The Martian Job -- BETA TESTERS NEEDED

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You’ve kept yourself clean tending bar for the past few years, ever since you were released from prison. Unfortunately, the bar has suddenly gone out of business, and when an old friend comes calling with an offer for one last heist…how can you refuse? Especially when the target is the first casino on Mars!

Email me, jason AT choiceofgames for access. DO NOT SEND ME A MESSAGE THROUGH THE FORUM MAIL SYSTEM. When you send your EMAIL, include your forum-name, your real name, and the game you want to test.

DO NOT POST ASKING WHAT MY EMAIL ADDRESS IS. The first test to becoming a beta tester is inferring what it is based on the above paragraph.

(You cannot be testing two games at once. Send feedback on one and you can apply to another.)

I will send you a link, a username, and a password.

Return feedback TO ME. Preferably part of the same thread, rather than a new email.

I’m looking for “high level” and “low level” feedback. Not mid-level feedback.

Low-level = typos and continuity errors. A continuity error is when a character’s gender flips, or someone comes back from the dead, or you run into a plotline that just doesn’t make sense (because it’s probably a coding error).

For these low-level issues, SCREENSHOTS are VERY HELPFUL. If you see a problem, take a screenshot, or copy and paste the text that is in error, and email that. Also, the “BUG” button is great; but if you use BUG, make sure to say in your email who you are, so I can give you credit for the report.

“High level” feedback has to do with things like plot, pacing, and characters. “Scene A didn’t work for me because x, y, and z,” is useful feedback. “B character was entirely unsympathetic, because u, w, and v,” is also useful feedback.

“Mid-level” feedback describes things like grammar, style, or the use of commas. As I said above, I do not want mid-level feedback. In particular, DO NOT WRITE TO ME ABOUT COMMAS.

“I had a great time and saw only a few spelling errors,” is not useful feedback. In fact, it’s the sort of thing that results in you not being given access to future betas.

Some examples of useful feedback:

In Choice of the Dragon, you get to choose what type of wings you have: leather or scaled. Someone wrote in and asked about having feathered wings. Great suggestion! Done!

In “The Eagle’s Heir,” someone asked about Eugenie. They said that the romance moved too quickly–because she only appeared in the last third of the game–and wished they could have had an opportunity to meet her earlier. So the authors added an opportunity to meet her and start the romance earlier in the game (in a scene that already existed).

In “Demon Mark: A Russian Saga” several people commented on how the PC’s parents were unsympathetic, so the authors added a choice or two to deepen the relationship with the parents in the first chapter, to help better establish their characters.

Similarly, pointing out a specific choice and saying, “this is who I imagined my character was at this particular moment, and none of these options seemed right for me. I would have liked an option to do X instead,” is really helpful feedback.

Another useful piece of feedback: if you choose an #option and then the results of that #option don’t make sense. Like, if you thought an #option might test one stat, but it seems to have tested a different one.

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#6

New draft posted!

  • fixed a loop in jacoby08
  • safe09 ch 310 - I rewrote this choice so it’s not a copy of jacoby08 ch 369 (as it turned out that it was possible to see both in a single playthrough)
  • every scene file has been touched
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#7

New draft posted!

  • Added more NPC-specific dialogue in Chapter 5 and Chapter 8
  • Added to the epilogue making the story timeframe clearer
  • Corrected typos
#8

New draft posted!

  • added more to the relationships in the Epilogue, including addressing breaking up
  • added a reference to a Resistance protest in Chapter 5
  • added more backstory to the Prologue
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#9

We’re still taking more feedback, but we’re not going to accept any more testers for this game.

Thank you everyone! You still have at least a week to get your feedback in.

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#10

Last draft before copyedit!

  • balanced difficulty
  • aded a brief mention to the epilogue regarding previous jobs
  • typos
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#11

Well, now the really last draft!

  • fixed a loop in Chapter 8
  • balanced difficulty
  • typos
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