Bootlegger (W.I.P.)

Well I’ve sat down a played through the story, and you got a good concept and neat characters. I’ll say what I say to a lot of these wips, it’s got potential, a lot of it, though at the moment that’s about it. The story so far from what ive read feels really dosconnected, I never really felt like I was playing a character, rather just a guy walking through the story. The time period feels weirdly liberal for a historical setting. like there was a female officer and I don’t know much about the probation time period but that sounds like something that wouldn’t happen, though I may be wrong if someone wants to site something. Though the main issue as I said, the game felt really disconnected and a rushed. I often got lost as to what exactly was happing with all the jumps and unclear chapter transitions (I honestly had no clue I had entered another chapter till I hit the end of the game). So over all I’d say the story is far from done and proably deserves a bit of a rewrite paying more attention to the smaller details, add in a few buffer scenes maybe flesh out our character a bit more things like that.

Though as I also said, it’s a good start. Then again you don’t really have to listen to anything I have to say as I’m not really much of a writer nor have I gotten this far in a project before. Best of luck mate :wink:

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