Update was fantastic! Can’t wait for more 
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you
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@moderators If possible, could I please have the first post turned into a wiki so I can update it?
And also thanks y’all!! I’m glad people are excited for and enjoying the update <3
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Of course, that’s done 
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Thank you so much!!
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I finally got a minute to go in and edit the main post, so the demo link, word count, and content warnings should all be up to date!
Also–currently I’m looking for feedback on the stats I have so far in the game. I’ve been struggling to settle on personality stats that feel right to me. I want players to be able to build up the MC to feel like they have a distinct personality, as well as be able to have a variety of MCs that can be played.
I’m looking to see if anyone has thoughts on how the personality stats feel so far? And if something feels clunky, do you think there are any changes I could make to the stats that might build up your character better?
Any insights would be appreciated!
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I actually really like what you’ve done with the stats so far, the result ends up being something I feel comfortable with for my MC. I know this probably isn’t helpful, but I just wanted to comment how I felt
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@Leoxen Oh, thank you! Don’t worry, positive feedback is helpful, too!! I’m mostly trying to figure out if I want to adjust anything and if so, how. Knowing if people like the current system does really help <3
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So, posting an update because I certainly don’t want this wip to look abandoned when it’s being consistently worked on!!
I’ve posted this elsewhere on the forums but I went through a fairly bad period of writer’s block last month. That, on top of a personal loss, work, and mental health has made the next update slower coming than I’d prefer.
But, chapter one part two is currently over 30k words long. It has five branching paths (the intention is to allow the player to explore the town and/or get to know another character better) before coming back together at the end. I’ve been hard at work and I can’t wait for the everyone to get to play it <3
My goal is to get the update out in the next few weeks here!
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I do love a good horror story. I really enjoyed your premise and was very interested to read.
It’s very well written, a lot of descriptions and fleshed out scenes that made me feel like I was the character, which I’ve found doesn’t always happen with other stories. It didn’t feel rushed, the scenes seemed to flow well. I’m looking forward to reading more.
One thing I noticed was in the relationship panel it refers to Perri as a ‘she’ even though I selected male gender for them.
Perri Loveless. A man in his early 20s.
Perri: 30%
Perri seems a little on the shy side, though she’s friendly enough. You just recently met
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I love it, i love how it gives me a certain chill as I read 
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@CelticWolfCub Thank you so much for the kind words!! I’m definitely glad to hear that the pacing and immersion worked well, and that you’ve enjoyed it so far! Thank you as well for the bug report; I’ll get that all fixed up for the next update!
@Otaku_Mode Thank you! It always makes me really happy when readers find the story creepy!!!
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This is a good story so far, as I am a great fan of horror. I too, would like to 2nd the poster that suggested the cheat mode, perhaps a simple toggle option in the stats menu that will allow you to max out the main 6 attributes? Other than that, great stuff.
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@Denzil_Melgior_Nagel Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed!! It’s definitely something I’m considering (as well as a toggle for showing stat changes as they happen); though they likely wouldn’t be implemented for a bit here yet!
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UPDATE:
- Added Wordcount: 22,542 (136,838 total)
- New content warnings updated on main post.
- Deepest apologies, but you’ll have to start a new save due to new/updates variables <3
- This is a smaller part of a larger update that I figured I’d stop hanging on to while I finish the rest. As always, pointing out bugs and any other feedback are more than welcome! I hope you enjoy~
Updated Demo HERE
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Loved the update!
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@FabulousBlasphemer Ahh thank you! Glad to hear you enjoyed it c:
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Thanks for the update author, love your story.
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@Otaku_Mode Thank you so much!! I’m glad you’re enjoying the story <3
I think I missed a couple of updates, but that just means I get to play more new of it in one go!
Click here for stoff, and also thangs
“at”
Wandering apostrophe.
“hairs are”
The “P” isn’t italicised.
I’d like to take something, but I’m not gonna STEAL something. Any chance of us getting an option to ask if we can take something (even if it removes some of the more unique options, like the cellphone)?
Feels like there’s something missing here, maybe MC nodding an assent?
“sprang into existence”
Due to how it’s worded, the “it” in this sentence isn’t actually referring to anything. This’d be better as either “Shutting your eyes brings the […]” or “With your eyes shut, the ambient noises of the restaurant are brought into crisp focus.”
Law Student and True Crime are not increasing stats, I think. (Teacher is only increasing by 9%, but I presume it’s because you’re using Fairmath?)
“Sacred”?
“by”
Remove.
“by”
Two periods.
“by”
“parishioner”?
“They”
Also, inconsistency: this screen says I’m realising Yasmin’s necklace has a wedding ring, but it was already brought up at least once. Because people can tackle the library scenes in any order, I suggest moving spotting it to when you initially meet Yasmin (as that’s a fixed point), and altering the existing references to reflect already being aware of it.
“minutes”
Aaaaand that’s the end for now. I’m glad this fell back into my radar, it’s fun.
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