You want to meet the guy that wants to boil and bleed your virgin blood out of you?
My mind is blown @Sashira
You want to meet the guy that wants to boil and bleed your virgin blood out of you?
My mind is blown @Sashira
Yes!! Maybe heās not looking for human sacrifice, maybe he wants an apprentice! Let Seline learn sorcery and blast her enemies
Agreed! I know some people are into the whole bad boy sexual tension thing, and thatās cool, I just donāt want to have to go there if I donāt want to.
I love this beta and if you are willing to have me, I would love to beta test this game when its finished!
@elyneknight When you are finished with the story(writing, testing, polishing), do you plan to have it available to buy in app stores or free?
Because Iād buy it. I even would like to test it for you. I had fun playing a princess who I could have do like I did one timeā¦ Being chill with an intruder(well, in my head and my intruder at worst tracked in mud after getting the house wrong which the right one was across the street).
āHuh, there is someone/something in my floor. Talks to person in floor, then helps them get the stone out of the way Oh, here to kidnap me? Okay, Iāll play my part. terribly awkward attempt at a wink You wonāt get away with this, fiend!ā
Literally just clicked the link- I LOVE the artwork! Did you create it? Iām sure Iāll have feedback on the actual game, but I just have to say I love the aesthetic so far (Iām on the 2nd page, so really not much to say content wise)
Side note: Iād love to beta test for you
I agree with most of what Pace says here, still for me personally itās a shame we cannot be a kidnapped Prince instead.
So while this doesnāt seem like the game for me I wish you all the best with it and your writing style has got me intrigued enough to look forward to future projects/games from you that run a bit more to my taste.
this is soooo good i really enjoyed playing it, i loved how feisty i could play the princess and cant wait for more also would be more than willing to beta xx good luck xx
Thanks so much. These suggestions are brilliant! Iāve added the disclaimer to the web site already. The only thing I donāt think I can do is change Selineās physical attraction to Andreas, because the āunwillingly attractedā thing is kind of central to their interactions. I could however allow her to fight and suppress it more effectively. So, she canāt avoid feeling it to some extent, but she can control her actions enough to avoid flirting with him.
Iām doing revisions to hopefully give Seline some more creative and empowering options. Shamelessly stealing your idea of having him come through the window.
Iām still on the fence about the back button. Perhaps another possibility would be to allow 1-step backtracking, but no more?
I have thought a lot about female LIs. There are a couple of possibilities, but Iām not certain theyāll work naturally with the plot and character interactions. So Iām experimenting with them. I really donāt want it to seem tacked-on or artificial.
Again, thanks for your thoughts! They really were super helpful.
Iām really glad you said this, @Sashira (and sorry for the slow reply). This is actually my first attempt at writing anything romantic or erotic, let alone kinky, as well as my first attempt at IF - so Iām trying to walk a fine line with the consent issue! Itās very reassuring to know that aspect is working, at least for some ā Iām trying to give readers more latitude to avoid flirting with Andreas if they choose, but I also donāt want to neuter him.
And yes, I donāt think itāll ruin anything to say you will meet the sorcererā¦
One question Iād be very grateful for your (and other peopleās) advice on: how would you signal to readers the level of kink to expect in this story? Does ākinky romantic fantasyā capture it accurately? To be clear, thereās no direct non-con or BDSM here, but there are fairly clear suggestions of it, and for some people that could be enough to turn them off completely. So I donāt want to either fail to warn readers who find this kind of thing upsetting, or disappoint those who are looking for something more hardcore.
Thank you very much! And Iām so glad you liked the art ā itās just a bunch of photo mashups with gimp filters. I really wish I could draw!
Awesome, thank you!
Wow, thank you so much! It means a lot to me that someone would actually pay for my fiction. Not that I care about money, but itās really validating you think my work is worth it! I havenāt thought much about what to do when itās finishedā¦ maybe a free app with ads and a premium version without? Or something like thatā¦ Iāll have to do some research!
Itās funny to hear from someone whoās actually experienced an intruder like this. I was a bit worried people might be upset that I wanted to turn such a potentially traumatic experience into a romance (though I hope itās obvious the whole thing is pure silly fantasy). So Iām glad it wasnāt offensive to you!
And thanks for the offer to beta test, I will definitely take you up on that!
Something along the lines of kink-lite ahead or suggestive kink may apply?
Kink-allusive romantic fantasy or spicy/erotic romantic fantasy should also fit like a silken glove.
@elyneknight Well, my intruder wasnāt exactly one to be afraid ofā¦ An underage kid hoping to crash at his friendās place after a long night of partying and went into the wrong house(or maybe it was the right wrong one, he probably wouldnāt have received so nice a hostess I if he had gone into a different wrong house), gobbled up my hamburger, chugged a bottle of water, and then fell asleep on the couch leaving me devastated about my hamburger and the mud he tracked in and orchestrating my revenge in the form of the policeā¦
I did kinda offer him the hamburger after I noticed he broke a piece off, thoughā¦ I was too casual through the whole thing that the most traumatizing thing was the hamburger and mud.
The kidnapping in this story made me want the princess to react just as casually.
PS: Probably the most traumatizing thing for the princess would be the rug. āI liked that rug in that spot. It was perfect for not getting cold toes! Now what am I supposed to do?! ā
I smashed him with a vase. I threw books and perfume at him. Then I smashed the mirror to pieces and fucking stabbed him with the shards and he still wonāt let me go.
I mean, damn Andreas, give me points for dedication!
(this is a good time and Iād love to beta test)
Applause to @elyneknight. Very kinky and interesting. I am tempted for beta testing but I never beta test for any1 b4. So I am so looking forward if it have chance to be publish.
As for feedback. Very interesting, very kinky, replayable. How stray for the heir you actually intend to. I totally like the way you code it because no need to restart over and over again like some WIP which not yet have save slot. You can act back track and see the few options answer b4 decide the best 1 to preceed.
If you donāt mind someone new to beta test for you with no knowledge of coding and English not my primary language, so maybe grammar wise will be poor. Great story so far. Make me want to play again and again. Looking forward to the finish product of your brilliant work. Gud luck with beta testing. Hope can buy from app store/COG/hosted game or any book game publisher which you goes with. GAMBATEā:raised_hands:
Love Andreaā¦ hate the girlfriend. Love my best friend Rainš¢ and totally sad he hate me NOWš. Daddyā¦ you jerk, donāt bully Rain. Totally fall in love with your creation @elyneknight. Every choice intriguing. Keep up the good work.
Soā¦I want Nyora. Sure, she tries to maul your face and all, but sheās a lot more appealing to me than either Rain or Andreas. Presumably because Iām pretty darn gay.