Excessive use of the words 'You' or 'Your'

[Eiwynn]

Hi Zach –

You are not alone in worrying about this. The following thread, while older now, might be useful as well to review:

The repetitive use of "you" in second person

I’m currently in the middle of writing my own game and I’ve run into a recurring problem. I’ve started writing it in second person and practically every sentence I use where the player’s character is doing an action involves me using some form of the word “you” repeatedly. An example would be: “After you’re done extending your legs, you check the clock to see you’ve been stretching for an entire thirty minutes!.” I’m unsure whether a reader would notice the repetitive use of it or not, but it d…

In my opinion, currently, your focus should remain on completing your manuscript, and once the copy is completed then you can make a dedicated pass for this/

Even if you don’t have an editor, the language tools, such as Hemingway, can be used to identify where words are reused “too closely together”, etc.

Of course, you’ll have to use your common-sense and interpretive skills to accept or reject their suggestions, but they can still be very helpful.