- I feel like your writing is pretty good so dont worry about that.
- And 3. I completely understand you on that.
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And Patreon is unreliable right now with the fact coming out that they’re making IOS users pay 30% more through a phone.
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Pffff Jesus christ!
dont worry google will also do that i am pretty sure , apple is always higher google just do the same always a bit later
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Just got pointed this way yesterday and I have to say I’m really looking forward to where you might take things.
As a suggestion though I don’t know if it was already planned, some acknowledgement of MC’s sudden muteness in the event of it happening post-delightful-corpse-swim would definitely add more impact to the event.
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From what is here so far this is a very interesting Game for sure and Im definitely looking forward to seeing more of it.
One criticism Id have, especially in the early scenes, scene and location transitions can be very jarring without anything there to really signify them or notify the reader that this is happening in a different place/time.
My suggestion would be adding some kind of Header that has the rough time/date and location when a transition to a new scene or location happens so readers know that this isn’t just a continuation of the previous scene. Especially during the throne room sequence where it jumped back to meeting Yakov/Liliya the transition felt really sudden and without the previous scene even really indicating that it was over.
I stumbled over this WIP by accident but I never was happier to do that xD MC’s siblings are so well-made, especially little Sasha (rest in peace, sweet soul…) and how you can shape your character is so amazing! I really find every RO fascinating, even when we don’t know much about them for now. And my MC was a very kind Lady-Commander and let everyone of the rebels live. (the loss of MC’s army was ‘gladly’ only 4 soldiers. rest in peace, comrades.)
If it’s alright, I’d like an option to have the suicide attempt scene without the CSA one.
Hey everyone. Life is bad as usual, but I want to let you know I’m still working on this project. The goal is to finish the prologue before the end of the year (meaning: scenes for all ROs and MC’s siblings will be added).
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Take care of yourself first and formost the project can take as long as necessary we can wait. 
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