I’ll hone down on this one.
Specifically, the first and second page of the book is the make-or-break for me. If the first and second pages do not present the theme/conflict that was promised to me in the premise, I’m closing the book then and there. It’s a habit of mine because my eyes can get tired easily.
Sometimes the author can pull the strings despite having such a plot. I’m fond of cookie-cutter romance novels; it’s the characters that keeps me reading. Same goes with interactive fiction: so long as you have a compelling and lovable cast, you can put them anywhere as uninteresting as a repetitive office job or elsewhere.
For me, it’s more like having too many unnecessary stats that you can already tell that most are just for flavor. Here is a nice thread about stats by @Sargent with an in-depth analysis by @Brian_Rushton . I highly recommend those
- Info dump! This one is self explanatory.
Apart from these, I don’t have much to add. Your list is basically the core of what breaks reader immersion , at least for me 