Tally Ho -- BETA TESTERS NEEDED


#1

As the valet/maid of Rory Wintermint, you must see to all of Rory’s needs during a rather trying visit to Aunt Primrose on her estate in the country. Intrigue, hijinks and shenanigans will all play a role during your sojourn there.

Can you join the elite service of servers? Will you arrange marriages or tear them asunder? How will Primrose’s peacocks fare in the Harvest Festival Exotic Animal Competition? And when the rain of muffins descends upon you, will your wit, attention to detail, and perseverance be enough to carry the day?

Email me, jason AT choiceofgames for access. DO NOT SEND ME A MESSAGE THROUGH THE FORUM MAIL SYSTEM. When you send your EMAIL, include your forumname, your real name, and the game you want to test.

(You cannot be testing two games at once. Send feedback on one and you can apply to another.)

I will send you a link, a username, and a password.

Return feedback TO ME. Preferably part of the same thread, rather than a new email.

I’m looking for “high level” and “low level” feedback. Not mid-level feedback.

Low-level = typos and continuity errors. A continuity error is when a character’s gender flips, or someone comes back from the dead, or you run into a plotline that just doesn’t make sense (because it’s probably a coding error).

For these low-level issues, SCREENSHOTS are VERY HELPFUL. If you see a problem, take a screenshot, or copy and paste the text that is in error, and email that. Also, the “BUG” button is great; but if you use BUG, make sure to say in your email who you are, so I can give you credit for the report.

“High level” feedback has to do with things like plot, pacing, and characters. “Scene A didn’t work for me because x, y, and z,” is useful feedback. “B character was entirely unsympathetic, because u, w, and v,” is also useful feedback.

“Mid-level” feedback describes things like grammar, style, or the use of commas. As I said above, I do not want mid-level feedback. In particular, DO NOT WRITE TO ME ABOUT COMMAS.

“I had a great time and saw only a few spelling errors,” is not useful feedback. In fact, it’s the sort of thing that results in you not being given access to future betas.

Some examples of useful high-level feedback:

In Choice of the Dragon, you get to choose what type of wings you have: leather or scaled. Someone wrote in and asked about having feathered wings. Great suggestion! Done!

In “The Eagle’s Heir,” someone asked about Eugenie. They said that the romance moved too quickly–because she only appeared in the last third of the game–and wished they could have had an opportunity to meet her earlier. So the authors added an opportunity to meet her and start the romance earlier in the game (in a scene that already existed).

In “Demon Mark: A Russian Saga” several people commented on how the PC’s parents were unsympathetic, so the authors added a choice or two to deepen the relationship with the parents in the first chapter, to help better establish their characters.

Similarly, pointing out a specific choice and saying, “this is who I imagined my character was at this particular moment, and none of these options seemed right for me. I would have liked an option to do X instead,” is really helpful feedback.


#2

#3

New draft posted, fixing some simple typos.


#4

New draft posted. All the edits were in the first chapter and on the stats screen.


#5

New draft posted!

  • typos/pronouns
  • Made it impossible to spend 20 minutes doing something during the foxhunt when you only have 10 minutes left.
  • Fixed issue with leaving the house twice in a row in ch. 4

#6

New draft posted!

  • Typos/pronouns
  • Various small spacing and transition issues
  • Consistency issue fixed if you try and fail to sneak into first class or second class coming out of third class on the train
  • Stat bumps now work the same whether you meet Figs in the cafe or the train
  • Achievement fixed for missing the train the second time regardless of why you miss it

#7

New draft posted!

  • Typos
  • Small continuity errors

#8

New draft posted!

(fuck you Discourse)


#9

New draft posted!

(fuck you Discourse)


#10

New draft posted!

  • Typo fixed
  • Fix in ch. 7 that made Frankincense react incorrectly to the peacocks.

#11

New draft posted!

  • Chicago style apostrophes.

#12

New draft posted!

(fuck you Discourse)


#13

New draft posted.


#14

New draft posted.