@JimD “Your car engine stutters then shuts off, but the that’s the least of your worries” same as before soldier profession just passed the gas station on the way to the base. but the that’s is a typo I’m guessing…sorry first time had a chance to go through this new yp properly lol but hope it helps, but just posting as I find errors. "dirt masking his face. “Sir, the dead… they are returning to life,” he says and waves you on.
You pull the car long the road and round " should be along I think.
“standing, he hobbles forward on bent limbs with his arms held out, reaching. You level the pistol and squeeze the trigger. The top of Marty’s head spits off his skull” after shooting marty before the base should spits be splits?
playing as a soldier selected to go to the base but not gone yet and listening to the radio “three days and two nights on the beautiful island of Bermuda. On board our Atlantis cruise ship, enjoy our award-winning buffet or tempt your palette in one our five-star restaurants” missing an of
also playing with delusions “the boards. You peek outside and spot someone across the eying your house. The man holds a large umbrella” not sure if eying is spelt right and you missed out the word street this is when you preparing defences etc
“You sit at the desk in the living room and turn on your PC. The Internet stills run without” when you do research online should be still not stills
"Centers for Disease Control and Prevention urges people to take steps to prevent Zeta virus infections. Outbreaks of the Zeta virus disease have been documented in in the United " the repetition of in.b
"This shot means more. This zombie, this thing, has one purpose—to kill. This zombie, this thing, has one purpose—to kill. You can’t " same playthrough still just went round to tackle zombie in open, the repetition.
"the trigger. The weapon jolts. A dark spot opens on the zombie’s head, and his snaps backward. " same situation still you missed the word head.
"the undead creature, and they take turns hitting it with pipes and aluminum bites, " when that punk gang attack the zombie still same chpt know it’s not a mistake but what’s a bite? if you replaced bites with bats that’d make sense to me.
“We better clean up.” You spend several minutes clearing the broken wood and shards of glass but will need to repair the damage, at least enough to keep the infected when they try to break in again." start of chpt 2 keep the infected out?
"the state. For those of you running low on food and supplies, the Red Cross is setting up mobile stations to deliver necessary goods, but they ask for patience. Resist the urge to venture outside until the " the 2nd time you check the tv should be to resist.
""We now turn scientific correspondent, Dr. Sadhana Seshadri. " same situation sameerror missing a to.
"Your stomach churns and throat feels dry, " think you are missing a your. and that’s from chpt1 when you’re first in your house.
"In the back is Mrs. Ortega, who a middle-aged woman who lives " the scene where the mob is demanding the son your missing an is, should be who is a.
same scene "“Kelly, this is Michael,” Tommy says. "He’s a solder in the Army " misspelling of soldier.






