The demo has got me hooked, currently most interested in finding out more about the crime family side of our family and inheriting the business (even if that probably would’ve broken dad’s heart had he still lived) also think it would be fun to go with an MC who’s actually kind of into Rin, but is also really turned off by how pushy their dad is, just because the idea of the man realizing he was his own worst enemy all along is really, really funny.
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Yes, assault rifles and submachine guns require way more training than your average semiautomatic pistol. With any long gun, you have to consider the added responsibilities such as barrel discipline, proper hand positioning, the different types of sights, stocks, etc, etc.
I honestly won’t have any interest in mundane weapons in this game, but the wide range of options won’t go unappreciated.
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Well yeah the game told me “it’s your friend name” and asking me to put another name. It’s cool I think when the game force me to put another name cause no other game do the same thing as you 
I really like your story cause it’s not like your typical superpower trope and your story already make me crave for more.
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You know, my hot take on Mom continued. She isn’t a mom. She’s an egg donor. And since I don’t consider a sperm donor a dead beat dad, I’m giving mom a pass. She made it clear she didn’t want to be a parent. There is nothing wrong with that. Some people would make terrible parents. Her being a narcissist would mean MC would have been raised by a parent like that. It would have been terrible for the MC. A parent who manipulates them constantly. It would have been abusive. There would have been a worse rift between Mom and Dad as they fought over that abuse, leaving MC to be raised in a full on toxic environment rather than being the sole beloved of Dad.
I think Mother dearest should get points for being self aware enough to know this and leaving. Making a good choice for everyone. Sometimes the right choice can hurt, but it can hurt much less than if the wrong one had been made. Not everyone is fit to be a parent.
The emotional manipulation sucked. But if you consider it. It was one instance and if she hadn’t “abandoned” MC, it would have been much worse. Not saying she isn’t a terrible person for doing it. But I am saying she isn’t a bad mom for doing. Because she isn’t a mom. She is an egg donor who happens to be a self centered individual. She’s just not a nice person in general. But not nice =/= evil. She’ll be judged as a person, not a mother in the future by my MC 
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It’s not really masochism. Okay maybe a bit. It’s just I find very romantic the idea of a (child) bully changing their attitude. I don’t know making someone stop being a jerk for love is very romantic for me.
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This is really good. I really enjoyed the interactions with dad, luka cara and ash. I could see how they fit as a found family almost. And the shadow powers are my favorite by far. Can’t wait to see what we can do with those. Also can’t wait to dropkick egg donor in the face.
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I want to be completely honest because this is just how I am.
I really, really wanna give mom the smackdown
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I love the bit with Luka and the Principle. Imagine you’re planning to throw your weight around to get your kid off Scot free and you find out their victim’s uncle runs the Bratva.
@Radiantbliss I think her refusal to acknowledge us when she clearly knew we were her kid makes her a bad person tbh. As does her attempts to mind control us. Like, I get not wanting kids but the reason she’d be a bad parent is that she’s a bad person. And even if she didn’t want to be MC’s mother, that’s still her family she’s doing it to. You don’t stop being related to someone because you didn’t want a kid. it’d be a shitty thing to do regardless but it’s just a little bit worse now.
*fidget
*No period needed.
*with
*“wouldn’t” Also, yest I would. I totally would.
*Period.
*either. Also, this sentence feels a bit abrupt for the previous scene. We need more buildup, I think.
*dug, melted.
*Cover. Also, it’s hard to explain why but for some reason, putting an adjective in that part of the sentence doesn’t really work. I wish I knew why, it just sounds a bit… off.
*might have or might’ve
“What”
*curse
*Pale
*Tense
*Yelp
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Agree. Add that to the fact that she’s only seeking out the MC because her life is in danger, she seems like the kind of person that just uses people. But I’m also glad Mc was able to have a stable loving parent. Yvette as a person leaves a bad taste in mouth, I don’t think she should even be called a “mother”
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Sperm donors =/= family. Neither should egg donors. She’s not a bad parent because she isn’t a parent. Was never going to be a parent. She did not want to be one, she could have done the alternative but she proceeded to give birth for Dad, because he wanted it. She did that for him and then bounced. She was effectively a surrogate. That’s it. MC obviously is not her family. Just like blood =/= family. Also, not all bad people are bad parents. Just like good people aren’t necessarily good parents. But I did explain how her narcissism would have made her a bad parent. So idk what you want.
As for her behavior, she was in her super hero persona, in public. Even if she had any desire to be a parent, that was not the moment for it. Granted, as a child MC wouldn’t have thought about that. Which is why feelings of hurt are valid. But really, it would have run into the possibility of being dangerous if she has enemies.
I never made excuses for her emotional manipulation part (though I didn’t get that since my MC was just sad). I did agree that was terrible to do. I also agree she is probably not a nice person. It’s been said she is a narcissist. The very definition says they put themselves first. Never said she was a good person. I just don’t think she’s evil. Just, you know, she’s more of an a$sh*le with super powers.
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Where are you getting the bit where she “made it clear” she didn’t want children? I never saw that, just that she put her career first and left after our birth. There’s no evidence that she said she was gonna bounce after this beforehand.
Also yes, I think a sperm donor acting like that to the resulting child would be a terrible thing to do.
You better believe when she asks for our help, I’m gonna make her squirm a bit first.
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I could have sworn I read it somewhere, either in this thread or elsewhere. So I could be wrong on that. However, the fact she bounced and has not tried to be a mom since is still pretty indicative that she did not want to be a mother.
Now if she decides to try to act like she is mom when she returns. By all means let her have it. But so far there is absolutely no indication she wanted to be a mother beyond carrying the baby. Her and her career were what was important to her, as said by Dad. Playing the sad route, she absolutely shut down MC’s hope of her being seen as mom. She did not want it. She falls more into egg donor and surrogate than she does of mother. No matter how much child MC may wish it.
Granted perception could change based on what happens in story. But I don’t gather from what we have seen that there was any indication she wanted the child other than going to term. All her actions after that, all point to the conclusion she does not want the child.
And the point of sperm donor was not in correlation to actions made towards the child so much as pointing out a sperm donor =/= father automatically, it’s why they get called sperm donors and not dads and fathers. They provided the necessary materials but did not provide the function of the position.
You are forgetting she was in her super hero persona. In public. I already addressed this point. It’s not evil. Hurt the kids feelings, sure. But not an evil act and actually makes sense.
We as of yet do not fully know the agreement between Yvette and Viktor. We don’t know if she provided child support or not, or even if it was wanted. For all we know Viktor refused it. Which would mean she was not a dead beat mom. All of this is making assumptions though. Logic dictates she did not want the child in her life. This is shown. In multiple ways. Obviously Dad did want the child. Dad says she made a choice. It sounds pretty clear she made that call to not want to be a mother and her actions verify this. Unless you want to add in with no foundation evidence that Dad gave her an ultimatum, trying to force her hand and she had to make a choice like that. But that is injecting a lot of assumptions.
She gave the baby up, one way or another. They ceased being family at that point. It’s no different than putting a child up for adoption. Dad is family. Uncle Luka is family. Clara is family. Ash is family. Yvette is not.
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No see, if you agree to be a surrogate, sperm or egg donor, BEFOREHAND, then that makes sense. If you just bounce after the birth without arranging it beforehand, you’re not a surrogate, you’re a deadbeat parent evading child support. “Not wanting it” isn’t good enough at this point. She had the kid. unless there was an agreement that she’d be a surrogate without custody beforehand, it ain’t ok. and sure, she’d be a shitty parent, but that too is HER failing. It’d be HER responsibility to change that about herself. Otherwise, she shouldn’t have agreed to this whole enterprise in the first place.
They’re still the father of the child is my point. They wouldn’t be obligated to serve the role as parent, but shutting the kid down as shown, and straight up lying about it when the kid is so obviously distressed, is straight up evil.
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Just found it on the Tumblr. Truth be told, the context of it makes me dislike her regardless but for reasons I’d rather not go into here.
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I really enjoyed this. I like where this story will potentially take me(the reader) and it’s characters --of which I love and love to hate(looking at you Mirage)!! I can’t wait to be introduced to the rest of the cast and embark on this journey.
In regards to the MC’s inherited powers(I’ve read all the posts and follow up answers), I’m curious then, is it possible to use both simultaneously? Or combine them to do some crazy/cool stuff? Unless that will kill them cause it sounds like using that amount of output will have dire if not irrevocable consequences.
Lastly, RIP Papa Viktor, I had you for a brief moment in time and will miss you very much…and you have terrible taste in women, but you’re a good dad. This old heart of mine can’t take another death in the Morozov family after him so I hope good ol’ Uncle Luka is here to stay for the MC for the rest of the story.
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@Valixon Hey glad you’re liking the song 
It’s an unofficial fan-made music video, the anime footage used is from a promotional animation one-shot for Blade Runner 2049… lemme check. Ah yes, the description said: BLADE RUNNER 2049 - “Black Out 2022” Anime Short 
@Fenrir1 I kinda imagine them to be a little bit more wispy and shadowy but I think they certainly can manifest this solid during a particularly fierce fights
@XaosMinion Oh my gosh 
Thank you so much for the very first fan art I’ve ever received! I love it 
I can already see that she’ll gravitate towards more sarcastic responses (no pun intended)
@rkgk Yes! It’s never too early 
and if you decided to draw something, please don’t hesitate to post it here or send it on Tumblr ask!
@Xoromin Have you been taking a peek at my notes 
That’s certainly a response that sarcastic MCs can give her.
@AstinFamily Haha jokes aside, I’m glad you’re liking him I can say to you that he might reappear again later on in certain routes 
But not romanceable though, sorry!
@tjapoenk Haha glad you think it’s unique I certainly don’t want an instance where MC is named the same as an important character and the book just treats as if it’s nothing weird. And yes, I try to give the characters superpowers that are hopefully, not too mainstream (except for Ash, because not making them a pyrokinetic with short-temper and aggressive impulse is just passing too good of a chance )
@Radiantbliss @comradelenin The asks I’ve been sent on Tumblr regarding her has been split like this also. Some people don’t hold it against her or resent her for not wanting to raise MC and be in their lives, but they certainly hate her for embarrassing MC and/or trying to emotionally manipulate MC. While the other half resented her for everything, including not wanting MC. And both are perfectly valid way to read her! 
And also, I think both sides feel disgusted that she’s now searching for MC once her life is in danger
I certainly didn’t mean to write her as the classic, moustache-twirling evil villain. I’m trying to write her as a “villain” that’s much more realistic, that can exist in our world as well. But of course, evilness is something subjective and can be interpreted differently by each person. I personally feel like the way she’s now, it’s almost like a hollow shell of who she once was. She attained everything she set out to get: fame, glory, wealth, the admiration of the whole city. But in the end, she’s left feeling empty and she has been having a harder and harder time making a real connection with other people; she has never found another ‘Viktor’.
Yes! I was just thinking of an AU, where Viktor didn’t die and keeps on raising MC and I believe Yvette will try to reconnect and make amends with Viktor. Believe it or not, she really does love him and he’s the only person that she’s reluctant and don’t want to use her ability on ever, as such, he’s the only person that she feels like she has true connection to. The tragedy of their love of course is that, even in this AU, they would likely split up again for the very reason you had just explained 
Yvette did entertain the idea of really starting a family with Viktor, but she was also torn with her career and fame. She knew that once she became a mother and started a family, it would complicate her career as a superhero very much, not to mention also her popularity and fanbase may stagnate or even decline and the superhero scene is very fierce and unforgiving. I think the closest comparison to our real world is the K-pop boyband & girlband scene in S. Korea. There’s always another superhero that wants to go up the rank and will take advantage of the declining performance of another superhero above them.
In the end, she chose her career and decided to give birth to MC after some persuasion and convincing from Viktor (One thing I want to make clear here is that it has always been her decision at the end, and Viktor never forced and will never force her to do something she doesn’t want to). They basically made an agreement that Viktor would take the kid and raise them while she’ll just continue on with her career; and they parted pretty amicably on the surface, but there were still a lot of unresolved and hurt feelings deep down.
They never really discussed child support because Viktor could secure a pretty well-paying but mundane white-collar job. If worse come to worst, Viktor also still kept close contact and relationship with his brother, Luka, who was still in the Morozov Family, and their family is not lacking financially and is a big powerhouse among New York’s underground.
@Radiantbliss @comradelenin I hope this help clears things up and everyone is free to interpret and read their relationship and the characters according to their views. Me, as an author, can’t and won’t force anyone to see things from my POV (I hope I’ve explained stuff pretty neutrally and factual). The beauty of art is of course each person will read and interpret things differently; each iteration of the characters in every reader’s mind differ a little from the others’ as they are influenced by their own experiences and beliefs (and I’m not trying to say my story is art )
@littleNV Canonically it is possible, but I’m not sure I’ll be implementing such stuff in the book. For now, I have no plans to do so yet, but everything is subject to change. Sometimes I plan scenes and stuffs in my head beforehand and it just change quite a lot once I actually get to write it out.
Also, the reason lore-wise is that it’ll be pretty taxing for MC to use both of those powers in tandem, especially if they both can attain the same or similar result from just using one of them. Remember that there are side-effects and limits too how much ability users are able to use their powers in one span of time. Pushing your limits too much can be catastrophic for your body and we could actually see Luka got convulsions after he pushed himself beyond the limit trying to save his brother. I’ve been playing with the idea of counting how many times MC used their power in one chapter or one long fight/battle to try incorporate these side-effects and limits in the story as well.
But, you’ll be able to use gravikinesis in one encounter or fight and immediately switch to umbrakinesis right when you meet the next wave of attackers or next attack
“Amen to that…” - Luka.
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@jsc Do you plan do write more books in the same universe?
For now, not yet but certainly if I suddenly find another inspiration, maybe another tale of a citizen in the Elysium City that is interesting enough after this MC’s tale is concluded
The core and concept of this story has been brewing for quite a while in my head for months (maybe even a year without me realizing it consciously), and such, once I started writing the beginning of the story, it came out smoother than even I expected it to be. I think I wrote the Prologue and Chapter 1 in the span of two weeks or so. The endings for this story are also another things that are very clear to me even from the beginning. My only problem is how to get there in a satisfactory and enjoyable way
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Would she ever go full Mommy Dearest if she kept MC? Probably not from what we’ve seen, but it’s something I’d want to see someday.
Btw. this might be a spoiler but will the rivalry with Skylar will have more to do with MC’s relationship with their mother? And will Skylar insist MC forgive their mentor and consider them as awesome as they do?
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Lol, Why don’t she just put glasses at home and put Cape at work? Like God old times XD.
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