Just one thing to note, the *comment will not show up in -game. Did you place this by design?
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*set L_name "Lork"
*set L_surname ""
*set L_fullname "Lork"
*set l_title "gardsman"
*set L_they "he"
*set L_them "him"
*set L_their "his"
*set l_theirs "his"
*set L_theirself "himself"
*set l_gender "male"
*set l_person "man"
*set l_eyecolor "hazel"
*set l_hairlength "long"
*set l_haircolor "dirty blond"
*set l_hairstyle "shaggy"
*set l_hight "6 foot 3"
*set l_build "athletic, heavily mussled"
*set l_skincolor "dusky"
*set l_accent "unknown"
*comment Nathen
*set n_name "Nathen"
*set n_surname "Romonov"
*set n_fullname "Nathen Romonov"
*set n_title "specialist guardsman"
*set n_gender "male"
*set n_person "man"
*set n_they "he"
*set n_them "him"
*set n_theirs "his"
*set n_their "his"
*set n_themself "himself"
*set n_theirself "himself"
*set n_eyecolor " ice blue"
*set n_hairlength " short"
*set n_haircolor "brown"
*set n_hairstyle "pixi cut"
*set n_skincolor "pale"
*set n_hight "5 foot 8"
*set n_build "lean"
*set n_accent "Russion"
*comment Dilin
*set d_name "Dilin"
*set d_surname "Orvien"
*set d_fullname "Dilin Orvien"
*set d_title "gardsman"
*set d_they "he"
*set d_them "him"
*set d_their "his"
*set d_theirs "his"
*set d_theirself "himself"
*set d_gender "male"
*set d_person "man"
*set d_theirself "himself"
*set d_eyecolor " Ammatheste grean"
*set d_hairlength " medium length"
*set d_haircolor "black"
*set d_hairstyle "cue"
*set d_build "slender"
*set d_skincolor "olive"
*set d_accent "Jamaicon"
*comment Skarlet
*set sk_name "Skarlet"
*set sk_surname"frost"
*set sk_fullname "Skarlet Frost"
*set sk_gender "male"
*set sk_person "man"
*set sk_they "he"
*set sk_them "his"
*set sk_their "his"
*set sk_theirself "himself"
*set sk_eyecolor "midnight black"
*set sk_hairlength "long"
*set sk_haircolor "jet black"
*set sk_hairstyle "cropped"
*set sk_hight "5 foot 10"
*set sk_skincolor "pale"
*set sk_build "kirvy"
*set k_eyecolor "slaight grey"
*set k_hairlength "shoulder length"
*set k_haircolor "Ravenswing black"
*set k_hight "5 foot 6"
*set k_build "stockey"
*set k_skincolor " tanned"
*comment Ash
*set a_title "Frost"
*set a_they "she"
*set a_them "her"
*set a_their "her"
*set a_theirs "hers"
*set a_theirself "herself"
*set a_eyecolor "ice blue"
*set a_hairlength "medium"
*set a_haircolor "midnight black"
*set a_hairstyle "spiked"
*set a_hight "4 foot 11"
*set a_build "lean"
*set a_skincolor "ivery"
*comment Ivy
*set i_eyecolor " slaight grey"
*set i_hairlength "medium"
*set i_haircolor " blood red"
*set i_hairstyle "streight"
*set i_hight "5 foot 7"
*set i_build "wirey"
*set i_skincolor "pale"
*comment Goan
*set g_hight "6 foot 2"
*set g_eyecolor "dark blue"
*set g_skincolor "dark brown"
*set g_hairlength "short"
*set g_haircolor " brown"
*set g_build "stockey"
*set g_hairstyle "buzcut"
I like spending my time with men.
*goto breckfast_continue
I believe the error stems from having the two *set commands that are not indented into the code. Your original *choice needs to be a *fake_choice I believe to be able to continue with the code.