Well it’s certainly gonna be a bit of a rough time for the MC, that’s for sure. Though this time they’ll have a much stronger support system around them. The power of friendship and of found families, for as corny as it is, is definitely a major trope in this story.
And Thanks for catching those, I’ll get to fixing them! (Although bag was purposeful, I might consider changing it to hag)
Oh, didn’t know. I have never heard it used like that before so found it weird. 
Really? Huh, I guess that’s more of a local turn of phrase then! It’s funny how regional dialects work like that.
Yay!!! I have been checking on this wip regularly…so good! I am reading the new demo now…when you finally see Landon in the first few pages, i believe ge is referred to as “his’s”? Is that intentional? Anyway…great work!!! 
This was good and I am interested to see where this goes.
Here’s all the stuff I found that need fixing:
tonight’s
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rum
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delete
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delete
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Not sure if something else is supposed to be here or not.
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delete, no need to use ‘off’ twice.
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tellate…?
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bandana
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her
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daylight
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on
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This could be intentional, but I’m including it just in case.
Thank y’all so much for the help! I will get on fixing those typos right away.
EDIT: Typos should be fixed!
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