I take it back. I was not ready…
Jeez Samuel, that part with Efastia hit me hard. More so than the rest. Damn, that was hard to read. I feel sad now that almost everyone is dead, yet a part of me is: “Hey, it would be more dramatic to let Devero live, I’ll try that next time!”
Good job, you broke me.
Time to put The Who’s “Behind Blue Eyes” and settle in for a read before sleep …
“My dreams are as empty as my consciousness seems to be… My love is vengeance and its never free … when I smile tell me some bad news before I laugh and act the fool …”
OH.MY.GOD. Samuel you are a genius…
There are no words to describe what I’m feeling right now…
I’m so glad i kept up with you since the very beginning, can’t wait for “The Cruel wizard”,
And the other scenes from MMM.
This is the closest to describing what I’m feeling right know.
Awesome. I’ve got a 6:20am flight, tomorrow. I guess I won’t be sleeping before a presentation to Chinese gov’t officials…
Action-packed ending, rushed and predictable yet I enjoyed it. @Samuel_H_Young here is a coding error for you. I was playing as a Voodoo Mage.
Wow. Phew. Samuel, you’re a fucking genius.
That climax was unexpected, I must say. I thought we’d have a good chance of dying or being caught, but the MC became a OP wizard all of a sudden. I wonder how it happened, is it because of the ultimate release of all the pent up anger, anxiety and need for vengeance that triggered something inside us and boosted our magic and abilities? Or is it something else entirely that’ll be explored in the sequels?
I also kind of hoped for a little bit of flavor dialogue between the MC and the RO (i.e. Cherihl, in my playthrough). It didn’t look like they had much of a different reaction than the rest of them during all that ruckus. Especially during the humiliation session and when I chose to keep her alive and kill the other three. I’m guessing you do plan to add special text for each of the ROs?
All in all, that was a hell of a satisfying ending. I almost felt bad for the MC desperately trying to get to Edina, but then once that happened, he somehow became a complete superhuman. That was amazing.
Congrats on finishing the story, by the way!
Omg, this is the best demo I have ever read.
Well, after not having played this game in months, I played the more or less almost completed game and I only have this to say;
https://i.pinimg.com/originals/fb/14/7d/fb147d17dbe13bf3b0e6167682f5dbda.gif
(Was going to use a different gif of someone clapping, but then I saw Heath Ledger’s Joker and I thought, probably suits here, despite obvious reasons)
Nevertheless, it’s weird you started this in May and you are now finished, cause this is a pretty damn good masterpiece. And remember when I said wanted something bad to happen to my MC…I changed my mind; I want that sadistic son of a bitch to get what’s coming to him next game cause Jesus Christ have you made him OP. Once again, a brilliant game which you deserve credit for.
Now to ruin your feeling with some typos and constructive feedback 
This is just me, but I feel this is is better ( ‘severe’). The double quotations feels like you are exaggerating but again, that’s me.
Might be missing an ‘and’ or ‘or’ (cannot tell for sure).
Well, just forgetting ‘a’ in charisma.
Forgetting ‘r’ in your.
Feel like the sentence I.e. the MC’s train of thought will flow better if it went “ This would exonerate you once and fall all…or, at least until you murdered your next victim.”
This is just me again, but I feel capitalising “Arosnist” and “Cat Bulgar” seems right (given the story and whatnot, but again that’s me).
Same as the above.
The ‘I’ is not in capital
(Now note, this is kinda too late for me to give feedback and you don’t have to listen to me any further. I just thought to throw my two cents is all.)
Concerning Garad, some of the earlier choices with him, when trying to build a good rapport with him, I found to be too…intimate for my liking. Now I’m playing as a straight male, hence my reason. But, I just found it weird, for example, to when trying to comfort him with Margo’s ‘disappearance’, you could rub his shoulders, professionalism otherwise. But yeah, like I said straight male, so my argument can be moot. Also, I kinda found it weird when fighting him in the final battle and you use some gas to scare most of the guards, he’s says ‘You all are fired.’ Granted, it’s for hilarity but I feel it contrasts from his character.
Also;
I’m happy to see you took my suggestion to heart 
You know, I might as well be a twisted f**k, but I thought what if, you spit in his ears as well? I’ll show a different but similar example of what I mean later on
Yes, so now, I’ll let you feel like you are the greatest man on Earth. Once again, excellent work.
Edit: forgot to put this in the feedback, but I’ll leave it out in the open. When you decide to to murder pretty much everyone, I kinda expected at least one person to have survived . I mean, don’t let me tell how to run your story, but I would think having at least that ‘reminder’ factor could go hand in hand with the Next game. You know, try and reveal weaknesses on the MC. Again, just me nitpicking but at the same time, food for thought.
Oh almost forgot, you truly have a dirty mind (but I mean it in a good way 
).
@Samuel_H_Young
In chapter 13.
Devero lurches back, his face a picture of pure horror as hiss
His
Then I’m sure no one will beleive
Believe
Garad glenches his jaw
Clenches
i’m at a loss for why you were on the team to begin with
Capitalise the bolded word.
but I just didn’t want any more innocent poeple to die
People
You can feel one of his ribs crack under your fist, and as she double
he, doubles
the fresh air os like
Is
and there’s a sheethed kitchen knife strapped
Sheathed
You would like to brn her
Burn
It seems that even as an inanimate ocorpse
Corpse
As you make your way down to the houe
House
Edit
you see fhte first
The
looks like you have no other option; you’ll have to duck and weave between these idiots to get passed them.
Pass
every other room on the first floor and fidning
Finding
The gaurds let out shouts of shock
Guards
After breaking awat
Away
I’ve never been so hyped up for a demo before and honestly this is the best I’ve ever read hands down. I encountered an error in chapter 13- I managed to bring my MC’s charisma up to 103 and this brought up an error in the death of Edina scene.
Ok. Now that was intense.
Disagreed
Thanks to everyone who left their thoughts or pointed out my typos. It’s great to see how much you all have enjoyed the game, especially the climax. 
@VainCorsair It’s meant to move a breakneck pace, but I admit there are some places that need to be smoothed over a bit. That’s something I’ll be focusing on before I submit this to HG.
@soprano
It’s funny, when I started this 6 months ago, I planned on the MC dying no matter what. They could go out swinging, surrender and get executed publicly, or commit suicide. But then I thought…nah, lemme do something more epic and make this into a trilogy.
The MC becoming a wizard after killing Edina is a manifestation of how she was holding them back. They presumably would have made this transformation long ago, but they needed to rid themselves of their psychological shackles to unleash their real potential.
I’ll be adding more choices and variations throughourt the last few chapters for if the MC romanced an RO, but only after I’ve posted the sex scenes.
@MIGsey
The MC flirting with Garad is innapropriate, but he is an RO. 
The MC leaves one of the ROs alive just to spite them.
@koshi
Well dayum. I’ll have to look into that tonight.
@Creator
At least as far as fiction is concerned, I stand by what I said. It’s impossible to create a brand new plot or a brand new character type.
@samuel_h_young
In chapter 13.
you insert it in betwee the door and the frame,
Between
followed not far behind by a feirce
Fierce
do you see Edina sitting in the corner of the room by open trap door
Put ‘the’ after the bolded word.
Edit
With a derisive scoff, you sheeth
Sheathe
Surely that is incorrect, an infinite number of conceptual physical and metaphysical objects, arrangements and events must exist within fictitious spacetimes, their very being conditioned purely by the boundless, omnipotent author’s will. Theoretically, the number of possible outcomes is infinite, because an author can create any natural number of conceptual spacetimes, moreover the author possesses the capacity to tackle any abstraction, unbound by the laws of reality.
I sooo can’t wait for official release!!!
Hence why I said the argument was moot. Don’t worry, I ain’t complaining
Also (because for some reason, I can’t highlight your spoiler and quote), you can !?!?!?!? Damnit, now I should have killed Abella last. Whoops 
. Unless, do you need to pass a relationship check, might be confused here.
Also some chapter 13 typos;
You grip the edge of the doorway, spittle flying from your mouth and the veigns bulging in your neck as you scream at the top of your lungs.
veins
When you finally crawl out into the grass, the fresh air os like magic to your tortured lungs.
is
Garad just scoffs and shakes his head in disgust, while Devero bals, “I would have risked my life for you! How could you possibly do that?”
bawls
Devero, who had been suqeezing his eyes shut and bracing himself for the death blow, suddenly opens his eyes.
squeezing
Garad pants like a dog, staring at the fallen blade in shock as hre realizes what this means.
he
@Samuel_H_Young
In chapter 13.
As you rise slowly to your feet, you feel an unfathomable power well up inside you, pressing and nudging and begging to get out, to wreak ravoc
Havoc
That’s rich, coming from a lunatic who should have executed by now!
Have been
