FH is pretty damn good, I agree. Haven’t gotten the full sequel yet- and I hold Mind Blind in high praise, too, just to name a couple.
May I ask how I could emphasize the damage? I really don’t want MC to seem like a damsel. 
I could make the fight last a little longer after than inital rescue… It wouldn’t throw too much off, even if MC still passes out.
The end chapters have, probably by comparison, more action than everything before it. Hm.
@Queen_Zelda Thank you! I know its impossible to satisfy everyone and I certainly won’t try to for that reason. I have the time to make adjustments and addtions, I just wanna take advantage of that while I can!
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Are you/your hands okay? I’ve not been on the thread in a couple of days, is everything alright?
I’m fine, thank you! They’ve just been cramping a lot this past week or so. I’ve had to work slower than I already do because of it 
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You probably should give your hands a break for a while. You’ve been putting out new chapters like they’re hot pancakes
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Don’t worry! The most I tried today was draw, which didn’t bother my hands so much, actually. I decided today would be for minimal/low-effort writing. So I’ve been using it see about changing some things, like the fight in 17.
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Yeah I hope you have plenty of rest, I got some light RSI on my right hand a few years ago and now use two mouses so I can take the load off my right hand, take care of yourself.
Also for the fight scenes overall make it longer, let the MC fight a bunch of gargoyles, takes 1, 2 or 3 down, lots of hits and pain and then loses, that makes more sense. Fighting just one and losing in a page in a small paragraph is super weak, even with a broken arm. The fight paragraph was way too short. For a minor edit that should work.
For a more major edit let the MC get ambushed alone and desperately fight off multiple gargoyles, beating a few like an actual deadly ex hunter with the title God Hunter but getting overwhelmed due to fatigue, a concussion and a broken arm. Then they get rescued perhaps, this will show a more intense fight scene and despite losing will still show the other characters how deadly and dangerous the MC is when a wounded human can take out 2 or 3 gargoyles in an unfair ambushed fight.
Whiskey Four and FH does fight scenes very well, the MCs are able to dish out damage and takes down lots of people but also gets hit and gets severely damaged in the process.
No, I totally get it. This is sparking some ideas actually. 
Operation: Make MC More Badass, Go!
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CH17 is on the way! Also…a little… PSA, so to speak. (Please read the warning first!)
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WARNING: Difficult topic mentioned below. Ending one’s own life mentioned, but NOT described in ANY vivid detail.
This chapter, toward the end, comes with a choice that very briefly talks about ending one’s life. I do mention this in the content warnings, but for those who don’t look at that, I’m making this post. I will mention it again when I make another post upon uploading.
I’m almost done, however, with this chapter. I hope this doesn’t make me look sloppy, to have done such a significant rewrite. But if it does, I don’t blame ya’ll. I’d probably think the same from your perspective.
I already planned to rewrite the ending some, because I wasn’t totally happy with the “final fight” but now… I think it’s gonna work. Mhm.
And here’s a little amusing bonus. A friend of mine was reading and just made me chuckle. They also find a lot of mistakes that have been missed orz
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CH17 is out!
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I think I got everything? Idek why I bother saying this when, 9/10, I’ve put in the wrong bracket or missed a pronoun or something :')
ANYHOW! This chapter is a touch lengthy, at least I think so. It has more choices, more fighting, more context to future events. So weee. However, as a warning as mentioned before, it does have a BRIEF and passing mention of MC possibly having had thoughts of ending their own life. While it’s of course optional, I’m warning ya’ll anyway. So, if you wanna give it a whirl, point out mistakes and errors I missed, click here! I did fix a couple in CH3 that my friend pointed out.
Yall better flood my inbox- I’m kidding.
But, as before, this remains THE FINAL SOLO CHAPTER to be uploaded. Everything else will be uploaded all at once. Meaning it’ll be some time before the final update. In the meantime, I’ll be reviving my Patreon, working on other projects in preparation however possible, finishing the last chapters, and maybe dabble in Book 2 here and there.
Edit: Link updated since I just found out CoGDemo changed their links.
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You know, it still bothers me how the question about the television when searching the house is treated so flippantly. If there’s not television, that could indicate that entertainment is streamed, which indicates that there’s a phone or a computer. Which may have information on it relating to the case. It would or could be very important to locate those devices. It’s not a frivolous question.
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Understandable. I can see about adding this where possible so it’s at least mentioned. It honestly didn’t occur to me. Either because it simply didn’t or my mind was thinking at the time that he didn’t watch any sort of TV. 
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