Plus getting used to the format of IF writing and coding was a bit confusing for me at first which shows a little if you have a keen eye.
As for the writing itself. I’ve come to realise that while there is always great room for me to improve, this seems to be my own unique writing style as told to me by a mentor. Apart from a few grammatical errors I can only say that my style of writing is probably just not your taste. Still though I do intent to polish out certain glaring problems with the grammar and dialogue as you advised. Thanks again mate. I really appreciate your help.
I love the knight school setting and how there’s a lot of characters that have distinct personalities, it makes the world feel fleshed out. I also like the options to play as a cocky/cheeky MC. I also like how it’s acknowledged that female MC would face some discrimination in a mostly male knight academy, and that she can relate to Lea about that. However, there are some coding issues with female MC.
I’m going to list all the times female MC was referred to as a man for fixing purposes. In the prologue MC’s father says “Son, I want you to take your mother’s necklace and follow the crowd to safety,” even to female MC. The knight letting MC into the school says, “Proceed young lad!” to female MC. When beating Jirell a knight says, “Are you trying to kill him lad?” After MC and Jirell squabble Sir Caldwell says, “Well lads, I enjoyed that little dramatic skit.” MC and Lea are referred to as “Jack and Jill” during the headband trial. MC thinks to herself she’s glad to not share a room “with ten plus other guys.” Jirell says MC is “no ordinary bloke,” with her energy level. When the chikara man catches Jirell and MC sparring he calls them “you lads,” twice. In the archery competition the mercenary says, “This here boy has more balls than you lot,” about MC. Also, MC says she is mocked for wearing her mother’s earrings. A little girl typically wouldn’t be made fun of for wearing earrings.
Other than those issues I’m really enjoying the story and cast. Looking forward to the next update.
Mocked for earrings? I didnt see that one when i brought these up. Hmm. Must been a different choice I didnt do.
Hello☺ Welcome to the threads!
It feels good to know that you had fun. Others have pointed these out to me but I thank you for letting me know as well. I am going to go back and fix those errors soon so rest assured. I just wanna reach a certain amount of chapters first before I go back to the older ones.
I’ve just finished chapter 12. After I run some checks I’ll upload it sometime today.
Chapter 12 is out now guys! Here it is:
https://dashingdon.com/play/matt-fusin-/hs-tales-/mygame/
Enjoy😎 Any feedback is much appreciated.
Congrats with 1/3 of the book being done
Much thanks for the kind words 
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Love the update but when the little girl ask me to train her I get a error when I agree or disagree
Hey, great chapter as always!
Tarak is really sweet.
Well that seems to be a mistake on my part. Thank you lots for addressing the issue. I’ll correct it so it feels nore natural for the MC you want to play as.
Oh that’s not supposed to happen. Let me go back and see the problem.
I’m happy you enjoyed it and I’m pleased you took a liking to Tarak. She really is a sweat little gal isn’t she.
I hope to kind of make it like FE where you can recruit people to fight with you, so the Jushaar tribe is just the start.
I think it might be my tablet because I haven’t seen anyone else mention it
Could you describe the error message please?
Worry not I’ll fix it either way.