Good catch. Looks like I had double parentheses, so I’ve gone and fixed that, just in case.
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Ideas for the prologue part
Since the audience will be full of thryxes and humans too, maybe the seating arrangements/layout of the ceremony can show the fundamental and status differences between the two races. Explaining what a thryx is might be trickier since the PC themself already knows that information (assuming that the prologue is told from the PC’s POV).
I think this is a good idea. But, also, if you think it’ll be too long, since the information you need to give the reader is information that the player character themself already knows, the PC could summarize it to some degree, like “The priest continues on about the story you’ve all heard since you were a child—about the dastardly human who tried to wordweave his True Name to change its meaning to “god,” caused the Cataclysm, and proved for the millionth time why humans were inferior to thryxes.” That’s a rushed example but yeah you could summarize it all or mix direct speech with summaries, as well as break it up with descriptions of the priest and ceremony.
About your concern about the lore dump being dry, I think the way the priest tells the story and shows their own personality and prejudices (or lack thereof), and the way the people around the PC react to it, can help make it feel more alive and less dry. I think the article that Hazel shared could be really helpful to that end:
Moving past the prologue for now to write Act 1 with the lore dump assumed complete sounds like a great idea; you can drop all concerns about what essential information the player needs to know and just sit in the PC’s POV and write it naturally. And the return-with-fresh-eyes thing too, for sure. Hope it goes well, best of luck!
Narrator: She did, in fact, start that.
Narrator: …And she was, in fact, late.
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This is a whole mood.
Almost everything I’ve written has been because something else has inspired me. Art inspires art, imo.
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Hiiiiiiiiii.
Mid-way through October I asked myself, “dang, why do i feel so lonely,” and I realized I forgot to check in on these WIP threads! Then November fell on me like a washing machine and I needed to put myself through a rinse & spin cycle until l was presentable again. Very happy to see your faces.
I finished my monthly blog post and joined BlueSky. My goal for the next 3 weeks is to write as much as possible, and then do 0 writing while on holiday.
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Hey, I think these are all very good ideas! Thanks a lot, and I’ll definitely check that articles out : )
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This is a good goal, but I gotta ask you, is it reasonably achievable in December? (that said, you can also absolutely ignore the fuck outta me. XD I’m not your mom or teacher. I only brought it up because I myself am trying to learn to set SMART goals for myself, rather than vague ones.)
followed you! I’m otaku_lady89 over there.
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Thank you! I followed you back! 
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Im already halfway done
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Managed to lock in and get nearly 5k words done. Feeling really proud. But as much as I want to relax and celebrate. I feel like I better not take anything extra besides just stopping for today. Don’t want to fall and slow progress again.
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My goal is to finish chapters 1-2 to my game and Start development on chapter 3. Most of the writing is going well but my code needs some work.
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Found an old reply of mine that represents my monologue when sharing my work. More accurate now than ever before.
“And it’s an early draft, so it’s probably garbage. I’ll edit it later. But please tell me it’s good. My entire self esteem hinges on this. But it’s garbage, so you shouldn’t read it. Except if you don’t, I’ll assume you hate it. And if you read it and tell me it’s good, I won’t believe you. And if you read it and tell me it’s bad, I’ll remember that forever. And I’m going to check back every few minutes and see if you’re writing feedback. But that’s okay, no pressure.”
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Are you a fan of Osamu Dazai and Flowers of Buffoonery by any chance? If not, I think you’d enjoy his work and that novella in particular. This monologue sounds just like him, and part of what makes his work such a treat. 
@Shaco welcome to the Forum! Best of luck with your chapters. 
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Well fuck!! Good job!! XD look at you knocking your goals out of the park!
Ain’t that always the way. If you’re writings good, code needs work, if the code is solid, the writing needs work. But hey, you’re working on it!
HAHAHAHAHA OMG THATS LIKE, YES. OKAY. that is EXACTLY how I feel when someone is reading one of my babies.
Okay, not gonna lie, for two seconds my elder weeb ass was like, “does she mean the suicidal guy from Bungo Stray Dogs?” And then I realized, no. You meant the actual author that guy is BASED off of, and that you were making a really insightful literary recommendation, and I felt like that gif of a dude putting on clown makeup. 
Anyway, how’s ya’lls morning?
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I’m feeling good despite having a headache, because a) the weather is awesome today! and b) my thesis is going through the grading steps now. I don’t think I can write though, since, you know, the headache.
(I kind of want to play Royal Affairs because I haven’t finished it yet, but I still have the headache.)
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I’m a little late this month but thanks as always for the thread, articles, and interesting topics to think about @Eiwynn 
My goal for the month is to keep on trucking. By which I mean my goals are flexible this month as long as I accomplish the basics 
Good luck to everyone!
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No, no, I too was at the devil’s sacrament, as the tumblrites say. My pipeline was “who’s this author in the vampire historical fiction romance game” → “huh, I really like him in Bungo Stray Dogs and ship with Chuuya” → “I guess I’m temporarily getting a Crunchyroll account to watch Bungo to Alchemist” → “I will raid my library for all their early 20thc. Japanese literature right now immediately.” I also recently saw a new translation and short story collection where the blurb outright says “Perfect for fans of Bungo Stray Dogs!” I felt so called out I bought it…and entertained my partner for our whole dinner afterwards with my opinions on the translator, his career, his college, and his choice of stories in the collection. She joked I’m putting myself through a one person literature class on Dazai. 
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This . . . sounds really amazing. My city’s museum is pretty much my favorite place; sadly its set to be torn down and moved to a new building with new exhibits within a few years, so this story premise is definetly giving me all the feels, especially with the time lapse bit. I just imagine the people I went to the museum with in the begining (grandparents, childhood friends, etc.) that are just not around a couple decades later. Sounds like lots of reading between the lines and lots of fuel for thought and emotions. Good luck. I’ll admit the title was kind of scarring me off from trying it as I assumed it was christmas themed, but this sounds great and I’ll have to give it a read when I get a chance soon.
All the time, but I really need to do a better job at keeping these ideas and being more organised at the keeping thereof. Other than worries about censorship and how the writing life is going to change with the arrival of better and more advanced AI all the time, I think this is the easiest era to be a writer in - there’s just so much matterials and ideas everywehre to mix and spring board off of. I stand in serious continual awe of the great writers of yesteryear that did this all without any internet, with no computers, with smaller libraries . . . major respect.
Think we’ve all been there.
This sounds like my modus operandus. I need to be permanently barred from buying books from all online and local stores forever as theres no way I’ll ever read through all these, no matter how great I think they’ll be. But I advocate for at least a little research making okay writing into good writing and hopefully good writing into great writing. . … though it can be exhausting fun too.
I feel like I’m finally on track to get my goals moving for the month. Some small updates on Sense & Sorcery today, no idea how much, but after taking a few months off its nice to reacquaint myself with the characters, the setting, the plots, the themes, the variables, and make actual progress . . . which always feels a bit like jumping off a cliff at first, but as it starts to come together there is a such a sense of yayyyy!
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@Zodac01 Thank you! Yes, you totally get it - over time your family changes, the museum changes, some changes are welcome, some are not, but they’re all connected. May I ask: what made it sound Christmas themed (I’m Jewish so maybe I don’t get the association)?
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Gift shop = shopping for gifts, I’d imagine? Since Christmas is associated with presents. But I’m not the one you asked, so.
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Yes, that’s exactly it. Not saying you should change the title or anything as the title makes sense in context and kind of wraps around to the idea of the museum and the journey of life being gifts, a la gift shop.
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