Silverworld -- BETA TESTERS NEEDED

In an alternate timeline, the Byzantine Empire never fell, and instead became the preeminent colonial power of the 19th Century. In this world, you are summoned to Constantinople to go a secret mission: back in time, to witness the creation of the universe. Only, something goes horribly wrong, and you end up much further in the past than should be possible. In this savage land you must repair your time machine and return home, but the Silverworld may have other ideas for you…

Email me, jason AT choiceofgames for access. DO NOT SEND ME A MESSAGE THROUGH THE FORUM MAIL SYSTEM. When you send your EMAIL, include your forumname, your real name, and the game you want to test.

(You cannot be testing two games at once. Send feedback on one and you can apply to another.)

I will send you a link, a username, and a password.

Return feedback TO ME. Preferably part of the same thread, rather than a new email.

I’m looking for “high level” and “low level” feedback. Not mid-level feedback.

Low-level = typos and continuity errors. A continuity error is when a character’s gender flips, or someone comes back from the dead, or you run into a plotline that just doesn’t make sense (because it’s probably a coding error).

For these low-level issues, SCREENSHOTS are VERY HELPFUL. If you see a problem, take a screenshot, or copy and paste the text that is in error, and email that. Also, the “BUG” button is great; but if you use BUG, make sure to say in your email who you are, so I can give you credit for the report.

“High level” feedback has to do with things like plot, pacing, and characters. “Scene A didn’t work for me because x, y, and z,” is useful feedback. “B character was entirely unsympathetic, because u, w, and v,” is also useful feedback.

“Mid-level” feedback describes things like grammar, style, or the use of commas. As I said above, I do not want mid-level feedback. In particular, DO NOT WRITE TO ME ABOUT COMMAS.

“I had a great time and saw only a few spelling errors,” is not useful feedback. In fact, it’s the sort of thing that results in you not being given access to future betas.

Some examples of useful high-level feedback:

In Choice of the Dragon, you get to choose what type of wings you have: leather or scaled. Someone wrote in and asked about having feathered wings. Great suggestion! Done!

In “The Eagle’s Heir,” someone asked about Eugenie. They said that the romance moved too quickly–because she only appeared in the last third of the game–and wished they could have had an opportunity to meet her earlier. So the authors added an opportunity to meet her and start the romance earlier in the game (in a scene that already existed).

In “Demon Mark: A Russian Saga” several people commented on how the PC’s parents were unsympathetic, so the authors added a choice or two to deepen the relationship with the parents in the first chapter, to help better establish their characters.

Similarly, pointing out a specific choice and saying, “this is who I imagined my character was at this particular moment, and none of these options seemed right for me. I would have liked an option to do X instead,” is really helpful feedback.

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New draft up!

  • An overhaul to the sample names (to “paganize” them, and to let you choose a name from a list instead of having to *input_name.
  • An expanded climax if you choose to let the mountain fall, starting at the increasingly inaccurately named *label skyfall_good_final_choice
  • Various minor fixes and nudges to improve flow, per various people’s recommendations, including a few *fake_choices to slow certain scenes down
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New draft up!

New draft up!

So many changes! Continuity fixes galore!

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New draft posted! Extensive fixes!

New draft posted! Final call!

Well, I thought it was the final call.

New draft posted! More beta testers appreciated!