So, I’m sure some of you are wondering when you will see some lyrics! The answer is Chapter Five. I’m still working on Chapter Four, which is a lot bigger than the other chapters, but took a break to write the lyrics for Baxter’s aggressive, fast song. Thoughts?
Trigger warnings: violence
I Kill Evil Politicians:
Summary
I caught a pedophile politician, took him from his hive Blunt force castration is his consequence until he dies I rounded up every politician who ever bombed foreign children Took a mallet, and with hundreds of blows, I caved their heads in I asked cops why they don’t protect us from ecocide or genocide One said he was just doing his job so I put a bullet in between his eyes I sacrifice hundreds of evil politicians to free their billions of ghostly victims I kill…I kill…I kill…Evil Politicians
this is begging for a scene where a designer makes a new logo for the band but they end up not being able to read the lettering because its too kvlt and dark so they have to soften the lettering to make it legible.
can’t tell you how many times I’ve seen band logos on concert posters and had NO FUCKING CLUE who they were…
Chapter Four is taking a loong time to write because of life reasons, and because it’s a lot longer than the other chapters due to the branching. So, I’m just going to post the first half for now and I should post the rest of the chapter in October. In this chapter, you get an eviction notice, then go to a signing party the next day at Barty’s studio, where you will record your single.
This update is 7k words, bringing the total wordcount to 44k. Hope you enjoy, and let me know if you have any feedback or find any bugs or typos.
You shakily bring a hand to your face, feeling a rush of dizziness that the flickering lights exacerbates.
exacerbate
Failure to comply to rental payment agreements.
comply with
The building erupts with cheers and shouts, and many people hoist their alcohol cups in the air.
I think ‘raise’ is a better word?
*choice
#Play foosball with Baxter
*finish
*goto tough_party
#Chill on a couch with Azure
*finish
*goto charisma_party
#Play pool with Tariano
*finish
*goto intelligence_party :rofl:
#See how a goth (Kizzy) dances
*finish
*goto deception_party
#Go search for Larry by yourself
*finish
*goto search
Why is *finish before the *goto? Not cool. There was someone I wanted to flirt with, and the game just ended on me even when the content was already done.
I’m cutting my forum activity again for the next few weeks. May not reply soon, but good luck.
I write so slowly that I’ve been working on this chapter for three months. So the flirting scenes won’t be ready til October. Thanks for pointing out these typos
I posted the rest of Chapter Four, 14k words, bringing the total word count of the demo to 57k. In the second half of this chapter, you choose to hang out with one of the band members at the party, or search for Larry. As always, I hope you enjoy, and feedback is much appreciated.
Good chapter! I liked how you took the time to explore the anxiety brought about by the eviction notice, as it added tension to the search for Larry, and how you called back to the possible union severance package to give the MC a little bit of hope. I also liked that even if the MC doesn’t spend time with any of the band members, we still learn more about them outside of music (such as Baxter being bad at foosball and Kizzy only drinking at home) to get a better picture of their characters.
I’m going to second the idea of Larry being a RO – both he and the MC make such wild decisions (from Larry stealing the Necrophone to the MC actually taking the talking, bloodthirsty mic in the first place) that they deserve each other.
Larry scrunches his nose up and sneers, “Necrophone?”
Almost this entire paragraph is italicized.
We’re about halfway through Meteoric, chapter wise and wordcount wise. How are we feeling about the characters, pacing, things like that so far? Are there things you’ve particularly enjoyed or disliked, and is there anything you would like me to keep in mind for the future, like types of choices or interactions you might like for later chapters? Thanks
If I may ask, what does the second half of the plot look like? So far, it feels like the mc has just barely gotten started. You join the band, get one show, get to know the other characters at a party for a bit, and then we’re already halfway through? I’m also guessing that the second half of the word count will be shorter in terms of single playthough time, as I’m assuming that there will be significant branching for both different ROs and different game endings.
It seems like there will be a lot to pack in the next 57k words for the mc to get their big break, rise further and shoot to stardom, while also fleshing out the romance arcs for each RO in full.
In each chapter, the story progresses further towards metal stardom and confrontations with Larry and Kanibor. Spoilers:
Summary
In Chapter Five, you’ll get your mic back from Larry, and go on a tour with your band and Barty’s band while still trying to deal with Kanibor. In Chapter Six, Kanibor comes out of the Necrophone. Chapters Seven and Eight are the final confrontations with Kanibor and Larry.
Writing doesn’t take much of a priority for me nowadays, and I’m not getting much enjoyment out of it anymore. I’ll be very slowly working on this story in my spare time but would like one of the @moderators to close this thread for me
There was someone I wanted to flirt with, and the game just ended on me even when the content was already done. 
So the flirting scenes won’t be ready til October. Thanks for pointing out these typos
