Sorry, this might not be the most helpful comment in the world, but…
Wow! I loved every moment of this and I can’t wait for more!!!
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This scared me for a second😭 Thank you!!
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wow this is so polished and engaging right from the outset, i can’t wait to read more!!
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I wasn’t sure about playing another music IF but oh wow this is amazing and i’m SO happy i gave it a chance. It’s very well written.
As i said, i was reluctant about starting another IF revolving around music and fame, but I love the fresh and unique spin you brought to yours, with it being in set in the 70s (super into the music scene during that time) and the murder aspect of it. It’s definitely different from anything i’ve read.
I’m actually really happy the MC is genderlocked female because it allows certain topics to be broached, which would be difficult with a gender of choice MC. I also really love that MC is the only woman in the band, not only because it makes her special lol but again because of all the interesting themes this allows to raise.
Love the romance options we interacted with so far, they’re all irresistible. But i can’t lie i’m already so in love with Vince!!! And i’m already so attached to the band when i got them for 2 minutes and they’re already being taken away from me lol Just another testament to your great writing.
Anyway, this is one of the best WIPs out there and i’m definitely gonna keep a very close eye on it <3
edit: forgot to say, the George Harrison mentions are so funny because the first person i thought to be inspired by when making my MC was Pattie Boyd lmao
edit 2 : the “Alive” status on the characters’ profiles and the way the demo ended are making me super nervous. PLS let nothing happen to Vince and the members 
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OMG I love it……I couldn’t help but scream when I saw the name Dusty Springfield come up!! Because I happened to be listening to her song while playing this WIP …How the hell did you know I liked her 
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Hi! I know it’s quite literally been 2 weeks, but I wanted to let you know that I was able to get in touch with a Choice of Games moderator and now the character descriptions are linked above!
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Ah!!! This was so lovely to read! Thank you so much and I’m glad you’re enjoying everything so far. I wanted to do a ‘70s music interactive story so badly because of how obsessed I am with that entire world. But I have read Infamous and so has everyone else that reads IFs, so I wanted to make this as different and isolated as I possibly could. Not to mention, I’ve read and seen Daisy Jones & the Six, seen Almost Famous and I recently saw Stereophonics on Broadway, so I just knew I had to do something somewhat new. It comes as such a relief to me that you like it and think it’s working so far :’)
P.S. I cannot make any promises on who is safe and who isn’t just yet. But in my defence, it hurts me to see any of these characters die!!!
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I’m psychic what can I say 
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I love Daisy Jones & The Six and i got those vibes from Scapegoated! I’ve heard of Almost Famous but never watched it, so i’m putting it on my watchlist now!!
Totally understandable. Just thinking about it hurts already lol
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Looks like the musical theme is really picking up! 
I’m loving the premise. As someone who isn’t from the US, it’s cool to explore the hippie era through this story. I know bits and pieces about the time, but experiencing it this way is immersive and even a bit educational.
I really like how the historical context is included, like the Civil Rights Movement and the assassination of Martin Luther King. It gives the story a lot of depth and makes it feel authentic. The MC feels like someone truly shaped by this era and not just a modern person dropped into the 1970s.
I also think the gender-locked MC is a great choice. The further back you go in history, the more gender influences your experiences. The MC being the only woman in the band not only reflects those dynamics but also helps drive the plot (like the rumors about relationships and the band breaking up).
It gives me vibes of Infinity Series with its male MC or Guinevere with Guen as the lead. Both stories really leaned into their specific perspectives, and it made them so much stronger while still giving players plenty of agency.
I thought I’d also throw in some coding suggestion to save you from having to copy-paste the same chunks of text multiple times. If you’re not interested, feel free to skip the rest of this post
Code Snippets
Instead of duplicating whole blocks of code for different scenarios (e.g., lesbian vs. non-lesbian characters), you can use conditional logic to tweak only the parts that change.
Original Code
He winces, "Your faith in me is comforting."
*if (mc_sexuality = "lesbian")
*choice
#"You're the best writer I know."
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
But in spite of the Recording Academy's decision, you always viewed songs written by Leon and Vince as stronger contenders because...
*choice
#You aren't as passionate about songwriting as them.
*set relaxed +2
*set musicality -2
*goto award_subjectivity
#You think they are stronger writers than you.
*set confident -2
*set humble +2
*goto award_subjectivity
*label award_subjectivity
*set ophelia true
[TEXT]
*set vincent_friendship +4
*set kind +2
*goto favourite_record
#"I didn't mean it like that!"
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set shy +2
*goto favourite_record
#"I thought I'd start at half and work our way up."
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set humorous +1
*set vincent_friendship +2
*goto favourite_record
#"My writing on the album was better than yours."
[TEXT]
*set arrogant +2
*set confident +2
*set musicality +1
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
#"Excuse me for trying to be attentive."
[TEXT]
*set humorous +1
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
#"Stop being so sensitive."
[TEXT]
*set hostile +2
*goto favourite_record
#"Someone has to keep you grounded."
[TEXT]
*set humorous +2
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
*else
*choice
#"You're the best writer I know."
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
But in spite of the Recording Academy's decision, you always viewed songs written by Leon and Vince as stronger contenders because...
*choice
#You aren't as passionate about songwriting as them.
*set relaxed +2
*set musicality -2
*goto award_subjectivity2
#You think they are stronger writers than you.
*set confident -2
*set humble +2
*goto award_subjectivity2
*label award_subjectivity2
*set ophelia true
[TEXT]
*set vincent_friendship +4
*set kind +2
*goto favourite_record
#"I didn't mean it like that!"
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set shy +2
*goto favourite_record
#"I thought I'd start at half and work our way up."
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set humorous +1
*set vincent_friendship +2
*goto favourite_record
#"My writing on the album was better than yours."
[TEXT]
*set arrogant +2
*set confident +2
*set musicality +1
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
#"I couldn't have more faith in you if I tried." ♡
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set kind +1
*set vincent_romance +2
*goto favourite_record
#Laugh and run your fingers through his hair. ♥
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set vincent_romance +3
*goto favourite_record
#"Excuse me for trying to be attentive."
[TEXT]
*set humorous +1
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
#"Stop being so sensitive."
[TEXT]
*set hostile +2
*goto favourite_record
#"Someone has to keep you grounded."
[TEXT]
*set humorous +2
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
Instead of putting the condition (*if) at the start of the block, you can integrate the logic directly within the option list. This way, you avoid duplicating:
Proposed Improvment
He winces, "Your faith in me is comforting."
*choice
#"You're the best writer I know."
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
But in spite of the Recording Academy's decision, you always viewed songs written by Leon and Vince as stronger contenders because...
*choice
#You aren't as passionate about songwriting as them.
*set relaxed +2
*set musicality -2
*goto award_subjectivity2
#You think they are stronger writers than you.
*set confident -2
*set humble +2
*goto award_subjectivity2
*label award_subjectivity2
*set ophelia true
[TEXT]
*set vincent_friendship +4
*set kind +2
*goto favourite_record
#"I didn't mean it like that!"
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set shy +2
*goto favourite_record
#"I thought I'd start at half and work our way up."
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set humorous +1
*set vincent_friendship +2
*goto favourite_record
#"My writing on the album was better than yours."
[TEXT]
*set arrogant +2
*set confident +2
*set musicality +1
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
*if (mc_sexuality != "lesbian")
#"I couldn't have more faith in you if I tried." ♡
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set kind +1
*set vincent_romance +2
*goto favourite_record
*if (mc_sexuality != "lesbian")
#Laugh and run your fingers through his hair. ♥
[TEXT]
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*set vincent_romance +3
*goto favourite_record
#"Excuse me for trying to be attentive."
[TEXT]
*set humorous +1
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
#"Stop being so sensitive."
[TEXT]
*set hostile +2
*goto favourite_record
#"Someone has to keep you grounded."
[TEXT]
*set humorous +2
*set vincent_friendship +2
*set whiskey_eyes true
*set ophelia true
*goto favourite_record
So the main idea is using:
*if (mc_sexuality != "lesbian")
#Laugh and run your fingers through his hair. ♥
This way the responses are hidden if this check is not fullified
Or you could do *selectable_if like you are already doing in some cases so player knows its possible option but can’t choose it for obvious reason.
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I also like the genderlocked MC. Genderlock is always better in my opinion. Unless the author changes lots of flavour about MC. 
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That’s amazing to hear! I’m glad you’re learning new things about this era!! I find myself learning new things the more I plan and write Chapter 1. I’m glad you’re enjoying it so far. And thank you for your understanding about the gender-locked MC. It wasn’t a decision made lightly.
Thank you for the insight about the coding–I wanted to do that initially actually, but I wasn’t sure if it would still work that way, so that’s good to know! This is unbelievably helpful, thank you for going out of your way to check it–I didn’t even know anyone could do that! I really appreciate it :') I’ll definitely make the changes when I’m publishing Chapter 1.
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i’ve been thinking about this one sooo much since playing it, it’s crazy… (i will have penn or ELSE!!!) and so as part of the obsession i did draw my girlina, dominique, and i just thought i’d share <3. maybe part of why i’m so obsessed with her is because of the option to be the bassist, which i always have to pick that my characters play the bass if the option is there bc i play bass 
anyways i also wanna echo that the genderlock is great and i love it as an opportunity for a lot more depth! said as someone who basically never plays genderlocked male IFs because ive already had enough playing as a man in god only knows how many games in my life until i started mostly playing rpgs that let the player make their own character lmao.
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How did they know that I am a horrible skank that tries to sleep with as many people as I can in these games! It is like i am in a Deadpool fourth wall break… well less violence obviously…
Jokes aside, that was fun. Looking forward to more.
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I will definitely try not to! My goal is the MC has to deal with the issues of being a woman in the entertainment industry during the '70s, but her personality and skills are determined by the reader’s choices. So far so good it seems but I don’t want to speak too soon ah!
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First of all, I just want to say that your drawing is INSANELY cool! If I could pin this I absolutely would. You’re so talented! An artist AND a bassist? Leave some talent for the rest of us please!
And I’m glad you support my decision in making the MC a gender-locked female. Honestly, I’m surprised there’s been an upset about it at all for that reason and gender in general is extremely central to the plot–it wasn’t a decision I made for the sake of in other words–but I do to a degree understand the feeling of wanting to feel represented by what you’re reading (I am a black woman after all haha). Either way, I’m hoping it will make more sense to those that are on the fence about it going forward.
In all honesty, the response has been overwhelmingly positive, so I couldn’t be more thankful! And on the topic of being thankful, THANK YOU SO SO MUCH!
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I love the female locked games. As a transwoman (in my mind transitioned) I only play female PoV cause I can’t relate to manly stuff. 
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[Insert the ‘Does he know?’ Paul Dano meme]
And jokes aside on my part this time, I’m glad you’re looking forward to more!!
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You’re an icon, you’re a legend and you are the moment <3 (Edit: Also, congratulations on your transition! Sending you so much endless love)
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Oh thanks but the transition is only mentally. My outher shell is still a man sadly. I wont do the hormon therapy and other things. I don’t accept my outer shell but I can live with it.
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